Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and use past tense consistently. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh) and give one specific supporting detail. Use linking words if adding more info.

예시: No, I didn't like going to parks as a child. Instead, I usually played with my neighbor in front of my house because there were no nearby parks. As a result, most of my outdoor time was spent close to home.

제안: Answer directly and use correct grammar (there are no parks). Reduce hesitations and give a concise reason plus one specific activity as an example. Use a linking word such as "because" or "so" to connect reason and result.

예시: No, I don't go to parks now because there are no parks near my house. Instead, I usually spend my time at home studying or watching TV dramas, so I rarely go out for leisure.

제안: Give a clear reason and one specific benefit. Avoid repeating words and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., "atmosphere" instead of "situation or the feel"). Keep it to 1–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I would because I enjoy the peaceful atmosphere of parks in the morning. For example, I like walking there to relax and get fresh air before starting my day.

제안: Use future tense correctly and be specific about the park name and planned activities. Remove fillers and combine activities in a coherent sentence with linking words like "and" or "so".

예시: I hope to visit Singapore's Gardens by the Bay in the future. I would enjoy walking there, reading a book, and spending time with my boyfriend while admiring the city views.

× No, I don't. When I was a child, uh, I'm playing with my, uh, neighbor in front of my house.

✓ No, I didn't. When I was a child, I played with my neighbor in front of my house.

The student mixes present simple and past contexts. The question asks about childhood (past), so past tense is required. 'I don't' (present) should be 'I didn't' and 'I'm playing' (present continuous) should be 'I played' (simple past). Suggestion: Use simple past for completed past habits: 'I played with my neighbor.'

× No, I don't because there is no parks around my house right now and maybe I, I, I like uh, more to spend my day in my house like uh, watching drama or studying.

✓ No, I don't, because there are no parks around my house right now, and I prefer to spend my day at home watching dramas or studying.

When stating existence of plural nouns use 'there are', not 'there is'. 'Parks' is plural so use 'there are no parks'. 'Like more to spend my day in my house' is awkward; use 'prefer to spend my day at home'. 'Watching drama' should be plural or 'watching dramas' or 'watching drama series'. Suggestion: Use 'there are' for plural existence and 'prefer to' for expressing preference.

× Yes, I would, because actually I like parks and I'm enjoying the the situation or the feel in the park in the morning.

✓ Yes, I would, because I actually like parks and I enjoy the atmosphere in the park in the morning.

The present continuous 'I'm enjoying' is odd when stating a general preference; use simple present 'I enjoy'. 'The the situation or the feel' is redundant and unidiomatic; 'the atmosphere' or 'the feeling' is better. Suggestion: Use simple present for general likes and choose a concise noun like 'atmosphere.'

× I hope I can visit uh Singapore Park and I'm enjoying the park with UH, watching the city and uh reading book and playing with my boyfriend.

✓ I hope I can visit Singapore Park and enjoy the park, watch the city, read a book, and play with my boyfriend.

The speaker mixes present continuous with future intention. After 'I hope I can visit' use base verbs for the planned activities: 'enjoy', 'watch', 'read', 'play' (infinitive or base). Also use 'read a book' (article before singular count noun). 'I'm enjoying' is present progressive and implies happening now; use simple form for future plans or intent. Suggestion: For planned activities after 'I hope I can visit,' list verbs in base form or use 'I will enjoy' etc., and include articles for singular nouns ('a book').

× I hope I can visit uh Singapore Park and I'm enjoying the park with UH, watching the city and uh reading book and playing with my boyfriend.

✓ I hope I can visit Singapore Park and enjoy the park, watch the city, read a book, and play with my boyfriend.

'Reading book' lacks the indefinite article 'a' before a singular countable noun: it should be 'read a book.' Also remove filler repetitions 'uh' and unnecessary commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'a' or 'the' appropriately with singular count nouns and avoid fillers.

× No, I don't because there is no parks around my house right now and maybe I, I, I like uh, more to spend my day in my house like uh, watching drama or studying.

✓ No, I don't, because there are no parks around my house right now, and I prefer to spend my day at home watching dramas or studying.

This repeats the 'there is/are' issue: 'there are no parks' matches plural noun 'parks'. Also 'I like...more to spend' is ungrammatical; 'I prefer to spend' agrees with subject and expresses preference correctly. Suggestion: Ensure verb forms agree with subject and noun number (there are + plural).