Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and precise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (past tense), avoid repetition, and give one specific supporting detail. Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I did. I enjoyed going to parks as a child because we didn’t have many places to play near our home, so my friends and I often spent entire afternoons there playing games and having picnics.

제안: Respond directly with correct verb forms, avoid filler words, and add a specific detail and linking phrase to make your answer coherent. Limit to about 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. For example, I sometimes meet a friend there to have coffee and chat for an hour or two, which helps us relax after a busy day.

제안: Answer directly, use correct tense, and explain why with a concrete reason. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' and avoid hesitations. Be concise and specific about distance and problems caused.

예시: Yes, I would. Although there are a few parks near my home, they are still quite far, so I have to walk for about 20 minutes; this is difficult in hot summer weather, so more nearby parks would be helpful.

제안: Stay on topic: the examiner asked about parks, so either mention a park you want to visit or explain why you'd prefer mountains. Use correct grammar and clear linking words, and give one specific detail about where or when.

예시: Rather than a park, I would like to visit a national park with mountains in the future. For example, I dream of hiking in the nearby mountain national park next spring because the scenery and fresh air would be wonderful.

× I think yes, I did. I like, I like going to parks when I was a child because there it's not so many purses to play in my place. So I often went to park.

✓ I think yes, I did. I liked going to parks when I was a child because there weren't so many places to play near my home. So I often went to the park.

Mixed tenses and wrong word choices: The question asked about the past, so use past tense 'liked' and 'went'. 'There it's not so many purses' has multiple errors: 'there' and 'it's' are incorrect for stating nonexistence in the past; use 'there weren't' (past 'there be' construction). 'purses' should be 'places'. 'in my place' should be 'near my home' or 'in my area'. Also include the definite article 'the park' for a specific park the speaker visited. Suggestion: Keep past-tense verbs consistent and choose correct nouns and articles.

× Yes, I'm like going parks these days as well. Uh, because I sometime go to the parks with my friend as we have the coffee or tea and just talk there for a long time.

✓ Yes, I like going to parks these days as well. Uh, because I sometimes go to the parks with my friends and we have coffee or tea and just talk there for a long time.

Incorrect verb form and pluralization: 'I'm like' is incorrect—use present simple 'I like' for habitual present. 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb of frequency). 'my friend' should be plural 'my friends' if referring to more than one; if singular, use 'my friend' and singular verb agreement. 'have the coffee or tea' should be 'have coffee or tea' (no definite article). Suggestion: Use present simple for routines, correct adverb forms, ensure noun number matches meaning, and omit unnecessary articles.

× Ah, yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. Uh, there are some parks near my house, but it's not close. So I had, I have to walk a little bit long time, which is kind of hard in this summer day.

✓ Ah, yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. Uh, there are some parks near my house, but they are not very close. So I have to walk a bit for a long time, which is kind of hard on a summer day.

Several errors: 'it's not close' wrongly uses 'it' and contraction; refer to 'they are not very close' because 'parks' is plural (there be and pronoun agreement). 'I had, I have to' mixes tenses—use present 'I have to'. 'a little bit long time' is unidiomatic; use 'walk a bit for a long time' or better 'walk a long way'. 'in this summer day' should be 'on a summer day'. Suggestion: Match plural subjects with plural pronouns, keep tense consistent, use natural time/place prepositions ('on a summer day'), and choose idiomatic expressions for duration/distance.

× It's not the park but I would love to go to the mountains return. The scenery seems to be very beautiful and it's one of my dream to climb the beautiful mountains there future.

✓ It's not the park, but I would love to return to the mountains. The scenery seems to be very beautiful, and it's one of my dreams to climb the beautiful mountains there in the future.

Multiple sentence structure and word choice errors: 'go to the mountains return' has incorrect word order—place 'return' after the verb phrase: 'return to the mountains'. 'it's one of my dream' needs plural 'dreams'. 'there future' incorrect phrase; use 'there in the future'. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use correct verb order, pluralize countable nouns, and include prepositional phrase 'in the future' for time reference.