Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời có nội dung rõ ràng nhưng còn lặp từ, nói lắp và thiếu cấu trúc mạch lạc. Bạn nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, tránh từ đệm (um, uh), sửa lỗi lặp (was was) và thêm 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể về hoạt động bạn làm ở công viên để phong phú câu trả lời. Ví dụ: nêu loại trò chơi cụ thể, kỷ niệm ngắn hoặc tần suất ghé công viên.

예시: Yes, I loved going to the park as a child. I often played on the swings and climbed the jungle gym with my friends, and sometimes my parents would bring a picnic so we could spend the whole afternoon outdoors.

제안: Ý rõ ràng và ngôn ngữ đơn giản phù hợp, nhưng câu hơi dài và lặp ý (“now/nowadays/right now”). Nên trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn, rồi thêm lý do cụ thể và có thể một liên kết (however/although) để làm mạch. Tránh lặp từ và dùng thì nhất quán.

예시: Not really. I’m currently a high school student and my schedule is quite packed with classes and homework, so I rarely have time to visit parks.

제안: Ý tốt nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ (helps → help) và cấu trúc chưa tự nhiên (“the air can be fresher”). Nên mở đầu bằng câu khẳng định ngắn, giải thích lý do cụ thể với linking word (because/so) và đưa ví dụ ngắn về lợi ích (giải trí, sức khỏe).

예시: Yes, I would. More parks and trees would help reduce air pollution and make the city feel fresher, and they would also provide pleasant places for people to exercise and relax.

제안: Câu trả lời có nội dung nhưng diễn đạt hơi lủng củng và dùng từ không chính xác (reveal → say). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, nêu lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: hiking, scenery) và dùng linking word (because/so) để liên kết ý. Cố gắng ngắn gọn trong 2-3 câu.

예시: Yes, I would love to visit the National Park near my city in the future because I’ve heard its scenery and fresh air are excellent, and I’d like to go hiking and take photos there.

× When I was a child, going to the park was was my favorite thing as umm, when you go to the park I can uh, play in different kinds of playground and also have free time with my parents.

✓ When I was a child, going to the park was my favorite activity because when you go to the park you can play in different kinds of playgrounds and also spend free time with your parents.

Type ID:26 and 1. Error: repeated word 'was was' and informal fillers, incorrect sentence structure and singular/plural mismatch ('playground' should be 'playgrounds'). Reason: repetition is a typographical/fluency error; the clause after 'because' needs a consistent subject and modal form matching general truth (use 'you can' or 'I could'); plural form required for 'playgrounds'. Suggestion: remove fillers, delete the duplicate 'was', use 'because' to link clauses, use plural 'playgrounds' and consistent modal 'can' or 'could' depending on intended meaning.

× Well now I don't really like going to the park as nowadays I'm pretty busy as I'm a high schooler right now and I don't have that much free time.

✓ Well, I don't really like going to the park now because I'm pretty busy as a high school student and I don't have much free time.

Type ID:6. Error: redundant time markers ('now', 'nowadays', 'right now') and awkward phrase 'as I'm a high schooler'. Reason: redundancy and informal word choice create ungrammatical flow. Suggestion: keep one time reference ('now' or 'nowadays'), use 'because' for reason, and prefer 'high school student' and 'much free time'.

× I would love to see more parks or trees in the city which can helps decrease the air pollution and the air can be fresher.

✓ I would love to see more parks and trees in the city, which can help reduce air pollution and make the air fresher.

Type ID:4 and 13. Error: 'can helps' mixes modal with incorrect verb form; awkward phrase 'the air can be fresher'. Reason: after modal 'can' the base verb 'help' is required; use 'reduce' not 'decrease' for pollution and 'make the air fresher' is natural. Suggestion: use 'can help reduce' and 'make the air fresher', and use 'and' instead of 'or' if both parks and trees are intended.

× In the future, if I have free time or if I have a chance, I would love to go to the National Park of my city as people always reveal that the air and the environment there is really good.

✓ In the future, if I have free time or the chance, I would love to go to my city's national park because people always say that the air and the environment there are really good.

Type ID:5 and 11. Error: inappropriate verb 'reveal' for reporting speech and singular/plural agreement 'the air and the environment there is'. Reason: 'reveal' is incorrect for 'people say' or 'people report'; compound subject 'air and environment' requires plural verb 'are'. Suggestion: use 'say' or 'report' and change 'is' to 'are'; shorten 'if I have free time or the chance' for fluency.