Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct, accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child.), avoid repetition and wrong words (e.g. 'work' → 'parks'), and use one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Keep answers under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I was always excited because I could play on the swings and meet my friends there. As a result, I have fond memories of spending long afternoons outdoors.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and remove repetition. For example say why you like current parks compared to past ones and give a concrete detail.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy visiting parks. Nowadays I go often because the parks are much better maintained than before, with cleaner lawns and new playground equipment, so they are more comfortable for families.

제안: Answer directly and organize ideas: state your opinion, then give two concrete reasons with linking words. Avoid vague or unrealistic numbers and correct grammar. Mention specific benefits such as space, facilities, and community events.

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city. Currently there is only one small park, so more parks would provide space for families, playgrounds for children and sports areas for young people. For example, adding several neighbourhood parks would reduce crowding and encourage outdoor activities.

제안: Give a clear, concise answer: name the park or place, explain why you want to visit with one specific detail and use future tense correctly. Keep it to two or three sentences and use linking words if needed.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit a large park in Rajasthan that I saw on Instagram. I want to go there with my family because it looks spacious and has beautiful gardens, and I hope to visit it during my next summer holiday to enjoy a picnic.

× Yes. When I was in my childhood I liked to go to work very much because when I go to park I've got very much excited on when I resume to the park.

✓ Yes. When I was a child I liked going to the park very much because when I went to the park I became very excited to return there.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly and uses awkward expressions. Use simple past for past habits ('was a child', 'liked', 'went', 'became') and 'going to the park' is the natural collocation. 'I've got very much excited' is incorrect; use 'became very excited' or 'was very excited'. 'Resume to the park' is wrong; use 'return to the park'. Suggestion: Keep consistent past tense for childhood descriptions and use natural collocations (go to the park, be excited, return).

× And from childhood to now I like to go to park very much.

✓ And from childhood until now I have liked going to the park very much.

'Park' needs the definite article 'the' or plural 'parks'; here singular specific place requires 'the park'. Also present perfect ('have liked') is appropriate to express a preference continuing from the past to the present. Use 'going to the park' rather than 'go to park'. Suggestion: Use 'the park' and present perfect for continued states ('have liked').

× Yes, of course. Now the day I likes to go to park very much because now the parks are very much well maintained from the the parks which in the past, nowadays I like to go the park very much.

✓ Yes, of course. Nowadays I like going to the park very much because the parks are much better maintained now than in the past.

'I likes' is incorrect; subject 'I' takes 'like'. The sentence is wordy and uses redundant time markers ('nowadays', 'now the day'). Use 'nowadays' or 'now'. 'Go to park' needs article 'the'. 'Very much well maintained' is awkward; 'much better maintained' is clearer. Suggestion: Use correct verb form for 'I' (like), avoid redundant time phrases, and use comparative 'better maintained' to compare past and present.

× Yes absolutely I like to see the Moorpark in my city when for the different different types.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I would like to see more parks in my city that offer different types of facilities.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear ('see the Moorpark', 'when for the different different types'). Use a modal 'would like' to express desire and restructure to 'parks that offer different types of facilities' to convey meaning clearly. Suggestion: Use 'would like' for polite wishes and restructure to specify what 'different types' refers to (play areas, gardens, sports facilities).

× The in my city there is only one park that is very small.

✓ In my city there is only one park, and it is very small.

Redundant 'The' at the start and slightly awkward structure. Use 'In my city there is...' to introduce existence and join clauses with a conjunction or punctuation. Suggestion: Begin with 'In my city there is...' and avoid unnecessary articles.

× I like I think that though there should be a 23 parks in my city so all the peoples come their family and enjoy their picnics and children's play the games and take swings.

✓ I think there should be about 20 or 23 parks in my city so that families can come, enjoy picnics, let their children play games, and use the swings.

'A 23 parks' is incorrect; use 'about 23 parks' or '23 parks' without 'a'. 'Peoples' is wrong for 'people' and possessive/plural forms are incorrect ('come their family'). Use 'so that' to introduce purpose. Clarify activities: 'families can come', 'their children play', 'use the swings'. Suggestion: Use correct quantifier 'about' and plural nouns without unnecessary articles, and use 'so that' for purpose clauses.

× Yes, I like, yes, of course there are parts that I goes to feature the parks.

✓ Yes, I like that. Of course there are parks I want to visit in the future.

'Parts' is a misspelling of 'parks'. 'I goes to feature the parks' is ungrammatical. Use 'parks I want to visit' or 'parks I would like to visit'. Suggestion: Correct spelling and use 'want to visit' or 'would like to visit' for future desires.

× Then I went when that I seen my on my social media, when I'm using Instagram, the park, the big park that is situated in Rajasthan.

✓ Then I saw it on social media, on Instagram: a big park that is located in Rajasthan.

Mixes past and present ('went', 'seen', 'I'm using'). Use simple past 'saw' for a past event. 'Seen' needs auxiliary ('have seen') but here 'saw' is correct. 'Situated in Rajasthan' is fine but 'located in Rajasthan' is more natural. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent (simple past) when describing a past viewing and use correct verb forms ('saw').

× And my dream is to go there and with my family and enjoy the picnic there.

✓ My dream is to go there with my family and enjoy a picnic.

Original includes unnecessary 'and' and article issues. Use 'a picnic' and place 'with my family' after 'go there' for natural order. Suggestion: Simplify the sentence: 'go there with my family and enjoy a picnic'. Use articles properly.

× And I hope so that I in my summer holiday, I will go there and enjoy there.

✓ I hope that in my summer holiday I will go there and enjoy my time.

'I hope so that I in my summer holiday' is awkward word order. Use 'I hope that in my summer holiday I will...' or 'I hope to go there during my summer holiday.' Add an object for 'enjoy' (enjoy my time/the visit/the picnic). Suggestion: Use 'I hope that' or 'I hope to' and correct word order; specify what you will enjoy.