Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cố gắng trả lời rõ ràng hơn, tránh tiếng ồn như "uh" và sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ thì và danh từ số ít/ số nhiều). Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó nêu 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ hoạt động, cảm xúc) và kết bằng câu tóm tắt. Hạn chế lặp từ và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc (for example, because, so).

예시: Yes, I loved going to Parkland as a child because it was a place where I could play with my friends. For example, my cousin and I used to spend hours on the slide and swings, and we often played hide-and-seek together. Those visits made me feel happy and carefree, and I would love to go back if I had the chance.

제안: Trả lời trực tiếp hơn và tránh tiếng lặp như "uh". Sử dụng thì đúng (I am in grade 12), và nối ý bằng liên từ để rõ lý do. Nên thêm một câu ngắn nêu cảm xúc hoặc kế hoạch tương lai để làm phong phú câu trả lời.

예시: Not really — I don't go to parks much at the moment because I am in grade 12 and I need to focus on preparing for my university entrance exam. Therefore, I spend most of my free time revising and studying every day, although I hope to visit parks again once my exams are over.

제안: Chú ý phát âm và chính tả (park, not part). Câu cần tổ chức logic: bắt đầu bằng ý chính, sau đó nêu 2–3 lợi ích cụ thể và dùng liên từ (for example, because, which). Tránh câu rời rạc và lặp ý "trees" nhiều lần.

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide large green areas with many trees, which improve air quality and create pleasant places for people to exercise. For example, new parks would offer walking paths and playgrounds where families could relax and children could play safely.

제안: Tránh dùng cụm từ thiếu lịch sự như "blah blah blah" và tránh lặp. Trả lời nên rõ ràng: nói có hay không, rồi giải thích ngắn gọn lý do bằng ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ muốn sự đa dạng hơn). Nếu không muốn đi, có thể đề xuất loại công viên bạn thích trong tương lai.

예시: I don't have a specific park in mind because many of the parks here feel quite similar to me. Instead, I would prefer parks with more diverse features, such as botanical gardens, sports facilities, or themed play areas that would make a visit more interesting.

× My cousin, uh, we always play the slide and swing also.

✓ My cousin and I always played on the slide and the swings.

The original sentence has incorrect verb form and structure. Use past tense 'played' to match 'When I was a child' and use the present participle structure 'playing on' avoided; better: 'played on the slide and the swings'. Also change 'we' placement and include article 'the'. Suggestion: reorder subject to 'My cousin and I' and use 'played on' for clarity.

× We also play hide and seek.

✓ We also played hide-and-seek.

Tense inconsistency: the context is past ('When I was a child'), so use past tense 'played'. Also use hyphenated 'hide-and-seek' as a compound. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout childhood recollection.

× If I had a chance, I would come back and play with them again.

✓ If I had the chance, I would come back and play with them again.

Use of 'had the chance' is more natural for hypothetical past/future; grammar type focuses on future/conditional form. Keep conditional 'would come' consistent. Suggestion: include definite article 'the' to make phrase idiomatic.

× Uh, no, I don't go to park much now because I'm 17 years old and I'm grade 12.

✓ Uh, no, I don't go to the park much now because I'm 17 years old and I'm in grade 12.

Missing definite article before 'park' and missing preposition 'in' before 'grade 12'. These are article and preposition issues; corrected by adding 'the' and 'in'. Use present tense 'don't go' is fine. Suggestion: say 'the park' and 'in grade 12'.

× Next year I will have an important exam.

✓ Next year I will have an important exam.

This sentence is correct; 'will have' correctly indicates a future event. No change needed.

× Uh, I will prepare for my entrance exam, so I need a lot of time to revise and study every day.

✓ I will prepare for my entrance exam, so I need a lot of time to revise and study every day.

Sentence is grammatically correct. 'Will' for future intention and 'need' for present necessity are appropriate. No change required.

× I would like to see more part in my city because every part has very large and every plot and many trees where people can, uh, trees.

✓ I would like to see more parks in my city because each park would have large open areas and many trees where people can relax and exercise.

Multiple issues: 'part' should be 'parks' (word choice/plural), 'every part has very large and every plot' is ungrammatical and unclear. Replaced with 'each park would have large open areas' and 'many trees' to convey meaning. Also corrected verb usage and sentence structure. Suggestion: use plural 'parks' and clearer nouns 'open areas' and appropriate verbs 'relax and exercise'.

× It create green spaces where people can exercise and relax.

✓ They create green spaces where people can exercise and relax.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'It create' should be 'They create' to agree with plural subject 'parks' (or use 'This creates' for singular). Change 'It' to 'They' and 'create' to 'create' (same form) while ensuring plural subject. Suggestion: match subject number and verb.

× I think I don't want to go any part in the future because every part, uh, has very similar, uh.

✓ I think I don't want to go to any park in the future because every park is very similar.

Errors: 'any part' should be 'any park' and needs preposition 'to'; 'has very similar' is incomplete — use 'is very similar' to compare whole parks. Suggestion: use 'to go to any park' and 'is very similar'.

× It also green spaces where people can relax and exercise blah blah blah.

✓ They also have green spaces where people can relax and exercise.

Missing verb and incorrect subject: 'It also green spaces' lacks verb 'has/have'. Use 'They also have green spaces' to match plural 'parks'. Remove filler 'blah blah blah'. Suggestion: complete the clause with a verb and match subject number.