Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make a clear topic sentence, correct grammar and use concise supporting details. Use past tense consistently, avoid repetition, and add one or two specific details (e.g., activities or a memorable event). Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I often went in the evenings with my parents or friends to play games and relax after doing my homework. I remember flying kites with my brother and having picnics on the grass.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence in present tense and provide specific details about frequency and activities. Use linking words for coherence and correct verb forms (e.g., "sometimes I go"). Keep it concise and natural.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks sometimes. I usually visit with friends to chat and relax, and occasionally I help my father and siblings with gardening work there.

제안: Answer the question directly about wanting more parks, then give a clear reason with specific details. Correct grammar (numbers, articles) and avoid unclear phrases. Use linking words like "because" or "so" properly.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because we only have three or four small parks. More parks would provide space for people to relax and increase green areas where birds and other wildlife can thrive.

제안: Start with a direct answer and then briefly explain. Use natural phrasing (e.g., "No, not really" or "No, I don't have any particular park in mind") and give a clear reason about time or priorities. Keep it to 1–2 sentences and correct verb forms.

예시: No, I don't have any particular park I plan to visit in the future because I need to focus on my studies and will have limited free time.

× Yes I go to like to going parts when I was a child I go park with my friends or my parents in evening time and home work an hour and spend time with my friends and talking them.

✓ Yes, I used to like going to parks when I was a child. I went to the park with my friends or my parents in the evening, did my homework for an hour, and spent time talking with my friends.

Errors: incorrect present tense and verb forms ('I go to like to going parts') and wrong word choices (parts -> parks), missing articles and prepositions, and awkward sentence structure. Correction uses 'used to' to indicate a habitual past action, changes 'go park' to 'went to the park', adds articles ('the evening'), uses past tense verbs consistently ('did', 'spent'), and corrects 'talking them' to 'talking with my friends'. Suggestion: Use 'used to' for habitual past actions, ensure verbs agree in tense and include necessary articles and prepositions.

× Yes, sometime I go to park with my friends and spend time with them and talking with them. Also work in parks with my father and my siblings.

✓ Yes, sometimes I go to the park with my friends and spend time talking with them. I also work in parks with my father and my siblings.

Errors: incorrect adverb form ('sometime' -> 'sometimes'), missing article ('the park'), inconsistent verb forms ('spend time with them and talking' -> 'spend time talking'), and missing subject in second sentence ('Also work' -> 'I also work'). Correction fixes adverb, adds the definite article, uses gerund correctly after 'spend time', and includes the subject. Suggestion: Use 'sometimes' for frequency, include articles before singular nouns, and keep parallel verb structures.

× Yes, I like to see more birds in my city because in my city where I live, there is only three and four parks and it is fulfill of purpose, so I get more parts in my city.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because where I live there are only three or four parks and they do not meet the needs, so I want more parks in my city.

Errors: wrong focus ('see more birds' likely intended 'see more parks'), incorrect use of 'there is' with plural ('there are'), wrong number expression ('three and four' -> 'three or four'), article and word choice errors ('it is fulfill of purpose' -> 'they do not meet the needs'), and 'parts' -> 'parks'. Correction uses 'would like' for preference, fixes 'there are' for plural noun, uses 'three or four', and clarifies meaning. Suggestion: Match 'there is/are' to the noun number, use 'or' for approximations, and choose precise verbs ('meet the needs').

× No, in my opinion I cannot see any park in my future because I can focus in my study and I have no time to go parts.

✓ No, in my opinion I will not visit any parks in the future because I will focus on my studies and I will not have time to go to parks.

Errors: incorrect modal/time expressions ('cannot see any park in my future' is unnatural), inconsistent tenses, missing prepositions ('focus in my study' -> 'focus on my studies'), plural/article errors ('go parts' -> 'go to parks'). Correction uses future tense 'will' to describe future plans, adds correct preposition and plural noun, and uses 'go to' for visiting places. Suggestion: Use 'will' for future intentions, 'focus on' for concentrating, and 'go to' with place nouns.