Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答不够自然且有语法错误。注意时态和动词形式，用简洁的主题句直接回答，然后补充一两点具体细节（例如和谁去、做什么活动）。避免多余词汇。

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my parents and played on the swings and fed the ducks, which made me very happy.

제안: 时态和词汇使用不准确（例如"wore"应为"go"或"goes"/"went"），表达重复且不够具体。用连词连接原因与结果，提供具体活动说明如何放松（例如散步、跑步或读书）。

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks now. I usually go for a walk or read a book there because the quiet atmosphere helps me relax after a busy day.

제안: 回答含混且有大量重复与无意义词汇，难以理解。先给出明确立场，然后用清晰的原因支持（例如改善空气质量、提供休闲空间、提升社区生活）。避免重复词和口头禅，句子保持简短连贯。

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they would improve air quality and provide safe places for families and children to relax and exercise.

제안: 表达重复且语法混乱。应先说明具体想去的公园或城市，然后用一两个明确理由比较（例如设计、景观或设施）。控制在最多五句话内，使用连接词使逻辑连贯。

예시: Yes, I would like to visit parks in Beijing in the future. I have heard they are very well designed with beautiful gardens and modern facilities, so they would be interesting to see.

× Yes, I think I like go to the park very much.

✓ Yes, I think I liked going to the park very much.

原句中“like go”不符合动词搭配。动词“like”在描述过去习惯或喜欢某个动作时常与动名词（-ing）连用：like doing sth。此外，上下文是询问“作为孩子”，时态应为过去时，用过去式“liked”。建议将结构改为“liked going”。

× Yes, I always wore to the park to get relaxed. It is a good way to make me feel comfortable.

✓ Yes, I always went to the park to relax. It was a good way to make me feel comfortable.

原句中“wore”是wear（穿）的过去式，与“去公园”不匹配，应使用go的过去式“went”。此外，“to get relaxed”用法不自然，通常用“不带被动的动词不定式”或动词原形“to relax”。由于谈论过去的经常性行为，第二句也应使用过去时“was”。建议使用“went to the park to relax”并将描述改为过去时。

× Yes, I want to see more part in my city because although my city although my city is bored, I also think it is umm depending tissue Fahrenheit developing.

✓ Yes, I want to see more parks in my city because my city is boring and still developing.

原句存在多处结构混乱与词汇错误："part"应为复数"parks"；重复了"although my city"且用法不当；"is bored"错误，主语城市应是令人感到无聊，用形容词"boring"；最后部分包含无法识别的词组（"depending tissue Fahrenheit developing"），意图可能是“正在发展”，应改为"still developing"。将句子简化为逻辑清晰的表达：原因从句直接说明城市特点。

× Yes, I want to go to the park in Beijing because I think that is they are umm, modern and just modern and just beautiful, beautiful than my cities.

✓ Yes, I want to go to the parks in Beijing because I think they are more modern and more beautiful than the parks in my city.

原句代词使用混乱（"that is they are"），应直接使用复数代词"they"指代“parks”。重复词汇（"modern and just modern and just beautiful, beautiful"）需删减。比较结构不完整，比较对象应明确为“the parks in my city”并使用比较级"more modern"和"more beautiful"。建议将句子组织为清晰的主语+谓语+比较结构。