Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, use correct tense and plural forms, and add one specific detail to make the answer natural and informative.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often visited with my parents and it made me feel energetic and happy. For example, I used to spend hours playing on the swings and going down the big slide with my friends.

제안: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence, improve grammar and word order, and be more specific about why you go now. Use a linking word to connect reason and example.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, especially with my children, because I want them to experience the same joyful and peaceful moments I had as a child. For example, we often walk in the garden, let the kids play on the slides, and relax on a bench while watching them interact with other children.

제안: Give a concise topic sentence, fix grammar and repetition, and add a specific suggestion or example of benefit to strengthen your answer. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'for example' correctly.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because the two existing parks are always overcrowded. For example, if additional small neighbourhood parks were built, families could visit nearby green spaces and children would have more room to play safely.

제안: Start with a direct reply, correct awkward phrasing, and give one or two specific reasons why you want to visit (scenery, activities). Avoid telling the examiner what they should do.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Nagarjuna Sagar Park in Hyderabad because I have heard it has beautiful scenery and large reservoirs. A friend who visited said the walking trails and viewpoints are stunning, so I would like to see the views and take photos there.

× Yes, when I was a child, I used to go apart a very much.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I used to go to parks a lot.

Original sentence has incorrect word choice and word order: 'go apart a very much' is ungrammatical. Replace 'apart' with 'to parks' and 'a very much' with 'a lot' to express frequency. Use plural 'parks' because general activity of visiting parks requires plural (see singular/plural).

× I liked going to park with my parents because it gives me energy It it used to give me energy and uh.

✓ I liked going to the park with my parents because it gave me energy.

Use of article: 'park' needs the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific habitual place. Tense consistency: original mixes present 'gives' and past 'used to give'; since speaker talks about childhood, use past 'gave'. Remove repetition and filler words for clarity.

× I used to play a lot so many games.

✓ I used to play a lot of different games.

Phrase 'so many games' after 'play a lot' is awkward. Use 'a lot of different games' or 'many games'. Maintain past habitual 'used to' correctly.

× I used to slide so many slides umm and uh.

✓ I used to go on many slides.

Repeat of 'slide' is redundant and collocation is wrong: we 'go on slides' or 'use slides'. Use 'many' with plural noun and past habitual 'used to' is appropriate.

× Yes, I like still going to park with my children now because whatever the enjoyment I have done in my childhood, I want my children also to face the same enjoyment and feel the peaceful nature in the park and enjoy the slides rides with other children too.

✓ Yes, I still like going to the park with my children now because I want them to have the same enjoyment I had in my childhood, to feel the peacefulness of the park, and to enjoy the slides with other children.

Multiple issues: article use ('the park'), word order ('I like still' -> 'I still like'), tense and phrasing ('have done in my childhood' incorrect — use 'I had'), adjective/adverb choice ('peaceful nature' -> 'peacefulness'), redundant 'slides rides' -> 'slides' or 'slide rides'. Correct present preference and reference to past experience.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because in my city there are only two parks where our population is more and uh, whenever we visit the parks every time there will be more population and it is very difficult for us to enjoy with our kids there.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are only two parks but our population is large, and whenever we visit them they are crowded, so it is very difficult for us to enjoy time there with our kids.

Original has awkward clauses and incorrect phrasing: 'where our population is more' should be 'but our population is large'. 'Whenever we visit the parks every time there will be more population' is redundant and ungrammatical — replace with 'they are crowded'. Adjust word order and use plural pronouns consistently.

× So I, I feel like there should be more parks built in my city.

✓ So I feel there should be more parks built in my city.

Minor redundancy: duplicate 'I' and informal filler. Simplify to clear sentence; structure is fine otherwise.

× Yes, they are. I would like to visit Nagarjuna Sagar Park in Hyderabad because I heard that it is very beautiful to visit there.

✓ Yes, there are. I would like to visit Nagarjuna Sagar Park in Hyderabad because I have heard that it is very beautiful.

Pronoun 'they' is incorrect for 'Are there any parks you want to go to' — correct short answer is 'Yes, there are.' Also 'I heard that it is very beautiful to visit there' is awkward; use present perfect 'I have heard' and avoid 'to visit there' repetition.

× One of my friends they have already visited and they said it is really beautiful.

✓ One of my friends has already visited and said it was really beautiful.

Use singular agreement: 'one of my friends' is singular, so use 'has' not 'have' and avoid redundant 'they'. Also backshift tense: if friend visited in past, 'said it was' is appropriate, or 'said it is' if still true. Keep pronoun references clear.

× You should go and try it.

✓ You should go and see it.

'Try it' is slightly odd for visiting a park; 'see it' or 'visit it' is more natural. Keep imperative recommendation concise.