Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, add a clear topic sentence and one supporting detail. Correct verb tense and articles, and avoid redundancy. Use a linking word if adding extra information.

예시: Yes, I liked going to parks with my mother when I was a child. We often spent whole afternoons there, feeding ducks and having picnics, which made those visits very memorable.

제안: Use complete and natural phrasing, include a brief reason to support your statement, and correct article usage and prepositions.

예시: No, I don't enjoy going to parks at the moment because I am usually very busy with work and prefer exercising at a gym instead.

제안: Start with a concise topic sentence, avoid repetitive phrases, and provide specific reasons with linking words. Improve word choice (e.g., 'pets' instead of 'animals').

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide safe places for families to relax and allow people to walk their pets, which improves community health.

제안: Give a clear, direct answer and add a specific detail or reason. Avoid vague phrases like 'one of the best' without explanation, and fix grammar (remember the name, remove 'of').

예시: I would like to visit Þingvellir National Park in Iceland because I have seen photos of its dramatic landscapes and I am interested in its unique geology and history.

× Yes, when I was child I like going park with my mother.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I liked going to parks with my mother.

Problems: missing article before 'child' (article error, ID 22 / 17), incorrect past tense of 'like' (past tense issue, ID 5), missing preposition 'to' before 'park' and wrong number (preposition and singular/plural issue, IDs 11 and 1). Fixes: add 'a' before 'child', change 'like' to past tense 'liked' to match 'when I was', use 'going to parks' or 'going to the park' — here plural 'parks' fits general habit; include preposition 'to' before 'parks'.

× Unfortunately, I don't like going to park right now.

✓ Unfortunately, I don't like going to the park right now.

Problems: missing definite article 'the' before 'park' (article error, ID 22 / 17). 'Going to park' is ungrammatical; use 'going to the park' for a general activity at parks now. Tense and verb form are correct.

× Of course, yes, I like to see more and more parks day by day, because in parks you can spend your time with your family and also you can spend your time with your animals.

✓ Of course I would like to see more parks over time, because in parks you can spend time with your family and with your pets.

Problems: mismatch of present preference with future desire (future/conditional idea; use 'would like' for desire, ID 7/4), awkward adverb phrase 'day by day' — use 'over time' or 'gradually', repetition 'spend your time' is redundant, and 'animals' is better as 'pets' in this context (word choice/adjective, ID 13). Streamline: 'would like to see more parks' and 'spend time with your family and pets.'

× I like to go to a park in Iceland. Unfortunately I cannot exactly remember of the name of the park, but I know that it is the one of the best park in the world.

✓ I would like to go to a park in Iceland. Unfortunately, I cannot exactly remember the name of the park, but I know that it is one of the best parks in the world.

Problems: use 'would like' to express desire for the future (future/conditional, ID 7), unnecessary preposition 'of' after 'remember' (preposition error, ID 11), article and number errors: 'the one of the best park' should be 'one of the best parks' (singular/plural and article errors, IDs 1 and 22). Also add comma after 'Unfortunately' for clarity. Change 'like to go' to 'would like to go' to match future intention.