Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答直接但太简短且重复（使用两次 think/interesting），缺乏具体细节和连接词。建议给出一到两句具体回忆或原因，并用连词衔接，使回答更自然有说服力。例如说明在公园做什么、和谁一起、感受如何。保持不超过5句。

예시: Yes, I did. I used to go to the park with my family every weekend, where we would have picnics and play games. Those visits were fun because I could run around freely and explore nature, which made me feel happy and relaxed.

제안: 回答有内容但表达重复、语法不够准确（如“go in, go to park”及“make our relationship much more stronger”），句子冗长且需要连接词。建议先给明确主题句，再用一两条具体活动举例，并修正语法与搭配。

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Nowadays I often go with friends to play football or have barbecues, which helps us relax and get closer to each other.

제안: 回答有观点但表达不够简洁，存在语法和用词问题（如“means that... is getting better and better”，“good phenomenon”不自然），并重复相同意思。建议用一到两句清晰表达理由，并用具体细节或例子支持（如减少污染、更多休闲场所）。

예시: Yes, I would. More parks would improve air quality and offer more places for exercise and relaxation. For example, adding green spaces near busy roads could reduce pollution and give residents a pleasant place to unwind.

제안: 回答表达重复且不够具体（重复提到“popular”但未给具体原因），语法有小错误（如“I have”不完整、“go to there”应为“go there”）。建议说明想去的具体景点或活动与原因，使用连接词使陈述连贯。

예시: Yes, I would love to visit Yellowstone National Park because of its unique geothermal features, such as geysers and hot springs. I am especially excited to see Old Faithful and to hike through the park’s diverse landscapes.

× Yes, I did, because I think going to parks is really interesting.

✓ Yes, I did, because I thought going to parks was really interesting.

学生在回答过去喜好时使用了现在时“think”和“is”，与前半句过去时“不一致”。应把动词改为过去时（thought, was）以保持时态一致。建议：谈论过去的经历时，主句和从句都用过去时。

× I think yes, I do because I think right now I have a lot of friends, so we can go in, go to park and do a lot of activities and also can make our relationship much more stronger.

✓ Yes, I do. Right now I have a lot of friends, so we can go to parks and do a lot of activities and also make our relationships much stronger.

句子存在时态和表达问题：主句用现在时可保留，但短语“go in, go to park”不自然，应为“go to parks”；“can make our relationship much more stronger”中有多余的助动词和错误的比较级表达，“much stronger”已足够，且“relationship”应为复数或具体的“relationships”。建议：简化句子，去掉多余助动词，名词与数量一致。

× Yes, I would like to because I think, uh, there are a lot of parks in my city means that the environment and also the condition of air is getting better and better. It means that, uh, my living conditions is getting better and better. So I think that is really good phenomenon.

✓ Yes, I would, because I think that having a lot of parks in my city means the environment and the air quality are getting better and better. It also means my living conditions are improving, so I think that is a really good phenomenon.

原句时态和主谓一致有问题：‘the condition of air is’和‘my living conditions is’中的动词与主语不一致，应使用复数形式are；“there are a lot of parks… means”句子结构混乱，应改为“having a lot of parks… means”。建议：保持主谓一致，用更自然的句子连接词并修正词序。

× Oh yes, I have. I think I want to go to Yellowstone Park because it is really famous. I really want to say how popular it is and why it is popular. So I will go to there in the future.

✓ Oh yes, I have. I want to go to Yellowstone Park because it is really famous. I really want to see how popular it is and why it is popular. So I will go there in the future.

句子存在时态与词语使用问题：‘I think I want to’可简化为‘I want to’以表明确切愿望；‘want to say how popular it is’用词不当，应为‘want to see how popular it is’；‘go to there’是不正确的短语，应为‘go there’。建议：用更自然的动词搭配并简化句子结构，注意去掉多余介词。