Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and clear with a correct tense and word choice. Start with a concise topic sentence, then add one specific reason using a linking word. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases (e.g., "back then").

예시: No, I didn’t enjoy going to parks when I was a child. For example, the playgrounds felt noisy and crowded, so I preferred staying indoors to read or play with my toys.

제안: Use a clear topic sentence and improve grammar (use "would rather" and parallel structure). Give one or two specific activities as reasons and link them with a connector.

예시: No, I still don’t enjoy going to parks. I would rather stay at home because I enjoy reading and playing video games, and I find staying indoors more relaxing.

제안: Avoid short, repetitive answers. Provide a polite explanation with a linking phrase (e.g., "because" or "since") and one specific reason. This shows coherence and gives the examiner something to follow up on.

예시: No, I wouldn’t. Since I don’t enjoy outdoor activities, I don’t think adding more parks would benefit me personally, although others might appreciate them.

제안: Clarify meaning (use "a foreign country" instead of "immigrant country") and correct modal verb use. Give one specific example of a park type you might visit and a reason to make the answer more concrete.

예시: Maybe I would visit parks in a foreign country, such as famous botanical gardens, because I’m curious about different plants and landscapes, but I’m not interested in local parks.

× No, I didn't like to go to park when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't like going to parks when I was a child.

The verb after 'didn't like' should use the -ing form (verb + -ing) rather than the infinitive in natural English; also 'park' needs the plural or an article. Use 'going to parks' or 'going to the park' depending on meaning. Suggestion: use 'didn't like going to parks' to indicate parks in general.

× I just like sound so boring for me then back time back then.

✓ It just sounded so boring to me back then.

The student used present tense 'like' and incorrect word order and forms. 'Sound' should be past tense 'sounded' to match 'when I was a child' and 'so boring to me' is the correct phrase. Remove redundant words 'then back time back then'. Suggestion: use simple past 'sounded' and the fixed phrase 'to me'.

× No, I still don't like going to parks nowadays.

✓ No, I still don't like going to parks nowadays.

This sentence is grammatically correct. 'Don't like' is correct for first person. No change needed.

× Uh, I rather stay at home and just like doing my stuff, uh, or playing video games or just take some sleep instead.

✓ Uh, I'd rather stay at home and just do my stuff, or play video games or just take a nap instead.

Use 'I'd rather' (would rather) followed by the base form 'stay'. After 'just' use base verb 'do' not 'like doing' here. 'Play' and 'take' should be base forms. 'Take some sleep' is non-idiomatic; use 'take a nap' or 'sleep'. Suggestion: use contractions and base verbs after 'would rather'.

× No, absolutely I would not.

✓ No, absolutely not.

'I would not' is grammatically correct but sounds unnatural and is redundant here. 'No, absolutely not' is a concise native response. Suggestion: use shorter, more natural negative response.

× Uh, just just because I don't like uh, it's simple, just I don't like it.

✓ Just because I don't like it; it's simple.

Original has repetition and awkward clause order. Use 'Just because I don't like it' as a full clause, then add 'it's simple' if needed. Suggestion: remove filler words and repetitions for clarity.

× Umm, maybe in an immigrant country, yeah, I would to explore, uh, the parks there, but here, no, I don't have any interest in.

✓ Umm, maybe in an immigrant country, yeah, I would like to explore the parks there, but here, no, I don't have any interest.

'Would to explore' is incorrect; use 'would like to explore'. The phrase 'have any interest in' needs an object or end the sentence as 'I don't have any interest in them' or 'I am not interested'. Also 'immigrant country' is unclear; 'a country I would immigrate to' or 'a foreign country' might be better. Suggestion: use 'would like to' plus infinitive and complete the object of 'interest' or rephrase to 'I'm not interested'.