Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp thì quá khứ và làm câu tự nhiên hơn; tránh lỗi động từ và thêm chi tiết ngắn gọn. Ví dụ: dùng 'liked' thay vì 'like', và thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể về kỷ niệm hoặc hoạt động bạn làm ở công viên. Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu. Sử dụng liên từ nếu cần mở rộng.

예시: Yes, I liked going to the park when I was a child. I often played on the swings and had picnics with my family there, which was always fun.

제안: Sửa ngữ pháp, trật tự từ và cách diễn đạt để tự nhiên hơn; dùng thì hiện tại hoàn thành hoặc hiện tại đơn phù hợp (e.g. 'I don't go' hoặc 'I haven't had time'). Nói rõ lý do ngắn gọn và có thể nêu tần suất. Giữ câu ngắn, tối đa 3 câu, dùng liên từ như 'because' và 'so' hợp lý.

예시: Not really. I don't go to parks much now because I'm very busy with work, so I rarely have free time to visit them.

제안: Làm câu gọn và chính xác hơn; tránh lặp từ và lỗi cấu trúc. Nên nêu lý do cụ thể tại sao nhiều công viên tốt (ví dụ: không khí sạch, không gian cho gia đình). Dùng linking words như 'because' hoặc 'so' để mạch lạc. Giữ 2–3 câu tối đa.

예시: Yes, I would. More parks would improve air quality and provide green spaces for families, which shows the city cares about the environment.

제안: Trình bày rõ ý định và dùng cấu trúc ngôn ngữ phù hợp để diễn tả tương lai (e.g. 'I would like to visit' hoặc 'I hope to go'). Tránh lỗi từ và cố gắng nêu tên loại công viên hoặc hoạt động bạn muốn làm. Giữ câu ngắn, tối đa 3 câu và dùng liên từ như 'but' hợp lý.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit some parks in the future, especially large city parks where I can relax. However, I am very busy now, so I hope to find time to go there during holidays.

× Yes, I like going to the park when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'I like' with past time marker 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'liked' to match the past timeframe. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for past habits (e.g., 'I liked going to the park when I was a child').

× I think no, because now I was very, very busy and I don't have some time to go park.

✓ I don't think so, because now I am very, very busy and I don't have time to go to the park.

Multiple problems: 'I think no' is unnatural; use 'I don't think so'. 'Now I was' mixes past with 'now' — use present 'I am'. 'I don't have some time' is incorrect quantifier; use 'I don't have time'. 'go park' needs preposition and article: 'go to the park'. Suggestion: keep present tense for current situation and use correct prepositions and articles.

× Yes, because if you if I say more park in my country, I would think my country is protecting environment.

✓ Yes, because if I say there are more parks in my country, I would think my country is protecting the environment.

Errors include tangled conditional phrasing and missing plural/article: 'if you if I say' is wrong — use 'if I say' or better 'if there were more parks'. 'more park' needs plural 'parks'. 'is protecting environment' needs the definite article 'the environment'. Suggestion: use correct conditional structure and ensure plural and articles are used ('if there were more parks... the environment').

× I think so, but I don't know in the future I want to do go apart because in there I don't have many time, I'm so busy.

✓ I think so, but I don't know. In the future I might want to go to a park, but I don't have much time because I'm so busy.

Problems: run-on and awkward structure 'I don't know in the future I want to do go apart'. Use modal 'might' for future possibility. 'go apart' is incorrect; should be 'go to a park'. 'many time' is incorrect quantifier; use 'much time' for uncountable 'time'. Suggestion: split into clear sentences, use modal for possibility, correct preposition and article, and use 'much' with uncountable nouns.