Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần trả lời trực tiếp, sửa ngữ pháp và phát âm. Tránh lặp từ và đưa thêm chi tiết ngắn gọn (1 câu chủ đề + 1 câu hỗ trợ). Ví dụ nêu hoạt động cụ thể bạn làm ở công viên khi còn nhỏ.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I often played on the swings and rode my bicycle with neighborhood friends, which made weekends very fun.

제안: Câu trả lời hiện là một câu hỏi lặp lại; cần trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng, dùng từ ngữ tự nhiên và thêm lí do ngắn gọn (1–2 câu). Sử dụng linking word như "because" hoặc "so" để liên kết ý.

예시: Yes, I still like going to parks because they help me relax and get fresh air. I usually go for a short walk or sit and read when I have free time.

제안: Câu trả lời có chủ đề và lí do nhưng cần sửa ngữ pháp, loại bỏ từ sai ("alcohol"), và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể, mạch lạc. Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu, dùng linking words như "for example" đúng cách.

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide relaxation and improve air quality. For example, people can go jogging or take their children to play safely, which makes neighborhoods more pleasant.

제안: Câu trả lời khá rõ ràng với kế hoạch cụ thể, nhưng cần sửa vài lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ số ít/số nhiều chính xác. Có thể tách thành hai câu ngắn: nêu nơi và lí do, rồi nêu kế hoạch. Thêm linking word như "because"/"so" để tự nhiên hơn.

예시: I would like to visit Peak National Park near my city because it has beautiful mountains and a lake, which are perfect for hiking and photography. I plan to go next summer with a friend.

× Did you like going to park as as a chill?

✓ Did you like going to parks as a child?

The phrase 'going to park' is missing the plural or definite article; 'park' should be plural 'parks' or 'the park' depending on meaning. 'as as a chill' has two errors: duplicated 'as' and 'chill' is a misspelling of 'child'. Correct form: 'as a child'. Suggestion: use 'parks' for general visits and 'child' spelled correctly.

× Do you still like going to park now?

✓ Do you still like going to parks now?

Similar to the previous sentence, 'park' should be plural 'parks' when talking generally about visiting parks. 'going to park' is ungrammatical without 'the' or plural form. Suggestion: use 'parks' for general habitual actions.

× Well, yes, I would you like to see more parks in my city because they are relaxing and they have improved air quality. For example, alcohol is jogging or take my children to play there and that could make the city more pleasant.

✓ Well, yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they are relaxing and they improve air quality. For example, I can go jogging or take my children to play there, and that could make the city more pleasant.

Original contains extra pronoun 'you' after 'would' which is incorrect; correct phrase is 'I would like'. 'They have improved air quality' is awkward; use 'they improve air quality' to express a general effect. The phrase 'For example, alcohol is jogging' is nonsensical—likely 'I can go jogging'. 'or take my children' needs 'or' to coordinate with 'go jogging' and requires subject 'I' before 'take'. Also add comma before 'and' to join clauses. Suggestion: remove the extraneous 'you', use present simple for general truths, and write clear coordinated actions with appropriate subjects.

× Well, I would you like to go to the Peak National Park near my city in the future because it has beautiful mountain and lake and it would be great for hiking and taking photos for example. I plan to visit it next summer with my friend.

✓ Well, I would like to go to Peak National Park near my city in the future because it has beautiful mountains and lakes, and it would be great for hiking and taking photos. For example, I plan to visit it next summer with my friend.

Remove the extra 'you' after 'would'. Use 'Peak National Park' without 'the' depending on official name; if the park's name includes 'the' use it consistently. 'beautiful mountain and lake' should be plural 'mountains and lakes' or 'a beautiful mountain and lake' depending on meaning; plural is more natural. Add a comma before 'and' joining clauses. Move the 'for example' to introduce the specific plan; original placement made the sentence awkward. Suggestion: omit extraneous pronoun, pluralize nouns when speaking generally, and place 'for example' appropriately.