Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (past tense, subject-verb agreement), and concise supporting detail. Keep it under five sentences and avoid repetition. For example, say when you went, with whom, and one specific reason or memory to make the answer more vivid.

예시: Yes. I loved going to parks with my parents and grandparents when I was a child because we often had picnics and played games there. I remember flying kites and feeding ducks, which made those days very happy and memorable.

제안: Start with a direct statement, use correct present tense and complete sentences, and explain briefly why parks help you (use linking words like 'because' or 'so'). Avoid fillers and repetition. Be specific about what you do in parks to relieve stress.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, especially here in Paris, because I often walk alone to relax. For example, I sit on a bench, listen to birds, and read a book, which helps me reduce stress and clear my mind.

제안: Give a clear yes/no answer and support it with a simple reason and one specific detail. Fix vocabulary and sentence structure. If you mean there are not enough parks, say so and explain why more parks would help (e.g., for recreation, exercise). Use one linking word like 'because' to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are few green spaces near where I live. More parks would provide places for exercise and family activities, and they would improve air quality and community life.

제안: Answer directly and be specific about which parks or countries you want to visit and why. Use correct future forms (I would like to/ I want to) and give one or two reasons. Keep it concise and avoid repeating words.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit parks abroad in the future, such as national parks in Australia or the United States. For example, I want to see the Blue Mountains in Australia for the scenery and visit Yellowstone in the US for its geothermal features and wildlife.

× When I was child I likes going to part with my family or my grandparents because in I was child I'm so happy when I go to parks.

✓ When I was a child, I liked going to parks with my family or my grandparents because when I was a child I was very happy when I went to parks.

Multiple issues: missing article before 'child' and 'a park' (Article errors, ID 22), incorrect verb tense and subject-verb agreement ('likes' should be 'liked' for past tense and agreement, Third person singular/ Past tense IDs 2 and 5), wrong word 'part' should be 'park' (word choice, treated here as sentence structure, ID 26), and incoherent clause 'because in I was child' should be 'because when I was a child'. Suggestion: add 'a' before 'child', use past simple consistently for past habits (liked, went), correct vocabulary to 'park', and simplify clauses for clarity.

× Yes, I do, because I'm in Paris. I like going to park all by myself because it's very, very. Important when I when I stress.

✓ Yes, I do, because I'm in Paris. I like going to the park all by myself because it's very important when I feel stressed.

Errors: missing definite article before 'park' (Article errors, ID 22), awkward punctuation and word order 'very, very. Important' (Sentence structure, ID 26), and incorrect verb form 'when I stress' should be 'when I feel stressed' (incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and verb forms, IDs 13 and 6). Suggestion: use 'the park' for a general habitual location, combine 'very important' correctly, and express emotional state with 'feel stressed' or 'am stressed'.

× Yes, I want, but in my con city parts is so many so so syndicate in my con my city, it's that my parks in my city maybe around.

✓ Yes, I do want more, but in my country/city there are not many parks; the parks in my city are small and few.

This sentence has many problems: unclear words 'con' (country?) and 'parts' (parks), incorrect word order and missing plural agreement, and wrong verb placement 'is so many' instead of 'there are not many' (There be issue, ID 3; Singular/plural and subject-verb agreement, IDs 1 and 27). Also 'syndicate' is incorrect vocabulary. Suggestion: choose correct nouns ('country' or 'city', 'parks'), use 'there are' for existence, and state the idea simply: 'there are not many parks' or 'the parks are small and few'.

× Maybe in my future I want go to parks in any country, the example like like in Australia or US I like, I wish that I can go there.

✓ Maybe in the future I want to go to parks in other countries, for example in Australia or the US. I hope I can go there.

Errors: missing 'to' after 'want' (Verb structure, ID 8), awkward phrase 'in my future' should be 'in the future' (Article/phrasing, IDs 22 and 26), incorrect repetition and capitalization 'US' needs 'the', and modality 'I wish that I can' is incorrect — use 'I hope I can' (Modal verb usage, ID 4). Suggestion: use 'want to go', 'in the future', 'for example', and 'I hope I can' to express desire for future trips.