Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer grammatically correct, more natural and slightly longer (1–3 sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail (where or what you did) to enrich the response. Avoid informal fillers and tense mistakes.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks when I was a child. I often played on the swings and had picnics with my family, which are some of my fondest memories.

제안: Fix pronunciation markers and grammar (use present simple and articles). Give a concise topic sentence, then one specific reason why you visit less now. Use a linking word such as 'but' or 'however' correctly and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but I rarely find time because of my busy work schedule. When I do go, I prefer short walks to relax.

제안: Provide a clear direct answer first, then one or two specific reasons using linking words. Remove fillers like 'uh' and avoid repeating words. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'community', 'socialise', 'public spaces').

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they encourage community interaction and provide safe places for families to socialise. For example, more small parks would make it easier for neighbours to meet and talk.

제안: Answer directly and use correct tense and articles. Give one specific detail about the park (name, features) and why it interests you, using a linking word to connect ideas. Avoid short fragmented sentences.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit a nearby park that is famous for its gardens and wildlife. I am excited to see the flower displays and the deer that roam there because I enjoy nature photography.

× Yeah, I really like going to parks as a child.

✓ Yeah, I really liked going to parks as a child.

The question refers to childhood (past), so the verb should be in the past tense. Use 'liked' to match the time frame. Suggestion: change present 'like' to past 'liked' when describing past habits.

× Shah I still do like to go to park now, however, I do not have enough time to visit park.

✓ Well, I still do like to go to parks now; however, I do not have enough time to visit them.

Multiple issues: first, 'now' requires present tense which is fine, but the sentence uses 'to park' and 'visit park' incorrectly. Use plural 'parks' or add an article 'the park' if singular. Also pronoun 'them' avoids repetition. 'Shah' seems to be a filler; replace with 'Well' or omit. Suggestion: use 'parks' and 'them' to refer back, and separate clauses with appropriate punctuation.

× Yeah, I do like to see more parks in city, which helps, uh, people get into more real conversations and get interaction like being social, which I am really a big fan of.

✓ Yeah, I would like to see more parks in the city, which helps people have more real conversations and interact socially, and I am a big fan of that.

Use the definite article 'the' before 'city' when referring to your city. 'Do like to see' is awkward for this context; 'would like to see' is more natural for a desire. 'Get interaction like being social' is ungrammatical; use 'interact socially' or 'have interactions'. Also avoid filler words. Suggestion: use 'the city', 'would like', and 'interact socially' for clarity and correctness.

× Yeah, I do like to go to a park in the future.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to a park in the future.

Talking about future desires is better expressed with 'would like' rather than 'do like to'. 'Do like to go to a park in the future' mixes present simple with a future time reference. Suggestion: use 'would like' to show intention or desire for the future.

× There is a park near our city which is really famous for garden and animals.

✓ There is a park near our city which is really famous for its gardens and animals.

When describing characteristics of a park, use plural 'gardens' if multiple, and include the possessive 'its' to show those features belong to the park. 'Garden' singular without article is incorrect here. Suggestion: use 'its gardens and animals' or 'the garden and the animals' depending on meaning.

× So I am really excited and to go to park.

✓ So I am really excited to go to the park.

The original has an extra 'and' and misses the article 'the' before 'park'. Also 'excited to go' is the correct verb structure. Suggestion: remove 'and' and add 'the' to form 'excited to go to the park.'