Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and clear: remove filler words (uh), use a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Use past tense consistently and give a specific reason or memory. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I loved going to the park as a child. I often went there during school breaks to play with my friends and to think quietly on a bench near the pond.

제안: Answer directly, avoid repetitions and fillers, and use present perfect or present simple to describe current habit. Give a brief reason and, if possible, mention how often you go.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but I rarely have time because of my busy work schedule. I usually visit a park only on weekends when I can relax and exercise.

제안: Be concise and specific: say whether you want more parks and why (e.g., health, recreation). Use linking words like 'because' and avoid repetition. Mention the kind of parks you'd like and how you would access them.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide space for exercise and family activities. I would especially welcome small neighborhood parks that are easy to reach by walking or a short commute.

제안: Be specific about which parks and why: name a park or describe its features, and explain why it's appealing. Keep answers concise and avoid vague phrases like 'popular on social media.'

예시: Yes, I hope to visit the famous botanical garden near the city next year because I have seen beautiful photos of its flower displays and walking paths, and I want to take pictures and relax there.

× Uh, since I was, uh, always, uh, love break. So whenever I want to play or think, I go to park nearby in, in my town.

✓ I loved going to the park when I was a child. Whenever I wanted to play or think, I went to the park near my town.

Problems: sentence structure errors and tense/subject-verb agreement. 'Since I was, always, love break' is ungrammatical. Use past tense to describe childhood habits ('loved', 'wanted', 'went'). Include articles with singular countable nouns ('the park') and correct preposition order ('near my town' or 'in my town'). Suggestion: Form a clear main clause, use past tense for past habits, include articles before singular countable nouns and place prepositions correctly.

× Uh, yes, I, I would love to go to the park now, but because, uh, we are an adult adult now, uh, we have a busy schedule so it's difficult for me to go into a park.

✓ Yes, I would love to go to the park now, but because we are adults now and have busy schedules, it is difficult for me to go to the park.

Problems: incorrect number agreement and article use. 'We are an adult adult' should be plural 'we are adults'. 'Have a busy schedule' should match plural subject ('have busy schedules') or rephrase to singular. 'Go into a park' is awkward; use 'go to the park'. Maintain present tense for current situation. Suggestion: Ensure subject and noun forms agree in number, keep consistent tense, and use idiomatic prepositions ('go to the park').

× I would love it too, uh, if I have uh, my time and Yep, uh, free free time. I would lovely to visit Tamar parks in, in my town and not also in my town but also in the uh, nearby towns where I can just commute.

✓ I would love that if I had the time and free time. I would love to visit more parks in my town and in nearby towns where I can easily commute.

Problems: incorrect conditional/modal usage and adjective/adverb choice. Use second conditional for unreal or unlikely present situations: 'I would love that if I had the time.' 'I would lovely' is incorrect; use 'I would love'. 'Tamar parks' unclear—interpreted as 'more parks'. 'Not also in my town but also in the nearby towns' is redundant; simplify. Use adverb 'easily' for commute. Suggestion: Use correct conditional forms (if + past simple with would), correct verb collocations ('would love'), and simplify redundant phrases.

× Yes, I would have to go uh, to a park in some place, uh, you know, the popular ones in social media, uh, that I also want to go there since it's a popular and good place and park.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to a park that is popular on social media because it looks like a nice place.

Problems: awkward modal and tense use and redundant wording. 'I would have to go' suggests obligation; better to express desire with 'I would like to go'. 'In some place' should be 'in some place popular on social media' or simplified. Avoid saying 'I also want to go there' and 'popular and good place and park'—redundant. Suggestion: Use clear verbs for desire ('would like'), remove redundancy, and use concise modifiers ('popular on social media', 'nice place').

× So whenever I want to play or think, I go to park nearby in, in my town.

✓ Whenever I wanted to play or think, I went to the park nearby in my town.

Problems: tense mismatch and article/preposition errors. Because this refers to childhood, use past tense 'wanted' and 'went'. Include the definite article with singular countable noun: 'the park'. Place preposition correctly: 'nearby in my town' should be 'near my town' or 'in my town'. Suggestion: Match tense to context, use correct articles with countable nouns, and choose correct preposition order.