Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitations and make the answer more concise while keeping relevant details. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (who you went with, activities you did). Avoid filler words like "uh."

예시: Yes, I loved going to the nearby parks as a child. I often went there with my grandparents, where we would feed the ducks and play on the swings, which made those visits very memorable.

제안: Be more direct and use smoother linking language. Begin with a clear statement, then briefly explain why and give a typical frequency or routine. Limit to two to three sentences to avoid redundancy.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but my busy schedule limits my time. Therefore, I usually visit parks occasionally on weekends to relax and get some fresh air.

제안: Correct vocabulary errors and improve coherence. Replace the mistaken word "pearls" with "parks" and use linking words to organize ideas (for example, "for instance" or "because"). Provide one or two specific reasons why more parks would help citizens.

예시: Yes, absolutely. I think parks are valuable urban facilities because they give people space to exercise and relax. For example, parks let parents play with children safely and provide a quieter place to escape city noise.

제안: Be concise and avoid vague phrasing. State clearly which park you want to visit, then give a specific reason. Use linking words like "because" to connect the reason to your preference.

예시: Yes, I would love to visit Universal Studios in Beijing because it has a Harry Potter zone. As a fan, I want to see the themed rides and immersive sets in person.

× Yes, as a child, I especially liked going to the parks, uh, which were near our house.

✓ Yes, as a child, I especially liked going to the park that was near our house.

Use of the definite article and plural here is incorrect. If referring to a specific park near the house, use singular 'the park' or plural 'the parks' only if there were several. The original sounds like one nearby park, so use 'the park that was near our house' to be precise.

× Well, yes, but with a hectic life, I must admit that I don't have that much time to enjoy a nice walk in the park nowadays.

✓ Well, yes, but with a hectic life, I must admit that I don't have much time to enjoy a nice walk in the park nowadays.

The phrase 'that much time' is more informal and slightly awkward here; 'much time' is more natural in negative present-tense statements. This is not a strict grammar error but a usage improvement to fit present-tense negative construction.

× I usually go there during the weekends from time to time.

✓ I usually go there on weekends from time to time.

Use 'on weekends' (no 'the') for habitual actions. 'During the weekends' is acceptable but less natural with 'usually'. Also avoid redundancy: 'usually' plus 'from time to time' is repetitive; keep one. The correction keeps 'from time to time' per original meaning.

× Oh yeah, absolutely. I think pearls are amazing facilities that can be placed in the cities.

✓ Oh yeah, absolutely. I think parks are amazing facilities that can be placed in cities.

'Pearls' is a wrong word here (lexical choice). The intended word is 'parks.' Also drop 'the' before 'cities' for general statements. This fixes adjective/noun misuse.

× They're a good place to for people to walk their dogs, play with the children, where you can get from the noise of the city.

✓ They're a good place for people to walk their dogs and play with their children, and a place where you can get away from the noise of the city.

Original has extraneous 'to', inconsistent parallel structure, incorrect preposition 'get from' and awkward clause ordering. Use parallel gerunds 'walk' and 'play' with consistent possessive 'their children' and 'get away from' for escaping noise.

× Well, I believe when you are seeing parks we can also count amusement parks.

✓ Well, I believe when you see parks we can also include amusement parks.

'Are seeing' is an incorrect continuous form here; 'see' (simple present) is appropriate for general statements. Also 'count' is acceptable but 'include' is more natural. This fixes verb form and word choice.

× And if it's so, I would really like to go to the Universal Studio in Beijing.

✓ And if so, I would really like to go to Universal Studios in Beijing.

Use 'if so' instead of 'if it's so.' Also the correct name is 'Universal Studios' (plural) and normally no definite article before the proper name. 'Universal Studios in Beijing' is the standard form.

× This especially attracts me as they have a Harry Potter zone there and I'm a fan.

✓ This especially attracts me because they have a Harry Potter zone there and I'm a fan.

Replace 'as' with 'because' for clearer causal connection in spoken English. Tense and structure are otherwise fine; this improves clarity.