Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I loved going to parks as a child), then give one or two specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect words (e.g., "work" should be "parks"). Keep answers under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I remember feeling very excited because there were swings and a small pond where I fed ducks, so I often spent whole afternoons playing there.

제안: Give a clear direct response, then explain why with one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, "because" or "since"). Correct subject-verb agreement ("I like" not "I likes") and avoid repeating the same phrase. Keep it natural and concise.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are much better maintained now than in the past, and there are clean paths and new benches which make them comfortable for walking and relaxing.

제안: Answer directly then give specific, realistic suggestions. Use correct nouns and numbers (e.g., "many parks" rather than "23 parks" unless certain). Use linking words like "because" and "so" to explain benefits, and avoid repeating words. Check grammar (plural forms and word order).

예시: Yes, I would. Currently our city has only one small park, so I think we need more green spaces so families can picnic and children can play safely. For example, adding three or four medium-sized parks across different neighborhoods would help everyone access outdoor recreation.

제안: Start with a clear statement about the park you want to visit. Give specific details (location, why it appeals) and a brief plan. Use correct tense and word order (e.g., "I saw it on Instagram" not "I seen"). Keep it within three sentences for clarity.

예시: Yes, there is a large park in Rajasthan that I saw on Instagram and would love to visit. It looks beautiful with wide lawns and picnic areas, so I plan to go there with my family during the next summer holiday.

× When I was in my childhood I liked to go to work very much because when I go to park I've got very much excited on when I resume to the park.

✓ When I was a child, I liked going to the park very much because I got very excited when I returned to the park.

Mixed tenses and incorrect present tense forms: 'When I was in my childhood' is unnatural; use 'When I was a child'. 'liked to go to work' is incorrect context; use 'liked going to the park'. 'when I go to park I've got very much excited on when I resume to the park' mixes present and present perfect with awkward phrasing. Use past simple 'got' and 'returned' to keep past-time consistency. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (past) and use natural collocations like 'go to the park', 'get excited', 'return to the park'.

× And from childhood to now I like to go to park very much.

✓ From childhood until now, I have liked going to the park very much.

Tense mismatch: 'from childhood to now' requires present perfect to show action continuing to present. Use 'have liked' and the gerund 'going to the park'. Also add articles: 'the park'.

× Now the day I likes to go to park very much because now the parks are very much well maintained from the the parks which in the past, nowadays I like to go the park very much.

✓ These days I like going to the park very much because the parks are much better maintained now than in the past; nowadays I enjoy going to the park a lot.

Subject-verb agreement and tense issues: 'I likes' should be 'I like'. 'Now the day' is incorrect; use 'These days'. Awkward comparative construction 'very much well maintained from the the parks which in the past' should be 'better maintained now than in the past'. Use gerund 'going' and add articles. Remove duplicate words and fix word order.

× Yes absolutely I like to see the Moorpark in my city when for the different different types.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I would like to see more parks in my city that offer different types of facilities.

Singular/plural and word choice: 'the Moorpark' is unclear and 'when for the different different types' is ungrammatical. The student likely means more parks ('parks' plural) with different types of facilities. Use 'would like to see more parks' and 'different types of facilities'.

× The in my city there is only one park that is very small.

✓ In my city there is only one park, and it is very small.

Word order and article use: remove extra 'The' and keep singular 'one park' with correct structure. Add conjunction and comma for clarity.

× I like I think that though there should be a 23 parks in my city so all the peoples come their family and enjoy their picnics and children's play the games and take swings.

✓ I think there should be about 23 parks in my city so that all people can come with their families, enjoy picnics, play games, and use the swings.

Quantifier and noun form errors: 'a 23 parks' is wrong; use 'about 23 parks' or '23 parks'. 'peoples' should be 'people', and 'their family' should be 'their families'. Plural nouns and parallel verb forms are corrected. Simplify to concise, grammatical list structure.

× Yes, I like, yes, of course there are parts that I goes to feature the parks.

✓ Yes, of course there are parks I want to visit in the future.

Tense and agreement: 'I goes' is wrong; use 'I want to visit'. 'parts' likely meant 'parks'. 'feature the parks' is unclear; rephrase to 'parks I want to visit in the future' to fit question about future desires.

× Then I went when that I seen my on my social media, when I'm using Instagram, the park, the big park that is situated in Rajasthan.

✓ I saw a large park in Rajasthan on social media when I was using Instagram.

Tense and verb forms: 'I went when that I seen my on my social media' mixes tenses and uses wrong past participle 'seen' without auxiliary. Use past simple 'saw' and correct order: 'I saw... on social media when I was using Instagram'. Use 'large park in Rajasthan' for clarity.

× And my dream is to go there and with my family and enjoy the picnic there.

✓ My dream is to go there with my family and enjoy a picnic.

Redundant words and article use: 'and with my family' should be 'with my family'. 'enjoy the picnic there' is better as 'enjoy a picnic' for natural English. Maintain present-tense stative 'is' for future plans expressed as dreams.

× And I hope so that I in my summer holiday, I will go there and enjoy there.

✓ I hope that during my summer holiday I will go there and enjoy myself.

Word order and pronoun use: 'I hope so that I in my summer holiday' is ungrammatical; use 'I hope that during my summer holiday I will go there'. Add reflexive pronoun 'enjoy myself' or 'enjoy the trip' for natural phrasing.