Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Keep the answer natural and concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use past tense consistently and avoid repeating words (e.g., “playing” twice).

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My parents often took me there on weekends, and I especially enjoyed swinging on the swings and playing football with other neighborhood children.

제안: Answer directly and briefly, then explain with a specific reason. Use correct grammar (present simple or present continuous) and avoid long, awkward phrases. Keep to two or three sentences and use a linking word such as 'but' to show contrast.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy parks, but I rarely go because I work more than 12 hours a day. When I do visit, I like to relax and go for a short walk to clear my mind.

제안: Start with a clear position (yes/no) and give 1–2 specific reasons. Avoid contradicting statements and filler words. Use concise linking phrases like 'because' and 'maybe in the future' to show reasoning and possibility.

예시: Not really, because there are already a few parks near me and I don't have much free time due to work. However, I might appreciate more parks in the future if I have children and need family-friendly spaces.

제안: Be specific about places and correct names. Give one clear example and a reason why you want to visit. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'because' to make your answer coherent.

예시: Yes, I want to visit parks in other countries because I love traveling. For example, I would like to see Golden Gate Park in San Francisco because I have read that it has beautiful gardens and activities for visitors.

× I like playing with the swings and playing with the kids around the park.

✓ I liked playing on the swings and playing with the other kids in the park.

The question asks about childhood habits (past). Use past tense 'liked' not 'like'. Also use correct prepositions: 'on the swings' and 'in the park'. Use 'other kids' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× In my personal views about going to the park now since I'm already adult, if you will going to ask me, I'd love to go to the park but with my situation which I have to work for more than 12 hours.

✓ In my personal view, now that I'm an adult, if you ask me, I'd love to go to the park, but I have to work more than 12 hours a day.

Use 'view' not 'views' for this expression; 'now that' indicates a present reason. 'I'm an adult' requires the article 'an'. Use simple present 'if you ask me' for conditional general situations. Replace awkward clause with 'I have to work more than 12 hours a day'. Remove unnecessary words. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× I think I would not like to see more parks in my city because as far as I know there's not much parks around here and I don't have much time because I'm working and I'm busy most of the time.

✓ I don't think I would like to see more parks in my city because, as far as I know, there aren't many parks around here, and I don't have much time because I work and am busy most of the time.

Use negative prediction 'I don't think I would...' rather than 'I think I would not...'. 'There aren't many parks' corrects 'there's not much parks' by using plural 'parks' and 'many'. Use simple present 'I work' for habitual action and 'am busy'. Grammar problem type ID: 3

× Uh, maybe in the future when I will have a kid.

✓ Maybe in the future when I have a child.

In time clauses referring to the future, English uses present simple ('when I have') not 'when I will have'. Also 'child' is more natural than 'kid' in this register. Grammar problem type ID: 7

× In the future, since I love traveling, I would like to see different parts in different countries, especially in America.

✓ In the future, since I love traveling, I would like to see different places in different countries, especially in the United States.

Use 'places' or 'parts' depending on meaning; 'places' is clearer. 'America' is ambiguous; 'the United States' is more precise. Tense and modal 'would like' are appropriate for future desire. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× I want to visit in San Francisco, UMM where I read some articles that they have beautiful parks.

✓ I want to visit San Francisco and UMM, where I read in some articles that they have beautiful parks.

Do not use 'visit in'; use 'visit' plus place. Add conjunction to link locations. Use 'where I read in some articles that they have beautiful parks' or better: 'I read in some articles that they have beautiful parks.' Ensure UMM is clear (proper noun). Grammar problem type ID: 11}]} PMID: Not applicable