Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify and correct vocabulary and grammar, give a clear topic sentence, and provide specific supporting details in coherent sentences with linking words. Avoid unclear phrases (e.g., "box", "lots of 20s") and use correct verb forms and word order. Keep answer within 3–4 concise sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I often went with two or three friends, and we played on the slides, seesaws and monkey bars. We usually spent a couple of hours there, especially in the afternoons.

제안: This answer is generally clear but needs more concise language, correct collocations, and one linking phrase to connect ideas. Replace idioms if used incorrectly and give a specific frequency or reason to sound natural. Mention the park's feature precisely (e.g., "a park with musical installations" rather than "musical park").

예시: Yes, I still like going to parks, although I don't go often. I visit about once a month to walk with my parents, because I enjoy the peaceful atmosphere. There is a park near my house with musical installations and pleasant walking paths.

제안: Make a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then provide two specific reasons with linking words. Fix collocations (say "environmentally friendly" and "I would prefer more parks in my city"). Remove unclear fragments like "Go parks are really nice this to go" and "boxing my city".

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they are environmentally friendly and improve air quality. Moreover, parks provide safe, pleasant places for friends and families to meet, so I would prefer more green spaces in my neighbourhood.

제안: Provide a concise, clear description with correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Use linking words to describe location, size and features. Replace unclear words like "bog" if you mean "park" or "lake area", and correct measurements phrasing.

예시: Yes, there is a park in Sector 5 near my house that I want to visit more often. It covers about two to three kilometres and features a large pond with a charming bridge, walking trails and green lawns.

× Yes, I did like to go to the box when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I did like to go to the park when I was a child.

The student used 'the box' which is incorrect noun choice; context requires 'park'. Also article use with 'park' depends on specificity; 'the park' is correct when referring to parks in general as a child visited them. Suggestion: use the appropriate noun and 'the' when talking about a specific familiar place.

× I used to be with my two or three friends there.

✓ I used to be there with two or three friends.

Word order is awkward and 'my two or three friends' is acceptable but placing 'there' after 'be' is less natural. Change order for clarity: 'I used to be there with two or three friends.' Suggestion: place location after 'used to be' or say 'I used to go there with two or three friends.'

× We never lots of 20s in the park.

✓ We never had large groups of people in the park.

The original is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Lots of 20s' is incorrect phrase. Likely meaning was 'lots of people' or 'groups of 20'. Use 'had large groups of people' or 'saw lots of people.' Suggestion: express quantity with 'lots of people' or 'groups of about 20.'

× I used to go slides, seesaws and monkey bars so.

✓ I used to play on slides, seesaws, and monkey bars.

Incorrect verb collocation: 'go slides' is wrong. Use 'play on' or 'go on' for playground equipment. Place items in a clear list and include commas. Suggestion: use 'play on' + plural equipment names.

× I do like going to the parks now also, but I don't go very often.

✓ I do like going to parks now, but I don't go very often.

Article 'the' before 'parks' is unnecessary when speaking generally. Remove 'also' or reposition it; 'now' is sufficient. Suggestion: say 'going to parks' or 'going to the park' if referring to a specific park.

× I go once in a blue moon for walking with my parents.

✓ I go once in a blue moon to walk with my parents.

Incorrect preposition 'for walking' and awkward phrasing. Use 'to walk' to express purpose. Suggestion: 'I go once in a blue moon to walk with my parents.'

× Otherwise I don't really go there, but when I go there I do like the environment of the park.

✓ Otherwise I don't really go there, but when I do, I like the park's environment.

Repetition of 'go there' is awkward; 'when I do' is more concise. 'Environment of the park' is correct but 'park's environment' is more natural. Suggestion: reduce repetition and use possessive.

× This is a musical park near my house.

✓ There is a musical park near my house.

Original statement 'This is a musical park near my house' is acceptable in some contexts but in response describing location, 'There is a musical park near my house' is clearer. Use 'There is' to introduce existence. Suggestion: use 'There is' when introducing a nearby place.

× Yes, I would definitely like to see more and more parks in my city because it's a very environmental friendly thing.

✓ Yes, I would definitely like to see more parks in my city because it is very environmentally friendly.

'More and more' is redundant; 'more parks' suffices. 'Environmental friendly' is incorrect form; use 'environmentally friendly' (adverb + adjective) or 'environmentally friendly thing' is awkward—better to say 'it is very environmentally friendly' referring to parks. Suggestion: use correct adverb form and concise phrasing.

× Also parks are a good place to hang out with my friends.

✓ Also, parks are a good place to hang out with friends.

'My friends' is acceptable but 'friends' is more general. Add comma after 'Also' for clarity. Suggestion: 'parks are a good place to hang out with friends.'

× Go parks are really nice this to go.

✓ Parks are really nice places to go.

Original is ungrammatical and word order is incorrect. 'Go parks' is wrong; correct phrase is 'parks are really nice places to go.' Suggestion: use 'places to go' after noun.

× So yes I would prefer boxing my city.

✓ So yes, I would prefer more parks in my city.

'Prefer boxing my city' is meaningless. Likely intended 'prefer parks in my city' or 'prefer more parks in my city.' Use comma after 'So yes.' Suggestion: state specific preference clearly: 'I would prefer more parks in my city.'

× Yes I do here in sector 5 It it's the place near my house where there is a big bog that covers the area around 2 to 3 kilometers.

✓ Yes, there is one here in Sector 5. It's a place near my house with a big bog that covers an area of around 2 to 3 kilometers.

Multiple issues: missing punctuation, wrong preposition 'do here', 'bog' maybe 'bog' or 'park'—kept 'bog'. Use 'there is one' to indicate existence. 'Covers the area around 2 to 3 kilometers' should be 'covers an area of around 2 to 3 kilometers.' Suggestion: break into two sentences, use 'there is', 'an area of'.

× It has a very beautiful pond and a bridge over the ponds there also.

✓ It has a beautiful pond and a bridge over the pond there as well.

Plural 'ponds' inconsistent with 'a beautiful pond'. 'Also' at end is awkward; 'as well' or 'also' earlier is better. Suggestion: keep singular/plural consistent and position 'also/as well' properly.