Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn và mạch lạc. Hạn chế tiếng ấp úng (uh, um) và lặp từ (I like) bằng cách mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, rồi bổ sung 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: hoạt động bạn thích làm trong công viên, cảm giác khi ở đó). Giữ độ dài dưới 5 câu và dùng liên từ đơn giản để nối ý.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I often walked there with my family to enjoy the fresh air and watch birds. The calm atmosphere helped me relax and made weekends feel special.

제안: Câu trả lời khá tốt nhưng cần sửa ngữ pháp và rút gọn lặp ý. Tránh ấp úng và điều chỉnh thì (e.g., "being in nature helps me"), sử dụng một hoặc hai lý do cụ thể rồi kết luận. Giữ tối đa 4 câu để tự nhiên hơn.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, though I have limited free time. When I can, I take short walks there to relax and enjoy the fresh air. Being in nature usually helps lift my spirits and reduce stress.

제안: Ý chính rõ ràng nhưng cần chỉnh ngữ pháp (singular/plural) và làm cụ thể hóa hơn (ví dụ nêu một lợi ích thực tế như giảm ô nhiễm, chỗ cho hoạt động thể thao). Tránh kết thúc bằng "so on"; thay bằng một câu kết luận ngắn gọn. Dùng liên từ để nối lý do và ví dụ.

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because green spaces can improve air quality and reduce urban heat. For example, new playgrounds and sports areas would encourage families to exercise outdoors. Overall, more parks would make the city healthier and more pleasant.

제안: Cần sửa phát âm/viết tên và ngữ pháp (I wish I could / I hope to visit). Tránh ấp úng, lặp từ và lỗi từ (plate?). Thêm một lý do cụ thể vì sao muốn đến (ví dụ cảnh đẹp, kiến trúc, hoạt động). Giữ 2–3 câu ngắn gọn và tự nhiên.

예시: I hope to visit Central Park in New York someday because I have heard it offers beautiful scenery and many walking trails. I would love to see its famous landmarks and relax there for a few hours.

× I used to like walking a park, walking to a park at the choice because I like to travel in the nature and uh, I like, uh to uh, I like the fresh air in the park and uh, like to observe the.

✓ I used to like walking in a park, walking to a park by choice because I liked being in nature. I liked the fresh air in the park and liked to observe the surroundings.

Error: incorrect verb patterns and prepositions and inconsistent tense. Use 'walking in a park' or 'walking to a park' with correct preposition; 'by choice' is the correct phrase, not 'at the choice'; 'travel in the nature' should be 'being in nature'; maintain past tense 'liked' to match 'used to'. Suggestion: use consistent verb forms and correct prepositions (in, to, by) and keep tense consistent.

× Yes, I still like going to the park but I don't have much free time now, so if I have free time, I will go for a short walk in the park to relax and enjoy the fresh air because being in the nature help me, uh, lift my spirits.

✓ Yes, I still like going to the park but I don't have much free time now, so if I have free time I will go for a short walk in the park to relax and enjoy the fresh air because being in nature helps me lift my spirits.

Error: subject-verb agreement and article/preposition use with 'nature'. 'Being in nature' is correct (no 'the') and 'helps' is required for third person singular subject. Suggestion: use 'helps' with singular subject and drop 'the' before 'nature'.

× Of course, I would like to see more park in my cities because more green space would improve the city atmosphere and the air quality.

✓ Of course, I would like to see more parks in my city because more green space would improve the city's atmosphere and the air quality.

Error: incorrect singular/plural forms and noun number agreement. Use 'parks' (plural) and 'city' (singular) to match context; possessive 'city's atmosphere' sounds natural. Suggestion: match countable nouns correctly and use possessive for attributes.

× Also, additional playground and recreational area would keep children and family more places to exercise and relax, so on.

✓ Also, additional playgrounds and recreational areas would give children and families more places to exercise and relax, and so on.

Error: article and plurality errors and incorrect phrase 'keep children and family'. Use plural 'playgrounds' and 'recreational areas'; use 'children and families' and phrase 'give... more places' is natural. Suggestion: ensure correct plural forms and use phrasing 'give someone places to...'.

× I think, I wish I can go to, uh, Sentio Park in New York. I guess, uh, I have heard a lot of about this park, about this, uh, breathtaking view. So I wish I had a chance to visit this plate.

✓ I think I wish I could go to Sentio Park in New York. I have heard a lot about this park and its breathtaking view. I hope I will have a chance to visit this place.

Errors: modal verb and word choice and noun error. Use 'could' for wish about ability/future possibility; 'heard a lot about' without extra 'of'; use 'its breathtaking view' to show possession; 'place' not 'plate'. Use 'hope I will have a chance' for future possibility. Suggestion: choose correct modal verbs (could/ would/ will) and correct vocabulary and possessive structures.