Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và sự mạch lạc: sửa lỗi thì và chia động từ (ví dụ: "they allowed me"), tránh câu quá dài bằng cách tách thành 2 câu, dùng từ vựng phù hợp (ví dụ: "relaxed" thay vì "unwind" ở dạng sai). Thêm một câu chủ đề rõ ràng và chi tiết cụ thể để làm câu trả lời tự nhiên và ngắn gọn (không quá 5 câu).

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. They were fun and allowed me to do many activities, such as playing hide-and-seek with my friends and having picnics with my parents. I always felt relaxed afterwards.

제안: Cải thiện phát âm và lựa chọn thì: tránh từ thừa và lỗi như "I stood enjoyed"; sử dụng thì hiện tại đơn rõ ràng ("I still enjoy"). Giảm tiếng lấp và các tiếng ồ ừ (uh), dùng liên từ hợp lý để nối ý (e.g., "and" hoặc "where"). Giữ độ dài hợp lý và thêm chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. After school I usually read books under the trees with my friends, and we enjoy the fresh air and sunlight.

제안: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và mạch lạc: hoàn thiện cụm từ bị dở ("safe place"—thêm mạo từ), tránh lặp ý và dùng từ phù hợp ("relax" hoặc "unwind"—chỉ chọn một). Kết hợp ý bằng liên từ hoặc dấu câu để câu rõ ràng và ngắn gọn. Thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về lợi ích để tăng tính thuyết phục.

예시: Yes, I would. More green spaces would give children a safe place to play with their friends, and adults could relax and enjoy nature more often. For example, families could have picnics or children could ride bicycles safely.

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và danh từ số nhiều/số ít: sửa "there are wide range" thành "there is a wide range" hoặc "there are a wide variety of"; tránh bắt đầu câu bằng "And" không cần thiết. Dùng cụm từ tự nhiên hơn ("immerse myself in nature") và tách thành hai câu ngắn để rõ ràng.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the national parks near Ho Chi Minh City. They have a wide variety of plants and recreational areas, which would allow me to immerse myself in nature and relax.

× Well I enjoyed going to parks when I was a child because they were fun and it allows me to have a lot of activities like playing hide and seek with my friends or having picnic with my parents and I feel really unwind afterwards.

✓ Well, I enjoyed going to parks when I was a child because they were fun and they allowed me to do a lot of activities like playing hide-and-seek with my friends or having picnics with my parents, and I felt really relaxed afterwards.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses. Use past tense consistently for childhood: 'enjoyed', 'were', 'allowed', 'felt'. Subject-verb agreement: 'parks' is plural so use 'they allowed' not 'it allows'. Use correct verb forms: 'to do a lot of activities' (not 'have a lot of activities'), plural 'picnics', and adjective 'relaxed' rather than 'unwind'. Suggestions: keep tense consistent (past), match plural subjects with plural verbs, use appropriate adjective forms and common collocations (feel relaxed, play hide-and-seek).

× Yeah, I stood enjoyed going to parks now, especially after school, I usually read books, uh, under trees with my friends or just enjoy fresh air and uh, soak up the sunlight.

✓ Yeah, I still enjoy going to parks now. Especially after school, I usually read books under trees with my friends or just enjoy the fresh air and soak up the sunlight.

The original has an incorrect word 'stood' and mixes tenses. Use present simple 'still enjoy' for current habits. Split into two sentences or use a conjunction to fix run-on. Include articles where needed: 'the fresh air'. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Suggestions: use 'still' not 'stood', keep present simple for routine actions, and avoid run-on sentences by punctuation or conjunctions.

× Yeah, I think my city needs more parks. More green space would give children safe place to play with their friends and I. I can also relax and unwind or enjoy nature more often.

✓ Yeah, I think my city needs more parks. More green space would give children a safe place to play with their friends and me. I can also relax and unwind or enjoy nature more often.

Missing indefinite article before 'safe place' — should be 'a safe place'. Pronoun issue: 'and I' is incorrect in this coordinate structure; use 'and me' as the object of the verb 'give'. Alternatively, rephrase 'and allow me to relax...'. Suggestions: include 'a' before singular nouns and use correct object pronoun after prepositions/verbs.

× And yeah, I would like to go to the national parks in Ho Chi Minh City. There are wide range of plants and recreational area. It allows me to immerse myself in the nature and relax after school.

✓ And yeah, I would like to go to the national parks near Ho Chi Minh City. There is a wide range of plants and recreational areas. They would allow me to immerse myself in nature and relax after school.

'There are wide range' is incorrect: use 'There is a wide range' or 'There are a wide range of...' Better: 'There is a wide range of plants' or 'There are a wide variety of plants'. 'recreational area' should be plural 'recreational areas' to match 'a wide range'. 'It allows' is wrong because the subject is plural ('parks' or 'areas'); use 'they would allow' or 'they allow'. Also article use: 'in nature' (no 'the'). Suggestions: match singular/plural structures, use correct verb agreement with the subject, and drop unnecessary definite article with 'nature'.