Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer slightly more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, use one linking word to add a detail, avoid filler words (uh) and minor grammar issues. Add a specific memory to enrich content.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I often played hide-and-seek with my neighbors under the big oak tree, and I remember stopping to admire the colorful flowerbeds after school.

제안: Correct grammar and pronunciation, avoid vagueness and unfinished sentences. Use a clear topic sentence, then one or two supporting details with linking words. Replace unclear words ('pop', 'leg') with precise vocabulary and finish the sentence cleanly.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy visiting the parks in my neighborhood because they are peaceful and green. When I'm upset, I often sit on a bench for about 30 minutes to relax and clear my mind, which helps reduce my anxiety.

제안: Use correct grammar (singular/plural, verb forms) and concise phrasing. Begin with a direct response, then give one clear reason with a linking word. Remove fillers and make nouns/adjectives agree.

예시: Absolutely — I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space for exercise and relaxation. For instance, more parks would give families safe places to meet and children room to play.

제안: Fix factual/word-choice errors and improve coherence: use correct prepositions ('in a newspaper'), accurate nouns ('historic sites' not 'meals'), and combine sentences with linking words. Be specific about what attracts you.

예시: Yes, I'd like to visit Kung Fu National Park because I read about it in a newspaper and it looked fascinating. The park's historic sites and scenic views seem memorable, and I would enjoy hiking there to take photographs and learn about its history.

× Yes I still going enjoying visiting the parks in my neighborhood because they are pop.

✓ Yes, I still enjoy visiting the parks in my neighborhood because they are popular.

The original sentence contains incorrect verb + -ing forms and word choice. 'still going enjoying visiting' is ungrammatical. After 'still' use the base verb 'enjoy' for a habitual present: 'still enjoy visiting'. Also 'pop' is an informal abbreviation; use 'popular'. Improve punctuation by adding a comma after 'Yes'. Suggestion: Use 'still + base verb' for habitual actions (I still enjoy...), and choose full adjectives (popular).

× They help me reduce stress when I'm upset I usually sit around the leg for about 30 minutes which helps me release my anxiety and.

✓ They help me reduce stress. When I'm upset, I usually sit on a bench for about 30 minutes, which helps me relieve my anxiety.

The original is a run-on with incorrect preposition and noun: 'sit around the leg' is unclear and ungrammatical. Split into two sentences or use proper punctuation. Use the preposition 'on' with 'sit' and a correct noun like 'bench'. Use 'relieve' rather than 'release' for anxiety. Add commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: Break long run-on sentences into shorter ones and use correct prepositions and verbs for idiomatic expressions. Note: This fixes sentence structure and preposition errors.

× Absolutely yes, Parks is one of my favorite place I like to go to and uh cities is really need to be more parks for everyone to enjoy and visit.

✓ Absolutely yes, parks are one of my favorite places to go, and cities really need to have more parks for everyone to enjoy and visit.

Multiple article, number and subject-verb agreement errors: 'Parks is' should be 'parks are' because 'parks' is plural. 'one of my favorite place' should be 'one of my favorite places'. 'cities is really need' is incorrect: use 'cities really need to have' or 'cities really need more parks'. Remove filler 'uh' and add commas. Suggestion: Ensure subject and verb agree in number and use the correct noun form after 'one of'. Use 'need to have' or 'need' + noun phrase for clarity.

× Yes, I'd like to visit Kung Fu National Park because I saw it and newspaper and it looked fascinating.

✓ Yes, I'd like to visit Kung Fu National Park because I saw it in a newspaper and it looked fascinating.

The phrase 'saw it and newspaper' is ungrammatical; the correct preposition is 'in' before 'a newspaper'. The rest is past tense narrative about seeing the park in print, which is correct. Suggestion: Use correct prepositions with verbs of seeing: 'saw it in a newspaper'.

× The park's historic meals and beautiful sceneries seem very memorable and I love to explore them in person.

✓ The park's historic features and beautiful scenery seem very memorable, and I would love to explore them in person.

'Historic meals' is likely a wrong word choice; 'meals' doesn't fit—use 'features' or 'sites'. 'Sceneries' is nonstandard; 'scenery' is an uncountable noun. 'I love to explore' should be 'I would love to explore' to match the conditional desire about the future. Suggestion: Choose appropriate nouns ('features', 'sites') and use uncountable forms for 'scenery'; use modal 'would' to express desire for a future visit.