Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify tense and organize into a short clear response. Start with a direct topic sentence about your childhood preference, then give one specific reason. Use correct past tense and avoid repetition. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, I didn't like going to parks as a child. My family lived in a rural area and the nearest park was far from our house, so I usually stayed home and played with my siblings instead.

제안: Good content and clear reason. Improve by correcting minor grammar (plural and articles), adding a linking word, and making the final clause more concise. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy going to parks now because I moved to an urban area and there aren't many green spaces near my home. Therefore, the park is a peaceful place to relax; I especially like walking there and watching people and wildlife to unwind.

제안: Make a direct statement and give one clear specific benefit. Remove filler sounds (uh) and correct grammar (verb forms, articles, and word order). Use a linking phrase to connect reason and result.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because I could go for long walks there a couple of times a week, and the changing scenery helps me unwind after a busy day.

제안: The answer is unclear and off-topic. Directly name a park or type of park you'd like to visit and give one specific detail about the experience you expect. Correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., 'safari parks', 'ride elephants' is sensitive — better say 'see elephants'). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit a safari park in Thailand on my next holiday. I hope to see wild elephants and other animals from a safe vehicle and enjoy the natural scenery with my family.

× No I don't like going to the park when I was joy because my how near my house in the in rural area is the is the nearest the park. I always stay at home play.

✓ No, I didn't like going to the park when I was young because the nearest park was far from my house in the rural area. I always stayed at home and played.

This sentence has multiple structure and tense problems. Use past tense for habits in childhood (didn't like, was young, stayed, played). Remove redundant words and place clauses in correct order: describe being young, then explain location of the park. Use 'nearest park was far from my house' rather than the original confusing phrasing. Use conjunction 'and' to connect two verbs 'stayed and played'.

× Yes, I like going to park now because I moved to an urban area and there aren't many green space near my home so the park is a peaceful place to relax. I especially enjoy walking there and watching people and nature which help me.

✓ Yes, I like going to the park now because I moved to an urban area and there aren't many green spaces near my home, so the park is a peaceful place to relax. I especially enjoy walking there and watching people and nature, which helps me.

Several present-tense and agreement errors: use 'the park' with the definite article. Use plural 'green spaces' to match 'many'. Use a comma before 'so' joining independent clauses. 'Which' clause refers to the singular subject 'watching people and nature' as an activity; treat it as singular with 'helps me'. Alternatively rephrase to 'they help me' if referring to 'people and nature'.

× Yes, I enjoy to, I enjoy seeing more parks in my city because uh, the park used to go for a long walks there uh, A2 time a week and watch people and change scenery, help me unwind after busy day.

✓ Yes, I would enjoy seeing more parks in my city because I used to go for long walks there about twice a week to watch people and enjoy the changing scenery; it helped me unwind after a busy day.

Incorrect verb forms and awkward phrasing. Use 'enjoy seeing' (verb + -ing) or 'would enjoy'. 'Used to go' indicates past habit. Replace 'A2 time a week' with 'about twice a week'. Use infinitive 'to watch' or gerund 'watching' consistently. 'Change scenery' should be 'changing scenery'. Use past tense 'helped' to match 'used to'. Add articles ('a busy day').

× I am learning to the Safari pass in in Thailand for holiday. Next holiday with my family I can experience the with the elephant and ride elephant and sometimes see every.

✓ I am planning to visit a safari park in Thailand for a holiday. On the next holiday with my family I can experience being with elephants, ride an elephant, and see many animals.

Several present-tense and vocabulary errors. Use 'planning to visit' or 'going to' instead of 'learning to the Safari pass'. 'Safari park' is the correct noun. Use articles 'a holiday' and 'the next holiday'. 'Experience being with elephants' clarifies meaning. Use parallel verbs 'ride an elephant, and see many animals'. 'See every' is incorrect; use 'many animals'. Overall adjust tense and word choice for clarity.