Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer past tense and more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence about liking parks, then give one or two specific supporting details (activities, memories) using linking words. Avoid repetition and unfinished fragments.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I often played football and climbed trees with neighborhood friends, which helped me feel happy and confident. Those visits are some of my happiest childhood memories.

제안: Use present tense and correct grammar; give one or two clear reasons with linking words. Avoid fillers and incomplete sentences. Say how parks help you (relaxation, thinking) and give a brief example of an activity you do there.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax after a busy school day. For instance, I often sit on a bench to read or take a short walk, which clears my mind and reduces stress.

제안: Give a concise opinion with a clear reason and one specific benefit. Use linking words (because, therefore) and correct collocations (air quality, environment). Avoid repetition and vague phrases.

예시: Yes, I would, because more parks would increase green space and improve air quality. For example, additional trees would reduce pollution and provide pleasant places for families to relax.

제안: Answer directly with a clear idea of the park you want to visit and one or two specific activities. Use correct phrases (fitness facilities, exercise) and avoid hesitations. Mention a short reason why it appeals to you.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit parks that have fitness facilities and outdoor gyms. There I could do regular workouts, improve my fitness, and meet others who enjoy exercising outdoors.

× Yes, I do like going to a park as a child because I can make a lot of fun in the park and make a lot of friends there and we can play together and it's really interesting for me. To go to.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because I had a lot of fun there, I made many friends, and we could play together; it was really interesting for me to go.

The student mixes present tense ('do like', 'can make') with reference to childhood, which requires past tense (Grammar Problem Type 6). Use 'liked' for past preference and 'had' or 'made' for past experiences. Also change 'a park' to plural 'parks' or keep 'a park' consistent; here plural 'parks' aligns with general childhood habit. 'Make a lot of fun' is incorrect collocation; use 'have a lot of fun.' Combine clauses to avoid sentence fragments such as 'To go to.' Suggestions: use past tense consistently, correct collocations, and join fragments into complete sentences.

× Yes, because it's really relaxed me when I finish my school day or when, when I feel pressure in my daily life and park is a good place for me to, uh, deeper thinking and I can feel comfortable and.

✓ Yes, because it really relaxes me when I finish my school day or when I feel stressed in my daily life, and the park is a good place for me to think more deeply and feel comfortable.

The student uses incorrect verb form 'relaxed me' instead of present simple 'relaxes me' for habitual present (Grammar Problem Type 6) and mixes tenses. 'Finish' and 'feel' can stay present as general habits. 'Feel pressure' is better as 'feel stressed.' 'Deeper thinking' should be 'think more deeply' (adverb form). Also include definite article 'the park.' Remove trailing incomplete conjunction. Suggestions: use present simple for habitual actions, correct verb forms, and prefer adverbial structures for 'think more deeply.'

× Yes, more parks means more plants and trees, which means it, which can improve our environment and make our air condition great greater. And I think it's really important to our society.

✓ Yes, more parks mean more plants and trees, which can improve our environment and make our air quality better. I think this is really important for our society.

Subject-verb agreement: 'more parks' is plural, so use 'mean' (Grammar Problem Type 13 and 27). 'Make our air condition great greater' is ungrammatical; use 'air quality better'—'quality' is the correct noun and 'better' is the comparative adjective. Also change 'important to our society' to 'important for our society' (preposition choice). Suggestions: ensure plural subjects take plural verbs, use correct noun collocations ('air quality'), and proper comparative adjectives.

× I'd like to go to park with, with fitness infrastructures and I can, I can shape my body type and, uh, I can do exercise there to and make friends there.

✓ I'd like to go to a park with fitness facilities where I can improve my fitness; I can exercise there and make friends.

Use of modal 'can' is acceptable but sentence has awkward phrases and word choice. 'Go to park' needs an article 'a park' (Grammar Problem Type 22). 'Fitness infrastructures' is unnatural; use 'fitness facilities.' 'Shape my body type' is unclear; 'improve my fitness' or 'get in shape' is better. Remove redundant 'I can, I can' repetitions and the misplaced 'to' at the end. Suggestions: add the article, choose natural collocations, avoid repetition, and use infinitive phrases correctly.