Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答内容相关且有个人背景，但句子时态混乱且重复较多。应直接用过去时表达童年经历，避免重复开头词，并补充一到两句具体细节以丰富回答。可练习将三到四个简短句子连贯起来，使用连接词（for example, because, so）提高流畅度。

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. I grew up on the Tibetan Plateau, where the grasslands felt like a huge natural park. Because there was so much open space, we often ran, played games and had small picnics with family.

제안: 回答能传达喜好和活动，但语法和表达不够准确（如时态、冠词、省略动词形式），有口语填充词影响自然性。建议用完整句子并减少填充词，使用连接词（for example, sometimes, because）并给出具体活动细节。

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, especially near where I work in Beijing. I often go there with friends to have a picnic or just walk around and relax. For example, last weekend we sat by a lake and chatted for an hour to unwind after work.

제안: 回答表达观点但逻辑和语法混乱，信息未完成（最后一句未表达完整意思）。建议先给出直接观点句，然后用一两句具体理由支持，避免重复短语并完成因果关系。举例说明公园如何改善拥挤和空气质量会更有说服力。

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in Beijing. More green spaces could relieve crowding on public transport and provide places for people to exercise. Also, parks would help improve air quality by adding trees and reducing heat in busy areas.

제안: 回答清晰但含有犹豫语气词且细节不足。建议直接命名具体公园并说明原因或期望的活动，使用完整句并加入时间安排或计划使回答更具体。

예시: Yes, there are a few parks I would like to visit, such as the National Forest Park. I want to go there to hike and see the scenery, probably next holiday when I have some free time.

× I like going to parks as a child.

✓ I liked going to parks as a child.

句子描述的是过去的经历（作为一个孩子），所以动词应使用过去时。建议把现在时 "like" 改为过去时 "liked"，以与时间状语 "as a child" 一致。

× I grew up on the Tibet Plateau, so I live on the grasslands and actually on the grasslands is kind of a park, you know?

✓ I grew up on the Tibetan Plateau, so I lived on the grasslands, and actually the grasslands were kind of a park.

句首使用了过去时 "grew up" 表明叙述的是过去经历，与之相关的状态也应改为过去时；此外地名形容词化应为 "Tibetan Plateau"。因此把 "live" 改为过去式 "lived"，并把后半句主语与动词时态改为过去式 "grasslands were"。

× Do you still like going to parks now?

✓ Do you still like going to parks now?

此句本身语法正确，无需改动。保留原句。

× Yeah, of course, I still like going to Park Snow because I working and living here Beijing.

✓ Yeah, of course, I still like going to Park Snow because I work and live here in Beijing.

动词应使用一般现在时来描述现在的习惯或状态，因此应将进行时 "working and living" 改为一般现在时 "work and live"；此外地名前需加介词 "in Beijing"。

× So I really like to go to the park with my friends. Sometimes we can take a picnic and sometimes just to hang out and walking.

✓ So I really like to go to the park with my friends. Sometimes we have a picnic and sometimes just hang out and walk.

"take a picnic" 虽可理解但更地道为 "have a picnic"；第二部分中不应混用不定式或动名词形式，"to hang out and walking" 语法不一致，应该并列相同形式："hang out and walk"。

× Yeah, there's a really, you know, relaxed place.

✓ Yeah, it's a really, you know, relaxed place.

此处要指代单一的公园或地点，应使用主语 "it is" 而不是存在句 "there is"。原句中 "there's a... place" 语意勉强但与前文衔接更自然用 "it's"。

× Yeah, of course, you know, leaving Beijing and you can feel everything is crowded, especially like transport, public transport in the very crowded.

✓ Yeah, of course. When you leave Beijing you can feel that everything is crowded, especially public transport, which is very crowded.

原句中动名词短语 "leaving Beijing" 用法不当，需改为时间状语从句 "When you leave Beijing"；同时需要连接词 "that" 引导宾语从句来表达感觉；"public transport in the very crowded" 语序和结构错误，改为 "public transport, which is very crowded" 更清晰。

× So if we have some so much more parts, I think that is really interesting thing and important thing because you know, Beijing air pollution is very.

✓ So if we had many more parks, I think that would be really interesting and important because, you know, Beijing's air pollution is serious.

原句中 "some so much more parts" 量词和复数形式错误，应改为 "many more parks" 或 "a lot more parks"；时态与假设条件匹配应用虚拟语气（与现实相反或不确定）使用 "had" 和 "would be"；"interesting thing and important thing" 冗余，应简化为形容词短语；最后 "Beijing air pollution is very." 不完整，应补全为 "Beijing's air pollution is serious" 并加上所有格。

× Yeah, there are a few parks I really want to go to the in the future, uh, such as in the National Forest, uh, park. I really want to go when I have a free time.

✓ Yeah, there are a few parks I really want to go to in the future, such as the National Forest Park. I really want to go when I have free time.

原句中出现多余的定冠词和介词顺序错误，"go to the in the future" 应为 "go to in the future"；公园名称应为 "the National Forest Park" 或直接 "National Forest Park"（通常带定冠词）；"have a free time" 中冠词不应与不可数名词 "free time" 一起使用，应为 "have free time"。