Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, fix tense and plural nouns, remove repetition, and add one specific detail. Use linking words if adding extra info.

예시: Not really. I didn’t often go to parks as a child. Instead, I spent most weekends at my family’s farm with my cousins, where we ran around, played games in the fields, and enjoyed the fresh air.

제안: Correct vocabulary and word choice, and be specific about activities. Keep it brief (max 5 sentences) and use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'and' or 'also'). Avoid wrong words like 'plastic' or unclear phrases.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I often go for a jog or do light exercises there, and I also meet friends because the atmosphere is relaxed and pleasant.

제안: Fix double negatives and unclear phrases. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'little greenery' → 'very little greenery') and streamline the sentence. Provide one concrete reason and one example to support your opinion.

예시: Yes, I would. My city has very little greenery at the moment, so more parks would improve air quality and give residents safe places to exercise and relax.

제안: Organize your response with a clear topic sentence and avoid repeating phrases. Use correct conditional forms and give a clear example if possible. If you cannot remember a name, say so concisely and offer an intention or plan.

예시: Not at the moment — I don't have a specific park in mind. However, if I visit New York in the future, I would like to see Central Park because I’ve heard it is large and has many attractions.

× 'No, I didn't really go to park as a child.'

✓ 'No, I didn't really go to parks as a child.'

'park' is countable and here requires plural or an article; since the student means parks in general, use plural 'parks'. Use 'to parks' after 'go' when speaking generally.'

× 'Instead, I spent most weekends with my cousins on our family farm farmland where we round around, played games in the open fields and enjoy the fresh air.'

✓ 'Instead, I spent most weekends with my cousins on our family farm, where we ran around, played games in the open fields and enjoyed the fresh air.'

'round around' is incorrect and likely intended 'ran around' (past tense). Verb forms in the sentence must be consistent: 'spent' sets past tense, so use past forms 'ran' and 'enjoyed' rather than present 'enjoy'. Also 'farmland' is redundant after 'farm'; choose one and separate clauses with a comma.'

× 'Yes, I still enjoy going to parks.'

✓ 'Yes, I still enjoy going to parks.'

'enjoy' is present tense and correctly used here to describe a current habit; no change needed.'

× 'I like to go for a jog or do some SLA lights exercises and I also enjoy meeting friends because the atmosphere is relaxed and plastic.'

✓ 'I like to go for a jog or do some light exercises and I also enjoy meeting friends because the atmosphere is relaxed and pleasant.'

'SLA lights exercises' is not correct English; likely intended 'light exercises'. 'Plastic' is not appropriate to describe atmosphere; 'pleasant' fits the intended meaning. Keep parallel structure 'go for a jog or do some light exercises.'

× 'Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there is no little greenery at the moment.'

✓ 'Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there is little greenery at the moment.'

'no little' is ungrammatical. Use 'little' to indicate a small amount (uncountable noun 'greenery'). Alternatively 'no greenery' would be possible. Keep 'parks' plural as intended.'

× 'More parks would improve air quality, provide places for people to exercise and relax, and make the OR an environmental environment feel less crowded.'

✓ 'More parks would improve air quality, provide places for people to exercise and relax, and make the environment feel less crowded.'

'OR an environmental environment' is garbled. Remove extraneous words: 'the environment' is the correct noun phrase. Maintain parallelism in the list of benefits.'

× 'There is, there is nothing specific at the moment I'm thinking of, but if I will visit the park, I'm maybe in New York.'

✓ 'There isn't anything specific I'm thinking of at the moment, but if I visit a park in the future, it might be one in New York.'

Use negative 'There isn't anything specific' instead of 'There is, there is nothing specific'. Also after 'if' use present tense for future meaning: 'if I visit' not 'if I will visit'. 'I'm maybe in New York' is ungrammatical; use 'it might be one in New York' to express uncertainty about which park.'

× 'I think there's a park called what I don't remember.'

✓ 'I think there's a park there called something like that, but I don't remember the name.'

Original word order is awkward. Make a clear phrasing: state belief about a park and then say you don't remember its name. Use 'there' or 'in New York' for clarity and separate the two ideas for natural English.'