Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify and correct small mistakes, avoid redundancy, and use linking words for coherence. Keep answer within 3–4 sentences: begin with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example,” “so”). Correct vocabulary errors (e.g., “swing slides and sea South” is unclear) and use past tense consistently for childhood activities.

예시: Yes—I loved going to parks as a child. My family and I usually visited on weekends or during school breaks because there were playgrounds and open spaces for a picnic. For example, I remember swinging on the swings and playing tag with my friends, which was always fun.

제안: Fix word choice and tense errors, streamline sentences and add linking words. Replace incorrect words (e.g., “disadvantage”) with intended words like “go as often.” Use present simple for current habits and explain reasons with linking words (e.g., “because,” “so”). Avoid extra filler phrases like “whenever I have a free time”—use “when I have free time.”

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, although I don't go as often as I did when I was a child. I usually visit when I have free time because walking and sitting on a bench in the fresh air helps me relax and clear my mind.

제안: Good clear answer with reasons. To improve, add a linking phrase and a specific example or suggestion about what kind of parks would help (e.g., child-friendly playgrounds, green spaces, sports areas). This increases specificity and richness of content while staying concise.

예시: Yes, definitely. I would love to see more parks in my city because they offer places to relax, exercise, and spend time with family. For example, adding child‑friendly playgrounds and dedicated sports areas would encourage more people to use them.

제안: Improve grammar and precision, and add a linking word to connect ideas. Correct phrases like “specially” to “especially,” “One of my dream is” to “One of my dreams is,” and use present perfect appropriately. Provide a brief reason or specific park name to be more concrete.

예시: Yes, I'd especially like to visit parks in Japan. One of my dreams is to see the parks during cherry blossom season because the scenery looks stunning in photos and videos; for example, I would love to visit Ueno Park in Tokyo during that time.

× I love playing on the swing slides and sea South and sometimes we would have a small picnic or just walk around.

✓ I loved playing on the swings, slides, and seesaw, and sometimes we would have a small picnic or just walk around.

The original sentence has incorrect words and spelling ('swing slides' and 'sea South') and mixes present and past tense. The interview question refers to childhood (past), so verbs should be past: 'loved' instead of 'love'. 'Swings, slides, and seesaw' are correct nouns. Use commas to separate items and keep consistent past tense.

× Yes I do, although I don't disadvantage as often as I did when I was a child, I still enjoy going there whenever I have a free time.

✓ Yes, I do. Although I don't go as often as I did when I was a child, I still enjoy going there whenever I have free time.

The sentence uses the wrong word 'disadvantage' instead of 'go' and has article misuse 'a free time'. Split into two sentences for clarity. Use present simple 'don't go' and 'have free time' (no article) to match current habitual action.

× I like walking around, sitting on a bench, enjoying the fresh air because it helped me relax and clear my mind.

✓ I like walking around, sitting on a bench, and enjoying the fresh air because it helps me relax and clear my mind.

The clause mixes present ('I like') with past 'helped'. To express a general present truth, use present simple 'helps'. Also add 'and' to join list items and maintain parallel gerund forms.

× I would love to see more parks in my city because I think they provide many benefits in the community.

✓ I would love to see more parks in my city because I think they provide many benefits to the community.

Use the correct preposition 'to' with 'benefits' when indicating who receives the benefits: 'benefits to the community'.

× Yes, definitely. I'd love to visit parks abroad, specially in Japan.

✓ Yes, definitely. I'd love to visit parks abroad, especially in Japan.

The adverb 'specially' is incorrect in this context; use 'especially'. No article error here, just correct adverb spelling to convey emphasis.

× One of my dream is to see the beautiful parks during the cherry blossom season because I've seen many photos and videos of them online and they look amazing.

✓ One of my dreams is to see the beautiful parks during the cherry blossom season because I've seen many photos and videos of them online and they look amazing.

'One of my dream' is singular/plural mismatch. Use plural 'dreams' with 'one of' and keep verb 'is'. The rest of the sentence is fine.