Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Focus on clear grammar and concise structure. Start with a direct topic sentence (past tense), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms (use past tense consistently) and correct plural/possessive forms. Speak in 2–4 coherent sentences.

예시: Yes, I loved going to the park as a child because it was a special time for my family and me. For example, we often played on the swings and slides, and I remember walking there with my pet dog. Those visits created lasting memories and made me feel very happy.

제안: Give a concise topic sentence in present tense, then support with specific reasons using linking words. Avoid filler words and hesitations, and fix grammar (e.g., 'when it's not busy', 'fewer people', 'trees'). Keep to 2–3 sentences and use varied vocabulary related to relaxation and environment.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they offer peace and fresh air. When the park is not busy, I can relax under the trees and listen to birds, which helps me unwind after a busy day.

제안: Answer directly and support with clear, specific reasons. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) and correct phrasing (e.g., 'compare parks', 'recommend to friends'). Avoid unclear expressions and redundancy. Limit to 2–4 sentences and correct grammar (plural/singular, articles, modal verbs).

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because then people could compare different parks and I could recommend the best ones to my family and friends. Also, parks are free public spaces, so they offer inexpensive opportunities for exercise and relaxation.

제안: Start with a direct response and give one or two clear reasons. Use correct conditional phrasing ('If I had the chance') and comparative language ('compare parks abroad', 'different seasons'). Avoid long, confusing sentences and redundancy. Keep answers within 3 sentences and include a specific example of a park or country if possible.

예시: If I had the chance, I would like to visit parks in other countries to compare their landscapes and seasonal changes. For example, I would love to see a park in Japan during spring to experience cherry blossoms, which is very different from the two-season climate in my country.

× I love going to the park when I was a child, it was because that's what that was a moment that me and my family have a deeper and extremely bond.

✓ I loved going to the park when I was a child because those moments helped my family and I form a deep bond.

The sentence mixes present tense 'I love' with past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'loved' to match 'when I was a child'. Also restructure for clarity: 'those moments' is the correct subject and 'helped my family and I form a deep bond' uses past tense and correct pronoun order. Avoid 'extremely bond' which is ungrammatical.

× We create a beautiful memories together.

✓ We created beautiful memories together.

The sentence uses present tense 'create' but refers to past events; use past tense 'created'. Also 'a beautiful memories' is incorrect article-number agreement; remove 'a' to match plural 'memories'.

× We I feel delighted whenever I went to the park with my family or even my friends.

✓ I felt delighted whenever I went to the park with my family or my friends.

The sentence has extra 'We' and mixes present 'I feel' with past 'I went'. Use past tense consistently: 'I felt' and 'I went'. Remove the stray 'We'.

× I do a lot of outdoor activities like sliding.

✓ I did a lot of outdoor activities like sliding.

Because the context is childhood, use past tense 'did' rather than present 'do'. The gerund 'sliding' is acceptable after 'like'.

× Using the equipment's inside the park, I also both brought my my pet with me so that we could walk around.

✓ Using the equipment inside the park, I often brought my pet with me so that we could walk around.

'Equipment's' wrongly uses an apostrophe; use plural or uncountable 'equipment'. Remove duplicate 'my my'. 'Both' was misused; 'often' fits frequency. Use past tense 'brought' to match childhood context.

× It's a time. It's a time for me to.

✓ It was a special time for me.

Original is fragmented and unclear. Combine into a single complete sentence using past tense 'was' to match context and clarify meaning.

× Absolutely yes, I still love going to the park.

✓ Absolutely, I still love going to the park.

Minor wording: keep present tense 'love' is fine since this question asks about now. Remove redundant 'yes' after 'Absolutely'.

× It's a time of serenity and tranquility for me, especially when there is during another rush hour or if there is fewer people around the area where I could enjoy the park and the trees around the area.

✓ It's a time of serenity and tranquility for me, especially when it is not rush hour or if there are fewer people in the area so I can enjoy the park and the trees.

'There is during another rush hour' is ungrammatical; use 'it is not rush hour'. 'Fewer' requires plural noun and verb agreement: 'fewer people' with 'there are'. Use 'in the area' instead of redundant 'around the area'. Maintain present tense because question refers to now.

× I whenever I smell the the. Fresh air from threes and uh, appreciate the beautiful weather.

✓ Whenever I smell the fresh air from the trees, I appreciate the beautiful weather.

Remove extraneous 'I' and duplicated 'the' and spelling error 'threes' -> 'trees'. Ensure correct clause order: 'Whenever... , I appreciate...' and use present simple for habitual action.

× It's a form of relaxation to me.

✓ It's a form of relaxation for me.

Use preposition 'for' rather than 'to' after 'relaxation' to express what something is for; article usage is fine but preposition was incorrect.

× Yes, I believe because I have to explore lots of parks in our city so that I couldn't hear what's the difference between one another and also I could recommend it to my family or friends so that we could enjoy visiting the parks together.

✓ Yes, I think so because I want to explore many parks in our city so that I can learn the differences between them and recommend good ones to my family and friends so we can enjoy visiting parks together.

Switch from 'believe because I have to' to clearer 'I think so because I want to'. Use present tense 'want' and modal 'can' instead of 'couldn't hear' which is incorrect. 'What's the difference' is informal and misused; use 'learn the differences between them'. Use 'many' rather than 'lots of' for formality and correct pronouns 'them'.

× And it's a free other activities, you don't have to pay anything.

✓ Parks offer free activities; you don't have to pay anything.

Original 'it's a free other activities' is ungrammatical. Make a clear noun phrase 'Parks offer free activities'. Use present simple for general truth.

× You could save a lot of money if you just want to have an extra time with your family and friends.

✓ You can save a lot of money if you just want to spend extra time with your family and friends.

Use 'can' for ability in general statements. 'Have an extra time' is incorrect; say 'spend extra time'.

× So Park is the best place that people.

✓ So parks are great places for people to spend time together.

Original is incomplete and singular/plural mismatch. Use plural 'parks are' and complete the idea: 'places for people to spend time together.'

× If giving me a chance, yes, I would love to visit the park from other country because I want to compare the visual differences of each part from other country to mine.

✓ If given the chance, I would love to visit parks in other countries because I want to compare their appearance to the parks in my country.

Use correct conditional 'If given the chance' not 'If giving me a chance'. 'Park from other country' -> 'parks in other countries'. Use possessive 'their' to refer to parks and 'in my country' for comparison.

× Of course there is a beautiful weather from other country.

✓ Of course, there is beautiful weather in other countries.

'A beautiful weather' is incorrect because 'weather' is uncountable; remove 'a'. Use plural 'countries' and preposition 'in'.

× They have the spring and fall in during those season.

✓ They have spring and fall during those seasons.

Remove unnecessary 'the' before seasons and incorrect 'in during'; use 'during those seasons'. Use plural 'seasons'.

× It's different from my country which only have a two season.

✓ That's different from my country, which has only two seasons.

Use 'has' for third-person singular subject 'which' referring to 'my country'. 'Two seasons' not 'a two season'. Ensure correct verb agreement and article usage.

× So you. Experienced by enjoying the scenery and the other hand you also explored the weather, different weather and you have world is such a beautiful place you have to explore.

✓ So you can experience the scenery, and on the other hand you can also explore different kinds of weather; the world is such a beautiful place to explore.

Original is fragmented and ungrammatical. Use modal 'can' for possibility, fix connectors 'on the other hand', and combine into a coherent sentence. Use present tense for general statements and correct word order.