Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: give a brief topic sentence then add one specific reason or example to support it. Avoid repeating the same idea. Use linking words for clarity.

예시: No, I didn't enjoy parks as a child. I preferred indoor activities like reading and drawing because I found them more relaxing, so I rarely joined friends at playgrounds.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and add a concise reason or contrast. Don't repeat previous statements; instead refer briefly and expand with a specific detail.

예시: No, I still don't. I prefer staying at home because I enjoy hobbies like cooking and watching films, which are easier to do indoors.

제안: Use a balanced response: state your view then give specific reasons and use linking words (however, but, because). Avoid repeating earlier points; focus on consequences or benefits for others.

예시: I don't particularly need more parks, but I would welcome them because they offer families a safe place to exercise and socialize. However, as someone who prefers indoor activities, I probably wouldn't use them often.

제안: Answer directly and give a clear contrast with specific reasons. Use linking words (but, however, because) and give a short example of what appeals to you about theme parks.

예시: I wouldn't visit ordinary city parks, but I might go to a theme park because I enjoy rides and live shows. For example, a theme park with roller coasters and interactive exhibits would be more exciting for me.

× I don't mind seeing more parks in my city, but just like I said again, I don't like going to parks so that does not really matter to me.

✓ I don't mind having more parks in my city, but as I said, I don't like going to parks, so that does not really matter to me.

The original sentence uses 'seeing more parks' which is unnatural; 'having more parks' matches intended meaning (incorrect verb choice under sentence structure). Also 'just like I said again' is redundant and awkward; 'as I said' is clearer. Add a comma before 'so' to separate clauses. Suggestion: use natural collocations ('have parks') and avoid redundancy; punctuate compound sentences correctly. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I didn't like any outdoor activities.

✓ I didn't like any outdoor activities.

This sentence is grammatically correct; 'like' followed by noun phrase 'any outdoor activities' is appropriate and needs no change. No error under the listed types. Grammar problem type ID:8

× But having more parks might be good for other people or families who like going to parks on the weekends.

✓ But having more parks might be good for other people or families who like going to parks on the weekends.

Sentence is correct: 'families who like' correctly uses plural subject with base verb 'like'. No third person singular error. No change needed. Grammar problem type ID:2

× If you are talking about those ordinary parks in the cities, then I don't want to go to any of them.

✓ If you are talking about ordinary city parks, then I don't want to go to any of them.

Original 'those ordinary parks in the cities' is wordy and 'the cities' is vague; not strictly a pronoun error but awkward noun phrase. Rephrase to 'ordinary city parks' for natural English. Pronoun 'them' correctly refers to 'parks' so no pronoun error; this suggestion improves clarity and concision. Grammar problem type ID:12

× But if you're talking about the theme parks, I might consider going there because that sounds a lot more fun.

✓ But if you're talking about theme parks, I might consider going to one because that sounds a lot more fun.

Original uses 'going there' which could imply a specific theme park previously mentioned; 'going to one' clarifies choosing a theme park. Modal 'might' is appropriate. Also 'the theme parks' is less natural than 'theme parks' in this context. Suggestion: use 'one' to refer to a singular instance when speaking generally. Grammar problem type ID:4