Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct basic grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and article use, and avoid repetition. Aim for 2–4 sentences, for example: state you rarely went, then give one clear memory and feeling.

예시: I rarely went to parks as a child, but when I did I was very happy because it felt special. For example, I remember playing hide-and-seek with my neighbourhood friends and laughing for hours, which made those visits memorable.

제안: Organise the answer with a topic sentence and clearly label reasons using linking words (first, second). Fix grammar (use correct articles, plural/singular, verb forms) and be specific about activities you do in parks. Keep to 2–4 sentences to sound natural and fluent.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. First, because Hong Kong has little green space, parks give me a rare chance to breathe fresh air and relax. Second, visiting parks makes up for my childhood lack of outdoor play, so I always feel refreshed afterwards.

제안: Give a clear direct answer then support with one or two concise, specific reasons. Use correct adjectives and countable/uncountable nouns (e.g., 'green spaces' not 'a lot of plant'). Avoid filler words. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I would. Hong Kong is very densely populated with many high‑rises, so we lack green spaces for people to enjoy nature. More parks would improve residents' wellbeing and provide places for exercise.

제안: Avoid hesitation phrases and correct grammar (questions→question, 'that's in my bucket list', 'scenery is'). State the park clearly and give one specific reason why you want to visit. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'for example' or 'because'.

예시: One park I'd like to visit is the National Park near Beijing because people say its scenery is breathtaking. For example, I've seen photos of dramatic mountains and lakes, so I would go there on a long holiday to hike and take photos.

× To be honest, I didn't have much chance going to the park when I was a child, but if I did have the chance then I will extremely happy because it was an unusual thing for me and I can have fun with my friends, like playing hide and seek and playing the slice.

✓ To be honest, I didn't have many chances to go to the park when I was a child, but if I had had the chance then I would have been extremely happy because it was an unusual thing for me and I could have fun with my friends, like playing hide-and-seek and playing on the slides.

Multiple past-tense and modal sequence errors: 'didn't have much chance' should be 'didn't have many chances' (count noun and quantifier). 'going to the park' should be the infinitive 'to go' after 'chance'. The conditional refers to a past unreal situation, so 'if I did have the chance' should be 'if I had had the chance' or simpler 'if I had had the chance' and result clause should use conditional perfect 'would have been' rather than 'will'. 'can have fun' should be past ability 'could have fun'. Also 'playing hide and seek' should be hyphenated 'hide-and-seek' and 'playing the slice' is incorrect; use 'playing on the slides'. Suggest practicing past unreal conditionals (third conditional), correct quantifiers with countable nouns, and verb forms after 'chance'.

× Yeah. So as a child I did enjoy going to the. The park.

✓ Yes. So as a child I did enjoy going to the park.

There is an interrupting fragment and a duplicated article 'the.' Combine the fragments into one complete sentence 'I did enjoy going to the park.' Remove the extra period and duplicate 'The.' Ensure sentences are continuous for clarity.

× Yes, definitely and there are two main reasons and the first reason is that because in Hong Kong we don't have much green space and so there is a very few opportunities for us to you know, enjoy the greenery or to take a brief uh in the fresh air so uh, every time when I have chance to go to the park, I. Enjoyed it very much.

✓ Yes, definitely, and there are two main reasons. The first reason is that in Hong Kong we don't have much green space, so there are very few opportunities for us to enjoy the greenery or to take a brief break in the fresh air, so every time I have a chance to go to the park, I enjoy it very much.

Errors: 'there is a very few opportunities' should be 'there are very few opportunities' because 'opportunities' is plural and uses 'few' not 'a few' with correct verb agreement. 'to take a brief uh in the fresh air' likely intended 'to take a brief break in the fresh air.' Tense inconsistency: 'every time when I have chance... I. Enjoyed it' should be present habit 'I enjoy it.' Suggestions: match plural subjects with plural verbs, choose 'few' vs 'a few' correctly, and use consistent present tense for habitual actions.

× And the second reason is that it is kind of a compensation for my childhood because I did not have much chances when I was young.

✓ And the second reason is that it is kind of a compensation for my childhood because I did not have many chances when I was young.

Use 'many' with countable plural noun 'chances' rather than 'much.' 'Did not have many chances' is the correct past negative form. Practice quantifiers: 'many' with countable nouns, 'much' with uncountable.

× As I mentioned, Hong Kong is a very highly densely populated, uh, city.

✓ As I mentioned, Hong Kong is a very densely populated city.

Both 'highly' and 'very' are redundant together and word order is incorrect: use either 'highly' or 'very' but 'densely populated' is the correct phrase. 'Highly densely populated' is ungrammatical. Suggest using one intensifier ('very densely populated' or 'highly populated').

× So we have a lot of skyscrapers, high rises, so that we don't have a lot of plant or forest or parks that people can enjoy the nature.

✓ So we have a lot of skyscrapers and high-rises, so we don't have many plants, forests, or parks where people can enjoy nature.

Use plural forms for countable nouns: 'plants' and 'forests.' Use 'many' with countable nouns instead of 'a lot of' repeated. 'Enjoy the nature' should be 'enjoy nature' or 'enjoy the natural environment.' Also 'high rises' should be hyphenated 'high-rises.' Suggest using parallel lists and correct pluralization.

× So if there is a chance that people can have more park, I must definitely say yes.

✓ So if there is a chance for more parks, I would definitely say yes.

'People can have more park' is unidiomatic and 'park' should be plural 'parks.' The conditional is hypothetical so use 'would' for the response 'I would definitely say yes.' 'Must' is too strong for this context. Suggest using 'if there is a chance for' or 'if there could be more parks'.

× Uh, this is a tricky questions and yeah, I do have some parks that's in my basket list like, uh, the National Park in Beijing and people said it was gorgeous and fabulous and the scenes is just so breathtaking that you can never forget if you go there.

✓ Uh, this is a tricky question, and yeah, I do have some parks that are on my bucket list, like the national parks in Beijing. People say they are gorgeous and the scenery is just so breathtaking that you can never forget it if you go there.

Multiple errors: 'questions' should be singular 'question.' 'parks that's in my basket list' should be 'parks that are on my bucket list.' 'Basket list' is incorrect collocation; correct term is 'bucket list.' 'The National Park in Beijing' may need plural or specific name; changed to 'national parks in Beijing' for generality. 'People said it was' should be present 'people say they are' for general statements. 'The scenes is' should be 'the scenery is' and 'it' refers to scenery. Suggest learning correct collocations and agreement between pronouns and antecedents.

× So yeah, if I have chance or if I. Have long holidays then I will definitely in the uh, go there and have a look.

✓ So yeah, if I have the chance or if I have long holidays, then I will definitely go there and have a look.

Missing article 'the' before 'chance.' Extra filler and misplaced 'in the uh' should be removed. Use infinitive 'go there' after modal 'will' not 'in the go.' Keep structure: 'if I have the chance... I will go.' Suggest practicing conditional sentence structure and eliminating filler words.