Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response grammatically correct, more concise, and add one specific supporting detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific example using a linking word. Avoid repetition and limit to 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I loved going to the park near my house when I was about eight or nine. It had many large trees and a big grassy area, so my friends and I often played football there. Because it was close to home, I have many happy memories of spending whole afternoons running and laughing with my friends.

제안: Be more natural and avoid repetition. Use a clear topic sentence, then give a concrete reason and a linking word. Mention specific activities you do there to support your answer.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks and I visit one every Monday and Friday. I go because I need time to relax after school, and I usually sit on a bench to read or take a short walk to clear my mind. This routine helps me feel refreshed for the rest of the week.

제안: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and two specific reasons, using linking words like 'because' and 'for example.' Correct grammar and avoid vague phrases. Give one concrete benefit with a brief explanation.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they make the city greener and improve air quality. For example, additional trees and grass can absorb pollution and reduce carbon emissions, and parks also provide safe places for residents to exercise and relax.

제안: Provide a clear name or description of the park, state one specific reason, and explain briefly why you haven't been there yet. Use correct tense and simple linking words to make it coherent.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Central Riverside Park in the future because it has many old trees and a large lake. Also, my best friend lives nearby, so it would be nice to meet there; however, I have not been able to go yet because I live far away from that area.

× When I was a child, about 8 or 9 years old, I was like to go to the park near my house because it have a lot of tree and my friend live near here so we always play football.

✓ When I was a child, about eight or nine years old, I liked to go to the park near my house because it had a lot of trees and my friends lived nearby, so we always played football.

Multiple verb tense and agreement issues: 'was like to go' is incorrect for past habitual action; use simple past 'liked'. 'Have' should be past 'had' to match 'When I was a child'. 'Tree' should be plural 'trees'. 'My friend live' should be past 'my friends lived' (subject-verb agreement and plural). 'Near here' is unnatural; use 'nearby'. 'Always play' should be past 'always played' to match past timeframe. Suggest practicing past simple for habitual past actions and checking subject-verb agreement and noun plurality.

× There is a very happy life.

✓ It was a very happy time.

Context is past, so use past tense 'was' not present 'is'. 'Very happy life' is awkward; 'a very happy time' or 'I had a very happy childhood' is more natural. Suggest matching tense to surrounding sentences and choosing appropriate nouns for the idea.

× Of course, yes, I still go to park every Monday and Friday because I need some time to relax and that part is that park is very suitable place for me to relax after my school.

✓ Of course, I still go to the park every Monday and Friday because I need some time to relax and the park is a very suitable place for me to relax after school.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'park' and missing indefinite article 'a' before 'very suitable place'. 'After my school' is unnatural; use 'after school'. Also remove redundant words ('yes', 'that part is'). Suggest learning article usage: 'the' for a specific place and 'a' for one of many, and simplify sentences for clarity.

× Definitely yes because the more part invest the more park in my city, the more the better my city become because part have my parks have my city become greener and help to reduce carbon emission so it more good for environment.

✓ Definitely yes, because if more money is invested in parks in my city, the better my city will become. More parks will make the city greener and help reduce carbon emissions, so they are better for the environment.

This sentence has multiple structural and grammar problems: unclear phrases ('the more part invest'), missing passive construction for 'is invested', incorrect word order and tense. Use conditional 'if more money is invested', future 'will become', plural 'parks' and plural verbs 'help reduce' and 'are better'. 'Carbon emission' should be plural 'carbon emissions'. Suggest breaking long sentences into shorter ones, using correct passive where needed, and ensuring subject-verb agreement and correct tense.

× I want to go to how much to park park in the future because it have a lot of tree and my best friend live near there but I don't have a chance to go there become my home was far away.

✓ I want to go to that park in the future because it has a lot of trees and my best friend lives nearby, but I haven't had the chance to go there because my home is far away.

Many tense and word choice errors: 'how much to park park' is nonsense; likely 'that park'. Use present tense 'has' for the park's features and 'lives' for third-person singular friend. The phrase 'I don't have a chance' should be present perfect 'I haven't had the chance' to express experience up to now. 'Become my home was far away' is incorrect; use 'because my home is far away'. Suggest clarifying intended meaning, using correct demonstratives ('that'), checking third-person singular '-s', and using present perfect for life experiences.