Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, fix articles/plurals, and add one specific detail. Use linking words if adding more information.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I especially enjoyed the swings and small rides because they were exciting, and I liked sitting among the trees to read or watch other children play.

제안: Give a direct answer, then briefly explain with clear linking words. Reduce redundant phrases and correct awkward expressions (e.g., 'not really many parks' instead of 'not really much parks').

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. However, in my hometown there are not many accessible parks due to recent infrastructure changes, so I rarely get the chance to visit them.

제안: Answer directly and avoid repeating the same idea. Use a linking word to add one specific reason and a short example of how parks help people.

예시: Yes, I would. Parks are important because they provide space for relaxation and exercise; for example, people can go jogging or practise yoga there to improve their mental and physical health.

제안: Be precise and avoid exaggerated or inaccurate claims (Central Park does not cover half of New York). Start with a clear statement of intention, give a correct fact or specific detail, and use one linking phrase to explain why you want to return.

예시: Yes, I would like to return to Central Park in New York. I was amazed by its size and diverse areas, and next time I want to take a long walk to explore places I missed, such as the Conservatory Garden and the Ramble.

× Well, definitely just like other child's other children.

✓ Well, definitely, like other children.

The original sentence uses incorrect possessive and redundant words ('child's other children'). Use the plural noun 'children' to refer to kids in general and remove redundancy. Suggestion: say 'like other children' to compare yourself to other kids.

× I loved going to the parks in my childhood because in in the parks there are many swings and rides up like for our children's and also I like to stay around the greenery and the plants.

✓ I loved going to parks in my childhood because there were many swings and rides for children, and I also liked staying among the greenery and plants.

Multiple errors: unnecessary definite article 'the parks' is corrected to 'parks' for general reference (Article errors - ID 22), repeated word 'in', incorrect noun phrase 'for our children's' uses possessive incorrectly (Incorrect use of pronouns - ID 12) and tense/person inconsistencies. Also change 'there are' to past tense 'there were' to match 'loved' (Past tense issue - ID 5). Use 'staying among the greenery' for natural phrasing.

× I do. I think the last park I visited was Central Park in New York, but since I am here in my hometown, because of the improvement in infrastructure, there are not really much parks accessible to the residents nearby, so I cannot visit.

✓ I do. The last park I visited was Central Park in New York, but where I live now, because of improvements in infrastructure, there are not many parks accessible to nearby residents, so I cannot visit them.

Problems: 'there are not really much parks' is ungrammatical: 'much' should be 'many' with countable 'parks' (Incorrect use of quantifiers - ID 14). 'improvement' should be plural or 'improvements' for general changes. Also clarify 'here in my hometown' vs 'where I live now' for coherence. Add 'them' to refer to parks. Maintain past tense 'visited' and present situation correctly.

× Well, definitely, in my opinion, parks are import.

✓ Well, definitely. In my opinion, parks are important.

The adjective 'important' was misspelled as 'import' (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs - ID 13). Also punctuation: split into two sentences for clarity.

× Parks play a significant role in people's life because there they can spend some quality time and even exercise or do some health exercise that can help them, that helps them.

✓ Parks play a significant role in people's lives because there they can spend quality time and even exercise, which helps them stay healthy.

Errors: 'people's life' should be plural 'people's lives' (Incorrect use of pronouns/possessive - ID 12). 'some quality time' can be 'quality time'. 'do some health exercise' is unnatural; use 'exercise' and 'which helps them stay healthy' to remove repetition 'that can help them, that helps them'.

× Definitely. As I just mentioned, I visited Central Park in New York. I am still fascinated about that specific part because it is so big, like it covers almost half of the New York and the last time I visited there, I still could not get the chance to walk around the whole park.

✓ Definitely. As I mentioned, I visited Central Park in New York. I am still fascinated by it because it is so big; it seems to cover almost half of New York, and the last time I visited, I could not get the chance to walk around the whole park.

Problems: incorrect preposition 'fascinated about' should be 'fascinated by' (Incorrect use of prepositions - ID 11). 'the New York' should be 'New York' (Article errors - ID 22). 'the last time I visited there' is redundant; use 'the last time I visited'. Also simplify tense and remove extra words 'still'.

× So even the next time I still want to visit it.

✓ So I still want to visit it next time.

Awkward word order and tense phrasing. Place 'still' before the verb and use 'next time' at the end for natural future intention (Future tense issue - ID 7).