Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, correct word choice (park not party), fix tense consistency, avoid repetition, and add one specific detail. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my family on weekends, and my favourite activities were swinging and going down the slides. Those simple experiences made me feel safe and happy.

제안: Answer directly and clearly, correct pronoun references, and add a linking phrase to explain reasons. Use one or two supporting details about frequency or activities to show development.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, especially with my nephew and brother. I usually visit once or twice a week because my nephew loves playing with other children on the playground equipment.

제안: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with specific improvements using linking words. Correct grammar (plural/singular, possessives) and avoid repetition. Mention concrete features you want (safety, equipment, green space).

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in our city because we need more green spaces. In particular, I hope new parks would be safer, have modern playground equipment, and include seating and lighting for families.

제안: Be clear about which park you mean and why you want to visit it. Avoid filler words and unclear phrasing. Use 2–3 concise sentences: name or describe the park, say why it appeals to you, and mention when or with whom you might go.

예시: Yes, there is a large waterfront park on the other side of the city that I want to visit. I have seen pictures of its walking trails and playgrounds, and I would like to go there next summer with my family to try the trails and take photos.

× I like going to parties child.

✓ I liked going to parks as a child.

The student used wrong noun and pronoun forms. 'Parties child' is ungrammatical; the examiner asked about parks. Change 'like' to past tense 'liked' to match 'as a child' (past time). Use 'parks' (plural) and include the article 'a' before 'child' in the phrase 'as a child'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× It was nice outside outdoor activity with my family.

✓ It was a nice outdoor activity with my family.

Redundant words 'outside' and 'outdoor' conflict; choose 'outdoor' as adjective. Add the article 'a' before 'nice' to form a correct noun phrase 'a nice outdoor activity'. Grammar problem type ID:13

× I love the swing and the slides.

✓ I loved the swings and the slides.

Context is childhood, so past tense 'loved' is appropriate. Use plural 'swings' to match 'slides' and common usage. Subject-verb agreement requires verb tense to match time reference. Grammar problem type ID:27

× They they gave me comfort when I was a kid.

✓ They gave me comfort when I was a kid.

Duplicate word 'They' is a mistake. Past tense 'gave' is correct for a childhood reference. Remove the repeated word to fix sentence structure. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yeah, I I do with my nephew and my brother because his son Loves Park.

✓ Yeah, I do. I go with my nephew and my brother because his son loves the park.

Remove repeated 'I'. Use present simple 'do' to answer the question, then clarify 'I go with...' Present simple 'loves' should be lowercase. Use 'the park' to refer to parks in general or a specific park; 'park' should be singular with article here. Grammar problem type ID:26

× He likes playing there with other kids.

✓ He likes playing there with other kids.

Sentence is correct. Pronoun 'He' correctly refers to the nephew's son and present simple 'likes' matches habitual action. No change needed. Grammar problem type ID:12

× OK I like to see more parks in our city but I hope they improved and make it modern and safer for for myself kids and add more attraction.

✓ OK, I would like to see more parks in our city, but I hope they are improved and made more modern and safer for my children, and that they add more attractions.

Use conditional 'would like' to express preference. 'Hope they improved' is incorrect tense—use passive 'are improved' or 'are made' and past participle 'made'. 'Myself kids' is incorrect pronoun; use 'my children' or 'my kids'. 'Add more attraction' should be plural 'attractions'. Also remove duplicate 'for'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I have, I have an experience from and I bumped into the parts that I want to go in the future, maybe on the other side visible so we can experience umm, the parts there and you can post them and.

✓ I had an experience when I came across some parks that I want to visit in the future, maybe on the other side of the city, so we can experience the parks there and post about them.

The original is fragmented and ungrammatical. Use past tense 'had' for 'an experience'. Replace 'bumped into the parts' with 'came across some parks'. 'Want to go in the future' becomes 'want to visit in the future'. Clarify 'other side of the city'. Remove filler 'umm' and incomplete ending; finish with 'post about them'. This fixes sentence structure and tense consistency. Grammar problem type ID:26