Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 句子结构和时态不够准确，有语法和重复问题。回答要直接开门见山（主题句），随后用1–2个简洁句子补充具体细节并使用合适时态与连接词。注意避免填充词（uh）并纠正重复（"go to went to"）。

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my family after dinner, and we would walk together and talk about our day. Sometimes I also played with my friends on the playground.

제안: 表达不够清晰且有语法错误（如 "mine test", "I have any time"），句子冗长且填充词较多。直接回答后用一两个简洁明确的原因句，使用正确的时态和代词并用连接词衔接。

예시: Not really. I am busy preparing for my exams, so I need to spend most of my time studying. Because of that, I rarely have time to go outside to parks.

제안: 回答有点矛盾且表达不流畅（先说不想要更多，但又描述附近有公园）。应先明确立场，然后用具体细节支持，并减少停顿词。使用连接词如 "however" 或 "but" 来理清句子。

예시: Not really; I don't think we need many more parks in my city. There is a park in front of my house where people exercise and children play, so the current facilities are sufficient for my neighborhood.

제안: 回答较好但有重复词（"National National"）和填充词。可以更具体说明想看的动物或活动，并用一两句解释原因和期待，避免简单重复。

예시: Yes, I would love to visit Yellowstone National Park in the future. I'm especially excited to see wildlife like bison and bears, and to admire the park's famous geysers and landscapes.

× Of course, because, uh, I often go to went to the parks with my friends or my family.

✓ Of course, because I often went to the parks with my friends or my family.

原句混用了現在式和過去式（“go to” 與 “went to” 同時出現），導致時態不一致。根據上文問句是關於兒時（過去）的習慣，應使用過去習慣式“went to”。建議在描述過去習慣時，統一使用過去式動詞。

× After dinner, I often went to the park with my family because we can walk along and talk some happy thing.

✓ After dinner, I often went to the park with my family because we could walk and talk about happy things.

句中主要問題是時態與動詞形式不當。描述過去習慣時應使用過去式，將“can”改為過去式“could”。此外，短語“talk some happy thing”不自然，應改為“talk about happy things”（談論令人愉快的事情）。建議用正確片語‘talk about’並使用複數名詞表泛指。

× Not really because I'm preparing mine test. So I'm so I'm focus on my study. I have any time go to, uh, outside.

✓ Not really because I'm preparing for my test, so I'm focusing on my studies. I don't have any time to go outside.

原句存在多個時態與代詞/動詞形式錯誤。1) “preparing mine test” 應使用介詞 “for” 並且代詞須為所有格形容詞“my”。2) “I'm so I'm focus” 時態錯誤，應為現在進行式“I'm focusing”。3) “I have any time go to ... outside” 非否定表達且動詞不完整，應改為否定形式“I don't have any time to go outside”。建議注意介詞用法、現在進行式和否定句型。

× Not really, but around my house, uh, uh, park. Park is in front of my house. I can see some people, uh, exercise and work and some children play with their friends.

✓ Not really, but there is a park around my house. The park is in front of my house. I can see some people exercising and working, and some children playing with their friends.

原句結構混亂，缺少主語或正確連接詞：1) “around my house, uh, uh, park” 缺乏動詞或存在“there is”結構，應改為“There is a park around my house”。2) 句子“The park is in front of my house.” 為正確改寫。3) 列舉動作時應用動名詞（exercising, working, playing）以表示正在進行的活動，而不是原句的普通動詞序列。建議使用存在句型（there is）和動名詞來連接並描述活動。

× Of course, like Yellowstone National National Park, I want to go because I want to see more, uh, animals. I think it's a landmark all over the world.

✓ Of course. For example, Yellowstone National Park — I want to go because I want to see more animals. I think it's a world-famous landmark.

原句中“National National Park” 重複為筆誤，屬於詞語重複問題（結構錯誤的一部分），需刪除多餘一詞。時態方面雖多為現在表願望，可保留“want to go”。另外“a landmark all over the world” 語義不自然，改為“a world-famous landmark” 更貼切。建議注意重複單詞並使用常見搭配表達地標著名度。