Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 답변이 질문에 직접적으로 대답되어 있으나 문법과 표현이 어색합니다. 문장을 자연스럽게 만들기 위해 관사(예: "the park"), 어순, 과거 습관을 나타내는 표현(예: "used to")을 사용하세요. 또한 추가 세부사항(어떤 활동을 했는지, 왜 공원이 적었는지)을 하나나 두 문장으로 연결어(예: "so", "because", "instead")를 사용해 덧붙이면 더 풍부한 답변이 됩니다.

예시: I didn't go to parks very often when I was a child because there weren't many in Busan. Instead, my family usually went to the beach, where we would swim and have picnics on weekends.

제안: 직접적으로 부정했지만 표현이 부자연스럽고 반복이 많습니다. 부정문을 좀 더 정중하게 말하고 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 예를 들어 모기 때문에 싫다고 할 때는 모기가 많아 불편하다는 점과 그로 인한 경험(물린 적, 눈에 띄게 불편했던 상황)을 간단히 덧붙이세요. 연결어(예: "because", "so", "which makes it")를 사용해 문단을 정리하세요.

예시: I don't really enjoy going to parks nowadays because there are often a lot of mosquitoes. They bite me frequently, which makes being outdoors uncomfortable.

제안: 의도는 긍정적이지만 문장이 어색하고 모호합니다. 'more creative parks'가 의미하는 바를 구체적으로 설명하세요(예: 테마공원, 조경, 어린이 시설). 또한 자신의 바람을 분명히 표현하고 이유를 덧붙이면 설득력이 높아집니다. 연결어(예: "because", "for example")를 사용해 구체적인 아이디어를 제시하세요.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks, especially creative ones with interesting landscaping and play areas. For example, themed gardens or interactive installations would make the city more attractive and encourage people to spend time outdoors.

제안: 답변이 일관성이 부족합니다(처음에는 공원을 싫어한다고 말하다가 나중에 가고 싶다는 표현). 우선 입장을 명확히 한 뒤 이유와 구체적 장소를 제시하세요. 'inside place' 대신 실내 공간을 구체적으로 말하고, 동쪽 지역의 어떤 공원인지 또는 어떤 점이 편안한지(예: 그늘, 카페 근처)를 설명하면 좋습니다.

예시: I usually prefer indoor places, so I'm not very keen on parks. However, I would like to visit some parks on the east side of the city because they are quieter and have shaded seating areas that feel comfortable and cozy.

× When I was a child, I didn't go park often because there were not many parks in Busan.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't go to parks often because there were not many parks in Busan.

The verb 'go' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by a place (preposition error). Use 'go to parks' or 'go to the park'. Also 'not many parks' is acceptable. Suggestion: include 'to' after 'go' to indicate movement toward a place.

× Instead, my family usually went to the beach where we could swim and have picnics.

✓ Instead, my family usually went to the beach where we could swim and have picnics.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. The definite article 'the' before 'beach' is appropriate because it refers to a specific local beach. Maintain usage.

× No, I don't like this because whenever I go to the park I bite a mosquito by a mosquito and so many.

✓ No, I don't like them because whenever I go to the park I get bitten by mosquitoes and there are so many of them.

Several issues: 'this' is vague—use 'them' to refer to bugs/mosquitoes (pronoun reference). 'I bite a mosquito by a mosquito' is incorrect passive/active formation; the correct expression is 'I get bitten by mosquitoes' (passive voice). Also plural 'mosquitoes' is needed (singular/plural). Use 'there are so many of them' to refer back to bugs. Suggest practicing passive structure 'get bitten by' and correct pronoun references.

× There are so many bugs. I don't like this.

✓ There are so many bugs. I don't like them.

'This' is a singular pronoun and doesn't correctly refer to the plural noun 'bugs'. Use 'them' to refer to plural antecedents. Suggest matching pronoun number to the noun it refers to.

× Yes, maybe the more creative, the more parks is so very beautiful, I think, but I want to go there or make it.

✓ Yes, maybe more creative parks would be very beautiful, I think, and I would like to visit them or help create one.

Multiple problems: 'the more creative, the more parks' is ungrammatical (sentence structure/comparison misuse). 'The more X, the more Y' requires parallel structure and clear nouns. 'Parks is' has subject-verb agreement errors and wrong article usage. Rephrase to 'more creative parks would be very beautiful'. 'I want to go there or make it' is vague—specify 'visit them or help create one'. Suggest simplifying and using conditional/modal 'would' and correct plural agreement.

× No I don't like parks. I love inside place. Maybe parks in in east side. I want to go there. It is so comfortable and cozy.

✓ No, I don't like parks. I prefer indoor places. Maybe the parks on the east side are nice. I want to go there because they are comfortable and cozy.

Several issues: 'I love inside place' is ungrammatical—use 'I prefer indoor places' (adjective form and plural). 'Maybe parks in in east side' has repeated 'in' and incorrect preposition/article—use 'the east side' and 'parks on the east side'. 'It is so comfortable' refers to plural 'parks', so use 'they are'. Maintain present tense preference. Suggest using 'prefer' for general likes, correct prepositions ('on the east side') and ensure pronoun agreement with plural nouns.