Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with tense, grammar and sentence structure. Begin with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently when talking about childhood, and correct article and plural usage. Add one specific detail and a linking word to make the answer coherent. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My parents took me there most afternoons, where I played games with neighbourhood children and learned to ride a bicycle. However, the park next to our house has changed a lot, so thinking about it now makes me feel a little nostalgic.

제안: Correct repetitions and incomplete sentences. Start with a direct topic sentence, use present tense consistently, and complete the final clause. Add a linking word to connect ideas and give a concrete example of what you do there.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, although I have less free time now because of my studies. Therefore, I usually go with my university classmates after lectures to relax and clear my mind by walking or chatting on a bench.

제안: Avoid repeating words like "definitely" and be more concise. Start with a clear opinion, use linking words (e.g., furthermore, additionally), and provide a specific benefit or example of how parks improve urban life.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. Moreover, parks with trees and plants improve air quality and provide shade, so families can spend quality time together and residents can exercise or relax outdoors.

제안: Fix grammar and awkward phrases. Use one clear sentence to state the park you want to visit, then add specific reasons and a linking word. Replace vague phrase "opens my eyesight" with a clearer expression like "broaden my horizons" or "amaze me."

예시: I would love to visit a national park such as Yellowstone in the future. I want to see its wildlife and spectacular landscapes, because experiencing such places would broaden my horizons and inspire me.

× I love going to park.

✓ I love going to the park.

The noun 'park' here needs the definite article 'the' because the speaker refers to parks in general or the concept of visiting a park in their experience; English idiom uses 'the park' in this context. Use 'the' before singular countable nouns when referring to a specific or familiar instance or the general institution (e.g., 'go to the park').

× As a child, many afternoon my parents took me to a park to play with other children.

✓ As a child, many afternoons my parents took me to the park to play with other children.

'Afternoon' is countable when meaning repeated occurrences, so use the plural 'afternoons'. Also use 'the park' if referring to a familiar park; here 'a park' can be 'the park' since it's likely the same park beside their house. Ensure plural form for repeated events: 'many afternoons'.

× However, this park beside our house has changed a lot and this makes me a little nostalgic.

✓ However, the park beside our house has changed a lot, and this makes me a little nostalgic.

Use 'the park' because it is a specific park known to speaker and listener. Also add a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses. The main error requested by the list is article choice.

× Of course I like I still like going to parks, but as a student I don't have much free time because of my study commitments.

✓ Of course I still like going to parks, but as a student I don't have much free time because of my study commitments.

There is a redundant phrase 'I like I still like' causing a sentence structure error. Remove the extra 'I like' to form a grammatical sentence. Maintain present tense 'still like' to show continuing preference.

× I usually visit the park with my university classmates to relax and clear my mind when.

✓ I usually visit the park with my university classmates to relax and clear my mind.

The sentence ends with an incomplete subordinate 'when' that creates a sentence fragment. Remove 'when' or complete the clause (e.g., 'when I have free time'). Here removing 'when' makes the sentence complete and fits the context.

× Definitely, since there are plants and trees in the park, it can definitely bring fresh air to the surroundings.

✓ Definitely. Since there are plants and trees in the park, it can bring fresh air to the surroundings.

This sentence had repetition of 'definitely' and slightly awkward structure. Repeating the same adverb is stylistically poor; remove the second 'definitely'. The main grammar issue per list is quantifier/adverb repetition; improving word choice clarifies meaning.

× Besides, parents can have fun with their child and many people also enjoy the leisure time in the park.

✓ Besides, parents can have fun with their children and many people also enjoy leisure time in the park.

Use plural 'children' to match 'parents' unless referring to a single child; this is a number agreement/quantifier issue. Also 'leisure time' does not need the definite article 'the' in this general sense. Change 'their child' to 'their children' for natural agreement.

× I would like to go to a National Park, for example Yellowstone.

✓ I would like to go to a national park, for example Yellowstone National Park.

Use lowercase 'national park' unless part of a proper name; when giving an example, provide the full proper name 'Yellowstone National Park' for clarity. This corrects capitalization and proper noun usage. Modal 'would like' is correct and kept.

× I would like to enjoy the wildlife and the beauty of nature there.

✓ I would like to enjoy the wildlife and the beauty of nature there.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. The verb phrase 'would like to enjoy' is appropriate. Included here to indicate checked and correct usage of verb forms.

× It can really opens my eyesight when I visit there.

✓ It can really open my eyes when I visit there.

After a modal verb 'can', the base verb must be used: 'open' not 'opens'. Also English uses 'open my eyes' (idiomatic) rather than 'open my eyesight'. Keep 'when I visit there' but 'visit there' is slightly informal; better 'when I visit' or 'when I go there'.