Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản (thì, động từ thêm -ing/ed, danh từ số nhiều), sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Hãy dùng tối đa 3–4 câu, bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề (Yes/No + lý do ngắn), sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ hoạt động, tần suất) với liên từ phù hợp như “and” hoặc “so”.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they had many swings and playgrounds. I often went there with my friends and parents, and we would cycle or play games together.

제안: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (trạng từ, trợ động từ, danh từ không đếm được), dùng cấu trúc hợp lý để diễn đạt lý do và kết quả, dùng liên từ như “because” và “so” đúng chỗ. Giữ 2–3 câu: câu chủ đề + chi tiết cụ thể về việc bận rộn và tần suất tới công viên.

예시: Not really. I rarely go to parks now because I have a lot of housework and homework, so I am usually too busy. As a result, I only visit parks on rare weekends when I have free time.

제안: Chú ý thì (would/like → present), dùng danh từ số nhiều và mạo từ đúng, tránh lặp ý. Nên nêu 1–2 lợi ích cụ thể và ngắn gọn, sử dụng liên từ như “because” hoặc “so” để nối ý.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they would make the environment fresher and more attractive. Also, more parks would give children extra safe places to play and exercise.

제안: Cần cấu trúc câu rõ ràng: trả lời trực tiếp rồi giải thích. Tránh từ vựng không phù hợp (“toilet parks”), dùng từ vựng chính xác (e.g. zoo, botanical garden). Nói 1–2 câu nêu tên hoặc loại công viên bạn muốn thăm và lý do cụ thể.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the city zoo and the new botanical garden in the future because the zoo has many animals and the garden offers beautiful plants and peaceful walking paths.

× When I was a child I used to like go to parks because it have many swings and playground.

✓ When I was a child I used to like going to parks because they had many swings and playgrounds.

Incorrect verb form after 'like used to' requires gerund (going). 'Have' should be past tense 'had' to match 'used to'. 'Parks' is plural so refer to them with 'they' and 'playground' should be plural 'playgrounds' or 'a playground' for consistency.

× I often go with go to parks with friend and parents to go cycling and play together.

✓ I often went to parks with friends and my parents to go cycling and play together.

Redundant words 'go with go to' create a sentence structure error; use 'went to parks'. 'Friend' should be plural 'friends' and 'parents' is clarified as 'my parents'. Past tense 'went' matches 'When I was a child' context.

× Currently I not really like go to parks because I have many housework and homework to do and I very busy with school and works so I did not have time to relaxed.

✓ Currently I do not really like going to parks because I have a lot of housework and homework to do and I am very busy with school and work so I do not have time to relax.

Use auxiliary 'do' for negative present: 'do not really like'. After 'like' use gerund 'going'. 'Many housework' is incorrect; use 'a lot of housework' and 'work' is uncountable here (not 'works'). Use present continuous 'am very busy'. For present tense negative use 'do not have' and verb 'relax' (base form) after 'have time to'.

× Yes, I really liked to see more parks in my country because it made environment more fresh and beautiful and it will have many place to children have fun in my city.

✓ Yes, I would really like to see more parks in my country because they would make the environment fresher and more beautiful and there would be many places for children to have fun in my city.

Mixing tenses and modal forms: use 'would like' to express desire. 'Made' should be conditional 'would make'. 'Environment more fresh' requires comparative 'fresher' and parallel adjective 'more beautiful'. Use 'there would be' for existence and plural 'places' and correct infinitive structure 'for children to have fun'.

× Just like toilet parks be it is a zoo and have many. Anymore to see?

✓ I do not understand the question. Do you mean a theme park or a zoo? There are many places I could visit.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear ('toilet parks' makes no sense, 'be it is a zoo and have many'). Provide clarified, grammatical responses. Use appropriate question 'Do you mean...' and a coherent follow-up 'There are many places I could visit'.