Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a clear topic sentence in past tense and add specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (past tense, plural/singular, articles) and avoid redundancy. For example, say why you liked parks, mention a few specific activities or features, and use a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they had many fun features. For example, there were swings and slides where I spent hours playing, and bike paths where my friends and I rode together. Because of these activities, I always looked forward to visiting the park on weekends.

제안: Answer directly using present tense and a concise topic sentence. Provide specific reasons or activities that attract you now, and use linking words to make it coherent. Fix grammar (there is/are, gerunds, subject-verb agreement) and avoid vague phrases like “anything to do.”

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks now because they help me relax and stay active. For instance, I often use the jogging paths and outdoor exercise equipment, and sometimes I watch children playing which always lifts my mood. Therefore, parks are a pleasant place for both exercise and relaxation.

제안: Start with a clear opinion (yes/no) and give concise, specific reasons why more parks are needed. Mention benefits (health, community, children) and use linking words to organize ideas. Correct word choice and sentence structure to avoid confusion.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide safe places for children to play and for residents to exercise. For example, additional parks with playgrounds and sports courts would encourage families to spend time outdoors, which improves physical health and strengthens community ties.

제안: Give a clear, complete answer naming the park or country and explain why specifically you want to visit. Use present/future tense correctly and complete your sentence—avoid trailing off. Add concrete details about activities or features that interest you and use linking words to connect reasons.

예시: Yes, I would love to visit parks in Japan in the future because they often combine beautiful gardens with cultural attractions. For instance, I want to see Japanese botanical gardens and public parks that feature seasonal cherry blossoms and tea houses, which would be a peaceful and culturally rich experience.

× 'Yes, I like going to park as a child because there is a lot of toys in the park and there is rings, bikes and anything in here in there.'

✓ 'Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because there were a lot of toys in the park, such as rings, bikes, and many other things.'

'Errors: singular/plural forms and subject-verb agreement. "going to park" should be "going to parks" (countable plural). "there is a lot of toys" mixes singular "is" with plural "toys"; use "there were a lot of toys" to match past time. "there is rings" should be "such as rings" or "there were rings". Also cleaned up filler words. Suggestion: match noun number with verbs (plural nouns take plural verbs) and use past tense when speaking about childhood.'

× 'Yes, I like going to park as a child because there is a lot of toys in the park and there is rings, bikes and anything in here in there.'

✓ 'Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because there were a lot of toys in the park, such as rings, bikes, and many other things.'

'Error: past tense. The question asks about childhood (past), so verbs should be past: "liked" and "were" instead of present forms. Suggestion: use past tense when referring to actions or states in the past.'

× 'Yes, even though I am 18 years old, I like going to park because there in the park there are swings and anything to do. Kids will play and making them happy of playing in the park.'

✓ 'Yes, even though I am 18 years old, I like going to parks because there are swings and many things to do. Kids play there and it makes them happy to play in the park.'

'Errors: subject-verb agreement and sentence structure. "going to park" should be "going to parks" (plural). "there in the park there are" is redundant; simplify to "there are". "Kids will play and making them happy of playing" is ungrammatical: use "Kids play there and it makes them happy to play in the park." Suggestion: ensure subjects and verbs agree and use clear clause structure.'

× 'Yes, even though I am 18 years old, I like going to park because there in the park there are swings and anything to do. Kids will play and making them happy of playing in the park.'

✓ 'Yes, even though I am 18 years old, I like going to parks because there are swings and many things to do. Kids play there and it makes them happy to play in the park.'

'Error: article use and quantifier clarity. "going to park" needs the article or plural form; here plural "parks" is natural. "anything to do" is vague; use "many things to do." Suggestion: choose appropriate articles or plural forms and use clearer quantifiers.'

× 'Yes, I need but one seat that children are allowed to, yes. Any parts in here because there's a lot of parks and swings and things to do, like more activities in here and there's a lot of swings, playing and other activities.'

✓ 'Yes, I think we need more seating for children and more play areas, because there are already many parks with swings but we need more activities and seats.'

'Errors: incorrect quantifier and sentence structure. "I need but one seat that children are allowed to" is unclear; likely meant "we need more seating for children." "Any parts in here" is ungrammatical. Suggestion: express quantity clearly (more, many) and restructure sentences into clearer clauses.'

× 'Yes, I need but one seat that children are allowed to, yes. Any parts in here because there's a lot of parks and swings and things to do, like more activities in here and there's a lot of swings, playing and other activities.'

✓ 'Yes, I think we need more seating for children and more activity areas, because even though there are many parks with swings, we could add more organized activities.'

'Error: sentence structure errors and repetition. The original contains fragments and repeated ideas. Suggestion: combine related ideas into complete sentences and avoid repeating the same noun phrases.'

× 'Yes, I would like to go, uh, Japan parks because they are so many activities there and there's a lot of.'

✓ 'Yes, I would like to go to parks in Japan because there are so many activities there.'

'Errors: preposition and verb form. Add preposition "to" after "go" (go to parks). "they are so many activities" should be "there are so many activities". Also remove trailing fragment "and there's a lot of." Suggestion: use correct prepositions with verbs of movement and use "there are" for existence of plural items.'

× 'Yes, I would like to go, uh, Japan parks because they are so many activities there and there's a lot of.'

✓ 'Yes, I would like to go to parks in Japan because there are so many activities there.'

'Error: incorrect use of prepositions. "go Japan parks" requires "go to parks in Japan" or "go to Japan to visit parks." Suggestion: use "to" for movement and "in" to specify location.'