Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời chưa rõ ràng và nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp khiến ý khó hiểu. Hãy bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, dùng thì quá khứ đúng (liked/went), sửa lỗi phát âm và từ vựng (park, playground), và thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể với từ nối như "because" hoặc "so" để làm rõ lý do. Giữ độ dài tối đa 4-5 câu.

예시: Yes, I did. I often went to the local park when I was a child because my parents were very busy and leaving me free time. I played with friends on the playground and sometimes walked around the pond to watch the ducks. Because it was near my house, it became my favorite place to relax.

제안: Ý chính rõ nhưng có nhiều lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp (past→park, during lake→by the lake). Hãy dùng thì hiện tại đơn cho thói quen, dùng liên từ như "and" hoặc "also" hợp lý, và cung cấp 1-2 lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: exercise, relax). Tránh câu dài lộn xộn.

예시: Yes, I do. I often go to the park by the lake because it helps me escape the busy city life and relax. I also meet friends there to hang out, and sometimes I take a walk for exercise and fresh air.

제안: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và ngữ pháp sai nhiều. Bắt đầu bằng một câu khẳng định ngắn, sau đó nêu 2 lý do cụ thể (sức khỏe, cộng đồng). Dùng danh từ/động từ đúng (parks, mean, help), và một liên từ như "because" để nối ý. Tránh những mệnh đề không hoàn chỉnh.

예시: Yes, I would. I believe more parks would provide extra spaces for people to exercise and improve their health. They would also create pleasant places for families to spend time together and encourage a stronger sense of community.

제안: Câu trả lời thân mật nhưng hơi lạc đề (Disneyland là công viên giải trí—chấp nhận được nếu giải thích). Nên trả lời trực tiếp, dùng thì tương lai đơn (I would like to go/I want to visit), nêu lý do cụ thể (attractions, photos, costumes) và giữ 2-3 câu ngắn gọn, liên kết bằng "because" hoặc "so".

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Disneyland in the future because it has many beautiful views and fun attractions. I would love to take photos and try on costumes there, which would make the trip memorable.

× Jess I did.

✓ Yes, I did.

The student used 'Jess' which seems to be a misused or mistyped word instead of 'Yes'. Replace with 'Yes' to correctly respond to the question. Use of correct pronoun/response maintains clarity.

× I like going to pass every child because my parents so busy.

✓ I liked going to parks as a child because my parents were so busy.

Original sentence has wrong preposition and nouns: 'pass' should be 'parks' and 'every child' is incorrect in context. Also tense and verb 'so busy' need supporting verb. Use past tense 'liked' and include 'were' for 'parents'. Suggestion: use 'as a child' to indicate time frame.

× So I like go to Bath.

✓ So I liked going to the bath/So I liked going to the park.

The verb form is incorrect: after 'like' in past context use gerund 'going'. 'Bath' may be a wrong word; if meaning 'park' use 'park'. Maintain past tense 'liked' to match timeframe.

× I can meet my friend or I can go out play or go around see.

✓ I could meet my friends, go out to play, or wander around to see things.

Use parallel verb forms and correct modals for past habitual actions: 'could' or 'would' is better than 'can'. Coordinate items with similar structures: 'meet', 'go out to play', 'wander around'.

× Yes I do, I often go to the past during lake and it keeps the busy city life and also meet my friends there to hang out and sometime I can take a walk for my health.

✓ Yes, I do. I often go to the park by the lake; it gives me a break from busy city life. I also meet my friends there to hang out, and sometimes I take a walk for my health.

Many tense and word choice errors: 'past' should be 'park', 'during lake' should be 'by the lake', 'keeps the busy city life' is incorrect — use 'gives me a break from busy city life'. Maintain present simple for habitual actions: 'go', 'meet', 'take'. Ensure punctuation and sentence splits for clarity.

× Yes I would like I think more park mean more place for people take care of their health and people can attractive the be only thing a family health help.

✓ Yes, I would. I think more parks mean more places for people to take care of their health, and they can also make the city more attractive and help families stay healthy.

Problems include modal/response phrasing, singular/plural agreement, missing infinitive marker 'to', and incorrect word order. Use 'parks' plural and 'places' plural; use infinitive 'to take care'. Reorder clause to make logical sense and use 'help families stay healthy'.

× Cheers dear, I think I want to go Disneyland park. Do take my photo with beautiful views and wear my clothes I want.

✓ I think I want to go to Disneyland in the future. I will take photos with the beautiful views and wear the clothes I want.

Several issues: missing preposition 'to' before 'Disneyland', awkward greeting 'Cheers dear' is unnecessary. Use future intention: 'I will take photos' or 'I want to take photos'. Use correct verb forms 'take photos' and 'wear the clothes I want'.