Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 句子有语法和时态错误，表达不够自然，信息可以更具体。建议使用正确时态（过去时），开头用一句主题句，然后用一两句具体细节支持。注意冠词（a/the）、复数和词序。可练习把冗余短语压缩为简洁句子。

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. I usually asked my mother to take me because there were many friends to play with and plenty of equipment, like small trains and paddle boats. Those visits were always the highlight of my week.

제안: 表达时态混用和语法错误影响流利度与清晰度。建议先给出直接回答，再用一到两句具体原因支持。注意时态一致（现在时谈现在感受），使用恰当的连接词如“because”或“so”。避免拼写错误（plane→plants/planes unclear）。

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax when I feel stressed or upset. I like watching the trees and children playing with their friends, and that peaceful atmosphere always cheers me up.

제안: 回答有重复和语法问题，比较句型不自然。建议直接回答并用一两句具体理由支持，使用比较句或因果结构时注意时态和主谓一致。描述时可给出具体好处（健康、社交、环境）。

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space for exercise and socializing. More parks would improve air quality and give people different places to relax and meet friends.

제안: 回答短且有语法和拼写错误（I want go→I want to go；anching拼写可能错误）。建议先直接回答，再提供1-2个具体细节说明为什么想去，如地点特色或个人回忆，并保持句子完整。

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Linhu Park in Anqing when I return home. I miss my country, and I remember spending peaceful afternoons there, so it would be lovely to relax and enjoy the scenery again.

× I like going to park as a child.

✓ I liked going to parks as a child.

句子讲的是过去（“as a child”），所以动词时态应为过去式“liked”。另外名词前需用复数或限定词，通常说“parks”或“the park”。建议把“park”改为复数“parks”或加冠词。

× When I was child I usually told my mom I want to go to the go to the park because there are many friends and many equipment such as trains and boats.

✓ When I was a child I usually told my mom I wanted to go to the park because there were many friends and much equipment such as trains and boats.

需要在“child”前加不定冠词“a”。主句为过去，应将“want”改为过去式“wanted”。“the go to the park”是重复，应删去多余部分。equipment是不可数名词，应使用“much”而不是“many”。整个句子中的动词应一致使用过去时（told, wanted, were）。

× I still like going to parks now because when I was feel sad and feel angry the park will give me relaxed.

✓ I still like going to parks now because when I feel sad or angry the park makes me feel relaxed.

“when I was feel”是不正确的结构；表达现在情况应使用现在时“when I feel”。“feel angry”前用“or”连接更自然。将“will give me relaxed”改为主动结构“makes me feel relaxed”；“relaxed”为形容词修饰“feel”。

× In the park I can see the trees and the plane and the children who played with their friend.

✓ In the park I can see trees and a plane and children playing with their friends.

不需要在所有名词前都加定冠词，“the trees”可改为泛指“trees”。“plane”若指一架飞机应用不定冠词“a plane”。“who played with their friend”时态和数不匹配；若描述正在进行的情景，应使用现在分词“playing”并把“friend”改为复数“friends”或“a friend”以一致。

× This make me feel more happy.

✓ This makes me feel happier.

主语“this”是单数，动词需用第三人称单数形式“makes”。“more happy”比较级通常用“-er”形式“happier”。

× I'd like to see the more parks in our city because the more parks our city had, the more happy citizens can get.

✓ I'd like to see more parks in our city because the more parks our city has, the happier the citizens can be.

“the more parks”前不需要“the”在“see more parks”中。主从句时态要一致，表达一般事实用现在时“has”。“more happy”应改为比较级“happier”。句子结构调整以符合英语习惯。

× Different parts give me different feels, feeling.

✓ Different parts of the park give me different feelings.

原句重复且用词不当。“feels, feeling”需改为名词“feelings”。并补全“of the park”使句意明确。

× I want go to the Linhu park.

✓ I want to go to Linhu Park.

动词短语缺少不定式标记“to”，应为“want to go”。专有名词“Linhu Park”中“Park”首字母应大写，并且通常不需冠词。

× The park is located in my country anching.

✓ The park is located in Anqing, my hometown country.

地名拼写可能错误，应为“Anqing”。表达地点用法可把“in my country Anqing”改为更自然的顺序或说明“My hometown Anqing”。如果想说“我国家安庆”，应改为“Anqing in my country”或“Anqing, my hometown”。（中文建议：检查地名拼写并调整词序。）

× I missed my country so if I have a chance I can go home and stay in this park. Enjoying my time.

✓ I miss my country, so if I have a chance I will go home and stay in that park and enjoy my time.

时态应保持现在或将来：若表达现在想念应用“miss”；后的从句表达将来应使用“will”。“Enjoying my time.”是不完整句，应改为完整的动词短语“and enjoy my time”。