Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答要更直接并注意语法与时态一致。开头用一句主题句直接回应（例如：Yes, I loved going to parks as a child），然后用一到两句具体细节支持，避免重复和多余词汇，控制在最多五句内。注意人称和动词形式（I liked / made me feel bored -> made me feel bored），以及去掉多余填充词。

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because I was an outgoing kid and staying at home made me feel bored. In the park I enjoyed looking at the trees and flowers and playing with new friends, which made my weekends fun and lively.

제안: 减少语气词和停顿（uh, umm），回答要完整并有逻辑。先给主题句（Yes, I still enjoy going to parks），再用1–2句具体原因和结果，结尾完整。使用正确的动词形式（see -> see, help me to -> help me relax）。

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they remind me of my childhood. When I walk or run there I feel carefree and relaxed, which helps me relieve stress after a busy day.

제안: 回答总体不错，但需更简洁并注意词汇搭配与语法（a lot of trees, make our city's atmosphere cleaner, escape from the hustle and bustle of life）。先给直接回答，然后用一到两句具体原因，并用连接词使表达更流畅。

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because parks with a lot of trees can make the city's atmosphere cleaner. They also give people places to relax and escape from the hustle and bustle of daily life.

제안: 回答应更具体并注意语法（I like -> I enjoy, which have -> which have, interesting me -> interest me）。给出一到两句具体描述你想去的公园特点，并说明原因或期待的活动，保持句子简洁。

예시: I enjoy natural landscapes, so I would like to visit parks that have many trees, mountains and rivers. I imagine hiking and taking photos there, which would be very relaxing and enjoyable.

× When I was a child I really like to go to the park 'cause I'm an outgoing person, so a stay at home made me feel bored.

✓ When I was a child I really liked to go to the park because I was an outgoing person, so staying at home made me feel bored.

句子描述的是过去的情况，应使用过去时。原句中有现在时“like”和现在时表述“I'm”，以及不正确的短语“a stay at home”。建议将“like”改为过去式“liked”，“I'm”改为“I was”，并把“a stay at home”改为动名词短语“staying at home”。这样时态一致且表达自然。

× When I go to the garden I can see the trees, the flowers and make I can make more new friends that is really interested me.

✓ When I went to the garden I could see the trees and the flowers and make new friends, which really interested me.

原句中时态不一致，且“make I can make”冗余错误。根据上下文应使用过去时（went, could）。“more new friends”冗余，“new friends”即可。关系代词部分应使用“which really interested me”来修饰前面的事实。动词和从句结构需调整。

× Yes, I still like to go into the parks cause, uh, when I go to the parks, I can, uh, the memory of my childhood will come back and I can just umm, uh, seeing and uh, jumping and running just like a child in the park.

✓ Yes, I still like to go to the parks because when I go to the parks, the memories of my childhood come back and I can just see, jump and run like a child in the park.

这里讲现在习惯性动作，用一般现在时。把“will come back”改为“come back”，把不定式/现在分词混用的“seeing and ... jumping and running”改为并列的动词原形“see, jump and run”。同时“memory”改为复数“memories”更自然。

× So it can, uh, help me to.

✓ So it can help me relax.

原句不完整，缺少动词宾语或不定式补语。将其补全为完整表达，例如“help me relax”（帮助我放松）。简洁明了，符合语法。

× Yes, I like to see more parks 'cause I think the parks with lot of trees can make our city, the atmosphere more clean and people have more a place to to relax, to escape from the hustle and bustle life that is really good.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks because I think parks with a lot of trees can make our city's atmosphere cleaner and give people more places to relax and escape from the hustle and bustle of life, which is really good.

原句中缺少冠词“a lot of trees”，短语“make our city, the atmosphere more clean”语序和比较级用法不当，应为“make our city's atmosphere cleaner”。“people have more a place”词序错误，改为“give people more places”。“hustle and bustle life”应为“hustle and bustle of life”。整体需调整词序和介词搭配。

× I like to appreciate the land landscape, so I want to go to the park, which have the natural sign with a lot of trees, mountains, rivers.

✓ I like to appreciate the landscape, so I want to go to a park that has natural scenery with a lot of trees, mountains and rivers.

“land landscape”重复且不自然，应为“landscape”。修饰从句应使用“that has”而不是“which have”；“natural sign”应为“natural scenery”。并列名词间用“and”。此外冠词和动词形式需与主语一致。

× That would That's very interesting me and I think I can really enjoy it.

✓ That would be very interesting to me and I think I can really enjoy it.

原句中“That's very interesting me”结构错误。正确表达应为“interesting to me”（对我来说有趣）或“interests me”。同时“That would be”用来表达可能性或愿望，需补上“be”。