Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: You did not answer this question — give a clear direct response (yes/no or short opinion) and add one brief specific detail about what you liked (activity, person, or memory). Keep it natural and concise (1–3 sentences).

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I especially enjoyed playing cricket with neighborhood friends on weekend afternoons because it was a chance to be active and socialize.

제안: Your answer has a clear main idea but has grammar and fluency issues. Make a concise topic sentence, correct verb forms and phrasing, and add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Aim for 2–3 sentences and avoid redundancy.

예시: Yes, I still like going to parks. However, as a working professional I don't have much free time, so I only go when I can spare an hour to play cricket or football with friends.

제안: Your idea is relevant but the answer is unclear and contains awkward phrasing. Start with a direct opinion (Yes/No + reason), then give one specific suggestion and use linking words (for example, because, therefore). Keep sentences short and grammar correct.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because we lack proper spaces for sports. For example, local authorities could build dedicated playing fields for children and teenagers to encourage a stronger sports culture.

제안: You answered the question but used unclear vocabulary and grammar ("industry" is incorrect). Give a direct response, then briefly explain why with a specific time reference or condition when that might change. Use simple, correct words.

예시: At the moment I don't have any particular park I want to visit because my work keeps me very busy. Maybe in the future, if I have more free time or a holiday, I'd like to visit a large city park to relax and exercise.

× So currently I'm a working professional and I really get don't get enough time to play different sports but still if I have to spare some time for daily activities such as playing cricket or football then I would love to go in park.

✓ So currently I'm a working professional and I really don't get enough time to play different sports, but if I can spare some time for activities such as playing cricket or football, I would love to go to a park.

The original sentence has a double auxiliary error ('get don't get') and incorrect preposition ('in park'). It is also long and needs commas to separate clauses. Correction removes the duplicated verb, uses the correct preposition 'to a park', changes 'have to spare' to the more natural 'can spare', and adds punctuation for clarity. Suggest practicing subject-verb constructions and common prepositions of place (go to a park).

× I spent my opening rather than building parks, the local authorities should give an inclination towards building more playing grounds and grounds for the children as our country is really lacking in terms of sport culture and with the with this development we can attend.

✓ Instead of spending on openings, the local authorities should focus on building more playgrounds for children, because our country lacks a strong sports culture and this development would help.

The original uses 'spent my opening rather than building parks' which is unclear and ungrammatical, and uses 'give an inclination towards' which is incorrect collocation. 'With the with this development we can attend' is incoherent. The correction rephrases to 'Instead of spending on openings' (assuming intended meaning), uses 'focus on' instead of 'give an inclination towards', corrects 'playing grounds' to 'playgrounds', and clarifies the result clause. Suggest simplifying ideas into shorter clauses and using common collocations like 'focus on' and 'playground'.

× Looking at my current scenario, I really don't have preference to visit any park because I'm really industry in my professional work and that's what really fascinates me now.

✓ Given my current situation, I don't really have a preference for visiting any park because I am very involved in my professional work, and that is what interests me now.

Errors include missing article ('a preference'), incorrect adjective use ('industry' should be 'intense' or 'involved'), and awkward phrasing. The correction adds the article 'a', replaces 'industry' with 'involved' and 'fascinates' with 'interests', and smooths the sentence. Suggest learners check noun phrase articles and choose correct adjectives for states ('involved', 'busy', 'focused').