Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response grammatically correct, more concise, and include a clear topic sentence plus one supporting detail. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use past tense consistently and a linking word to connect sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because they were a safe place to run and play with my friends. For example, we often raced around the playground and played tag, which made weekends fun and active.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (present tense), and use linking words to connect ideas. Replace vague phrases with specific benefits of visiting parks and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax from busy city life. For instance, when I walk there I can clear my mind, reduce stress, and have relaxed conversations with friends.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, use specific reasons and linking words, and fix grammar. Mention concrete benefits of more parks (health, environment, community) to make the answer more persuasive.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are many shops and busy roads and few places to walk. More parks would improve air quality, provide safe places for exercise, and give residents places to relax and meet neighbors.

제안: Respond with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and add specific reasons why you want to visit (features, activities, reputation). Use linking words to explain curiosity or expectations.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Seoul Forest in Seongsu because it is well known and popular with tourists. In particular, I'm curious about its walking trails, deer enclosure, and art installations, and I hope to see how it differs from local parks.

× Yes I love to going to parks when I was child because I love to run away very man run away with my friends.

✓ Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child because I loved running around a lot with my friends.

The phrase 'love to going' mixes infinitive and -ing form; use either 'love to go' or 'love going'. Past time 'when I was child' requires past tense 'loved' and article 'a child'. 'run away' means escape; context needs 'run around' or 'run a lot'. Also 'very man' is incorrect; use 'a lot' or 'very much'. Ensure verb tense matches past time. Suggestions: use 'loved going', use 'a child', replace 'run away' with 'run around' or 'played' and use 'a lot' for frequency.

× So the umm good place to run was the park.

✓ So the good place to run was the park.

The sentence is mostly correct but contains a hesitation filler 'umm' which should be removed in written form. The verb 'was' correctly matches past context. Suggestion: remove filler words for clarity.

× So I enjoyed visiting parks.

✓ I enjoyed visiting parks.

The original contains an extra 'So' which is acceptable informally but unnecessary. Tense 'enjoyed' correctly matches past context. Suggestion: keep concise: 'I enjoyed visiting parks.'.

× I should say yes, I like going to parks now because now I'm living in very busy plants.

✓ I should say yes, I like going to parks now because I live in a very busy place.

Use simple present 'I live' for current state rather than 'I'm living' (both possible but simple present is more natural here). 'plants' is incorrect word; likely 'place'. Add article 'a' before 'very busy place'. Suggestion: use 'I live in a very busy place.'.

× But while I I working walking in the parks I can refresh my stress and talk with my friends.

✓ But while I am walking in the park, I can relieve my stress and talk with my friends.

Missing auxiliary 'am' for present continuous: 'I am walking'. There is a duplicate 'I'. Use singular 'park' or 'the park' consistently. 'Refresh my stress' is incorrect collocation; use 'relieve my stress' or 'refresh myself'. Suggestion: use 'while I am walking in the park' and 'relieve my stress'.

× So it's a healing time.

✓ So it's a healing time for me.

The phrase 'healing time' is understandable but adding 'for me' clarifies meaning. Alternatively, use 'It is relaxing' or 'It is therapeutic.' Suggestion: use clearer adjective like 'relaxing' or add 'for me'.

× Yes, I want to see more parks in my city because in my case there are lots of stores and cars, so there is not good place to walk with in a good place.

✓ Yes, I want to see more parks in my city because where I live there are lots of stores and cars, so there is not a good place to walk.

'In my case' is awkward; use 'where I live'. Missing article 'a' before 'good place'. 'walk with in a good place' is incorrect word order; should be 'a good place to walk'. Remove redundant 'in a good place'. Suggestion: 'where I live' and 'a good place to walk'.

× So I think it will be good for many.

✓ So I think it would be good for many people.

The pronoun 'many' requires a noun 'people' to be clear. Use 'would' for a polite hypothesis about future provision. Suggestion: 'it would be good for many people.'.

× Oh yes, I would like to go to Seoul Forest in Sunsu because it's very famous parks that foreigners visiting in Korea, but I've never been to there, so it's very curious how it looks like.

✓ Oh yes, I would like to go to Seoul Forest in Seongsu because it's a very famous park that foreigners visit in Korea, but I've never been there, so I'm curious what it looks like.

'Sunsu' is likely 'Seongsu' (proper noun correction). 'parks' should be singular 'park' with article 'a'. Relative clause: 'that foreigners visiting in Korea' needs verb: 'that foreigners visit in Korea'. 'been to there' is wrong order; say 'been there' or 'been to it'. 'very curious how it looks like' is incorrect: say 'curious what it looks like' or 'very curious about how it looks'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions and clause structures: 'a famous park that foreigners visit', 'I've never been there', 'I'm curious what it looks like'.