Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response grammatically correct, more natural, and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I used to visit the park every weekend with my family, and sometimes I played games there with my friends, so those visits are among my happiest childhood memories.

제안: Give a direct, natural answer and add a brief reason. Use linking words like "because" to connect ideas and avoid filler words and repetition.

예시: Not really; I rarely go to parks now because my work and studies take up most of my free time.

제안: Begin with a clear opinion, then explain briefly with specific reasons. Correct grammar (word order, tense) and avoid contradictory phrasing. If you mean you do or don't want more parks, make that explicit and support it.

예시: I wouldn't mind more parks, because our city only has one main park which I have visited many times; additional parks would give people more options and reduce crowding.

제안: Give a clear, specific plan or preference. Say which park or type of park you want to visit and why, and mention a concrete intention using correct future forms. Avoid vague phrases and repetition.

예시: Yes. I plan to visit the national botanical gardens next year because it is very beautiful and I want to take photographs of the rare plants and landscapes.

× When I was child and I went to the park every week, every weekend and I enjoyed very well with my family and also with my friends.

✓ When I was a child, I went to the park every weekend and enjoyed it with my family and my friends.

Errors: missing article 'a' before 'child' (Article errors/26), redundant phrasing 'every week, every weekend' (sentence structure), and awkward phrase 'enjoyed very well' (incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs). Correction uses 'a child', simplifies time phrase to 'every weekend', removes redundant subject 'I' before 'enjoyed', and replaces 'enjoyed very well' with 'enjoyed it'. Suggestion: include necessary articles, avoid redundant time expressions, and use natural collocations like 'enjoyed it' or 'had a great time'.

× Now, now I am not. Now currently I am not going to the park because I have no time.

✓ Currently I do not go to the park because I do not have time.

Errors: awkward repetition 'Now, now' and incorrect use of 'I am not' to mean 'I do not go' (present continuous vs simple present). Use simple present 'do not go' for habitual action and 'do not have time'. Suggestion: remove repetitions and choose the correct present tense for habits (simple present).

× No, because in our city has only one park and I am already it visit lot of time.

✓ No, because our city has only one park and I have already visited it many times.

Errors: incorrect word order 'in our city has' (there be/word order), incorrect tense 'I am already it visit' and missing past participle 'visited' (past tense/past participle), and wrong quantifier 'lot of time'. Correction: 'our city has' fixes order, 'have already visited' uses present perfect to indicate experience, and 'many times' is the correct quantifier. Suggestion: use correct subject-verb order, use present perfect for past experiences with relevance now, and use 'many times' or 'a lot of times'.

× Yes, I will go and I will collect my photos and it's a very beautiful in our country and shall I will go.

✓ Yes, I will go there and take photos; it is very beautiful in our country, so I will go.

Errors: awkward and incorrect phrasing 'collect my photos' (wrong verb), 'it's a very beautiful' uses adjective wrongly with article, and 'shall I will go' is ungrammatical (double modal). Also inconsistent verb forms. Correction uses 'go there', 'take photos', 'it is very beautiful', and 'I will go'. Suggestion: use 'take photos' for photographing, use 'very beautiful' without extra article, and use only one future auxiliary (will) or 'shall' in correct questions/offers, not both.