Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap doğrudan ve anlaşılır, fakat daha doğal ve detaylı olması için kısa bir konu cümlesi ve ardından spesifik bir anı veya neden eklemelisin. Ayrıca zaman uyumuna dikkat et ("I did" iyi, ama devamında "because my father and my sister were having fun together" yerine daha akıcı bir ifade kullanabilirsin). Önerilen yapı: kısa konu cümlesi + neden veya örnek + bağlaçlarla akış.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My father and sister often played games with me there, and I remember feeding ducks at the pond every weekend, which made those visits really special.

제안: Cevap net ama kaba ve dilbilgisi hataları var; ayrıca kısır bir neden sunuyor. Daha kibar ve doğal ifade kullan, grameri düzelt ("I'm not a teenager" ve "children generally go there"). Bir bağlaçla alternatif bir durum veya şahsi tercih ekle (örneğin benzer aktiviteleri nerede tercih ettiğin).

예시: Not really, I don't go to parks as often now because I'm not a teenager and they tend to be crowded with families. Instead, I prefer visiting quieter green spaces or going for a jog early in the morning.

제안: Cevap olumlu ve motive edici ama tekrar eden ifadeler ve bazı dilbilgisi hataları var ("people" ve "it would make me" gibi). Destekleyici nedenleri daha spesifik ver: parkların sağladığı faydalar, toplum için sonuçları veya örnek bir park özelliği ekle. Bağlaçlar kullanarak neden-sonuç ilişkisini göster.

예시: Yes, I would. More parks would give families a safe place to relax and children somewhere to play, which would improve community life. For example, small playgrounds and shaded seating areas would encourage people to spend time outdoors.

제안: Cevap ilginç ve kişisel bir tercih sunuyor; fakat daha akıcı ve doğal bir yapı kullan. Tekrarlayan ifadeleri azalt, daha spesifik bir neden veya beklenti ekle (örn. parkın hangi yönünü görmek istediğin).

예시: Yes, I'd love to visit Central Park in New York one day because I enjoy its huge open lawns and historic spots. I'd like to walk around the lake and see the famous bridges and sculptures in person.

× I did because my father and my sister were having fun together.

✓ I did because my father and my sister had fun together.

The sentence uses past continuous 'were having' which suggests an ongoing action in the past; the question asks about a general past preference, so simple past 'had' is more natural. Use simple past to describe completed habits or events: 'had fun' instead of 'were having fun'. Suggestion: Use simple past for past habits or single events (I had fun).

× I don't because I am not teenager.

✓ I don't because I am not a teenager.

This sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before the singular countable noun 'teenager'. In English, singular countable nouns generally require an article or determiner. Add 'a' to form 'a teenager'. Suggestion: Use 'a' or 'an' with singular countable nouns (I am not a teenager).

× I am adult right now and you know, children's generally going there and having fun.

✓ I am an adult right now and, you know, children generally go there and have fun.

Two errors: missing article before 'adult' and incorrect possessive/apostrophe use with 'children's' and wrong verb form 'going'. 'Adult' needs 'an'. 'Children's' is a possessive form; here the plural noun 'children' is subject, so no apostrophe. Also use simple present 'go'/'have' for habitual actions. Suggestion: Add 'an' before 'adult', remove apostrophe in 'children', and use simple present verbs for habits (children generally go there and have fun).

× I would like to see more parks in my city because I would like to watch peoples enjoying together with their family and children.

✓ I would like to see more parks in my city because I would like to watch people enjoying time together with their families and children.

'Peoples' is incorrect here; 'people' is the correct plural of 'person'. Also 'family' should be plural ('families') when referring to different groups, and 'enjoying together' is awkward—'enjoying time together' is natural. Suggestion: Use 'people' (not 'peoples') and pluralize 'family' when referring to multiple families; add 'time' for clarity (people enjoying time together with their families).

× It would makes me so happy.

✓ It would make me so happy.

Modal structure 'would' should be followed by the base form of the verb (infinitive without 'to'). 'Makes' is third person singular present; after 'would' use 'make'. Suggestion: After 'would', use the base verb form: 'would make'.

× There is a sitcom that I watch and there is a park in that sitcom and it's called Central Park and I really want to go there in the future.

✓ There is a sitcom that I watch which has a park called Central Park, and I really want to go there in the future.

The original sentence is grammatical but wordy and has repeated 'there is'. Combining clauses and using 'which has' or a relative clause improves flow. This addresses 'there be' repetition rather than a strict grammatical error. Suggestion: Reduce repetition by combining clauses: 'There is a sitcom that I watch which has a park called Central Park, and I really want to go there in the future.'