Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp khiến ý chính không truyền đạt được. Hãy mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (ví dụ: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks when I was a child.), sau đó nêu một hoặc hai lý do/ kỷ niệm cụ thể, dùng liên từ để kết nối ý và tránh câu mơ hồ. Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu, dùng thì quá khứ cho trải nghiệm trẻ con.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks when I was a child. I often played on swings and had picnics with my family, which made me feel cheerful. These visits were a highlight of my weekends.

제안: Ý tưởng hợp lý nhưng câu có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes, I still like parks, but I rarely visit them.), sau đó liệt kê lý do với cấu trúc đúng và liên từ (for example, because / and / also). Sử dụng thì hiện tại hoàn thành/hiện tại đơn phù hợp và sửa lỗi từ (parts → parks, as far from the past → far from them or far from the city).

예시: Yes, I still like parks, but I rarely visit them now. For example, I have a very busy schedule as a teacher, and I also live far from the nearest park, so it's difficult to go often.

제안: Câu trả lời có ý nhưng cấu trúc lộn xộn và ngắt câu không đúng chỗ. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes, I would like more parks.), rồi đưa lý do cụ thể và sắp xếp danh từ người thân một cách tự nhiên (my parents and siblings). Tránh lặp từ và sửa từ không phù hợp (countryside đã là vùng nông thôn — nếu đã sống ở nông thôn, nói muốn nhiều công viên trong khu vực gần nhà).

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my neighborhood. Because I live in a rural area, having nearby parks would allow my parents and siblings to exercise and relax without travelling far.

제안: Câu trả lời rất mơ hồ và không đúng ngữ pháp; khó hiểu ý định. Nên trả lời trực tiếp (No specific park comes to mind, but I would like to visit new parks in the future.) hoặc nêu tên một công viên cụ thể nếu có. Giải thích lợi ích cụ thể (exercise, fresh air, family time) và dùng thì tương lai đúng (I will / I would like to).

예시: I don't have a specific park in mind right now, but in the future I would like to visit larger city parks that offer trails and sports facilities. I think they would be good for my health and a nice place to spend time with my family.

× Yeah, I think going to pass as a child. How many? Cheerfulness firstly.

✓ Yeah, I think going to parks as a child made me happy.

The original sentence has incorrect structure and unclear meaning. 'Going to pass' is wrong; likely intended 'going to parks'. 'How many? Cheerfulness firstly.' is fragmented and unclear. Combine ideas into one clear sentence: use 'going to parks as a child made me happy' to express past experience and result. Suggestion: state the subject, action and effect in one sentence and avoid fragments. Note: Explanation in English as requested.

× Yeah, I rarely go into parts now because of many reasons.

✓ Yeah, I rarely go to parks now because of many reasons.

'parts' is a misspelling—the correct plural is 'parks' (place). 'go into parks' is unusual; use 'go to parks'. Ensure correct plural noun and appropriate preposition 'to'. Note: Explanation in English as requested.

× The first reason is that my busy schedule as a teacher, and the second reason is that I am living as far from the past.

✓ The first reason is my busy schedule as a teacher, and the second is that I now live much farther away.

Original has incomplete clause 'my busy schedule as a teacher' without a verb and awkward phrase 'living as far from the past.' Fix by removing unnecessary 'that' and supplying parallel structure: 'The first reason is my busy schedule..., and the second is that I now live much farther away.' Use 'farther away' for distance and present simple for current fact. Note: Explanation in English as requested.

× Ya because I live in the countryside so I would like to see more parks in my neighborhood so as to my. Mothers, I, my brothers, my father can go to the park to exercise.

✓ Yes, because I live in the countryside, I would like to see more parks in my neighborhood so that my mother, my brothers, and my father can go to the park to exercise.

Multiple issues: 'Ya' -> 'Yes'; run-on and awkward phrasing 'so as to my.' Use 'so that' to show purpose and list family members with correct articles and commas. Ensure subject-verb agreement and logical flow. Keep tenses consistent. Note: Explanation in English as requested.

× Yeah, I don't think about it now, but I think I'm going to pass can bring me many benefits both about.

✓ Yeah, I haven't thought about a specific park yet, but I think going to parks in the future will bring me many benefits.

Original is awkward and ungrammatical: 'I'm going to pass can bring me' mixes forms. Replace with clear future-intention phrasing: 'going to parks in the future will bring me many benefits.' Use 'haven't thought about' for current state and 'will bring' for future result. Note: Explanation in English as requested.