Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and use correct tense and singular/plural forms. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use simple linking words and correct common collocations (e.g., “play cricket,” “go to parks”).

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I often played cricket there with my friends, and sometimes I went with my cousins for picnics.

제안: Use simple present tense for habits and correct time expressions. Keep sentences concise and avoid repetition. Use linking words like “usually” and “in the morning” correctly, and say “go to the park” and “take a walk.”

예시: Yes, I usually go to the park in the evening. I also like to go for a walk in the morning because it helps me wake up and stay healthy.

제안: Give a clear reasoned opinion with two specific benefits. Avoid unclear phrases and repetitions. Use linking words such as “because,” “for example,” and “also.” Be specific about benefits for children and older people and use correct grammar (e.g., “benefit older people,” “play outdoor games”).

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they give children safe places to play outdoor games. Also, parks benefit older people by providing easy paths for walking and socialising.

제안: Answer directly and clearly. If you have no specific park in mind, say so and give a concise reason or describe your usual routine. Use present simple for habits and avoid double negatives and awkward phrasing.

예시: I don't have any particular park I plan to visit, but I usually go to nearby parks on weekends for walking and exercise because they help me stay fit.

× If my memory serves me a ride, yes.

✓ If my memory serves me right, yes.

The student used 'ride' instead of the idiomatic phrase 'right'. This is a word choice error and affects sentence clarity. Use the common expression 'If my memory serves me right' to mean 'if I remember correctly.'

× I went to a parks as a child, there to a player cricket with my friends.

✓ I went to parks as a child to play cricket with my friends.

Errors: 'a parks' is wrong because 'parks' is plural and should not have the indefinite article 'a'; 'there to a player cricket' is ungrammatical. Correct by removing the article before the plural noun and using the infinitive 'to play' to indicate purpose. This fixes article and verb form issues and clarifies meaning.

× Also sometimes I went with my cousins.

✓ Also, sometimes I went with my cousins.

The sentence is mostly correct but needs a comma after 'Also' for natural flow. The past tense 'went' is appropriate for a childhood habit. This is a punctuation/style improvement rather than a tense change.

× Yes I am usually going to a park at the evening and also I have go parking in parking morning then I am wake up and also I have to a proper walking in a park.

✓ Yes, I usually go to a park in the evening, and I also go to the park in the morning to walk properly.

Multiple problems: 'am usually going' is incorrect for habitual actions; use simple present 'usually go'. 'at the evening' should be 'in the evening' (preposition error). 'I have go parking in parking morning' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'I also go to the park in the morning'. 'then I am wake up' should be 'then I wake up' or removed; 'I have to a proper walking' should be 'to walk properly' (use infinitive and adverb). Corrections address present tense use, prepositions, and verb forms.

× Yes, I like to see more parks in my city because the the more parks in the children's are also tracked with the auto games and children's have not in the indoor games like such as on the platforms and online platform.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because more parks would give children outdoor activities; many children do not play indoor games and spend a lot of time on online platforms.

Problems: 'like to see' is okay but 'would like' is more polite for preference. 'the the more parks in the children's are also tracked with the auto games' is ungrammatical: double 'the', incorrect possessive and word choice. Use 'children' (not 'children's') and 'outdoor activities' instead of 'tracked with the auto games'. 'children's have not in the indoor games' is incorrect grammar; use 'many children do not play indoor games'. Clarify 'platforms and online platform' to 'online platforms'. This fixes article, possessive, and sentence structure errors.

× And also they are the park is also benefit to the older people they can walk at there easily.

✓ Parks also benefit older people because they can walk there easily.

Errors: 'they are the park is also benefit' is ungrammatical; redundant pronouns and incorrect verb form 'benefit' needs to be 'benefit' as a verb with subject 'parks' or 'is also a benefit' as noun form. 'walk at there' uses wrong preposition; use 'walk there'. Simplify sentence to subject 'parks' and verb 'benefit' to improve grammar and clarity.

× No there was not any park when I go to a weekend because I have a not interest with the all the parks but I usually go went to park for my walking and my exercising which keeps my body keeping so it is not a special work where I do go.

✓ No, there are not any parks I visit on weekends because I am not interested in all the parks, but I usually go to a park for walking and exercise, which keeps my body healthy, so it is not a special place I go to.

Problems: 'No there was not any park when I go to a weekend' mixes past and present and uses 'was' incorrectly; use 'are not any parks I visit on weekends' or 'there were no parks when I went on weekends' depending on intended meaning. 'I have a not interest with the all the parks' should be 'I am not interested in all the parks' (incorrect verb and preposition and article). 'I usually go went to park' mixes 'go' and 'went' — use simple present 'usually go' or past 'went' consistently. 'my exercising which keeps my body keeping' is incorrect — use 'exercise, which keeps my body healthy.' 'it is not a special work where I do go' should be 'it is not a special place I go to.' Corrections address there-be usage, tense consistency, prepositions, and word choice.