Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more organized: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid short unclear fragments and incorrect word choices (e.g. "parts" → "park"). Use linking words (for example, "for example" or "also") to connect details.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my family often visited Zhongxing Park, which is famous for its large dragon sculpture. We would have picnics there and my parents would push me on the swings, so those visits are one of my fondest memories.

제안: Give a concise direct answer and follow with specific reasons using linking words. Reduce hesitations and repetition; use correct grammar ("there are many pressures," "to relax myself" → "to relax"). Limit to three sentences.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I often go there to relax because university and part-time work can be stressful, and the green space helps me clear my mind. Also, walking in the park improves my mood and energy.

제안: Answer directly and give specific reasons and examples. Correct vocabulary ("parks," "areas," "green spaces") and grammar ("there are many parks" not "is many"). Use linking words like "because" or "for example" to explain why more parks would help the community.

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide green space for exercise and socializing. For example, if there were small parks near every neighbourhood, people could walk there instead of driving, which would improve health and community life.

제안: Respond with a clear topic sentence naming the park type, then give specific reasons and one supporting detail. Fix word choice ("water park") and avoid repetition. Use a linking word like "because" to show cause.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit a water park in the future because summers here are very hot. For instance, sliding and swimming at a water park would be a fun way to cool down with friends and relax on hot weekends.

× When I was a child, I enjoyed the time with my parents to go to a park.

✓ When I was a child, I enjoyed spending time with my parents going to the park.

The original uses incorrect prepositional and verb forms: 'enjoyed the time with' is unnatural; use 'enjoyed spending time with'. Also 'to go to a park' is better as a participle clause 'going to the park' to show habitual activity. Use 'the park' when referring to a known local park. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 11)

× There is a famous park in our city.

✓ There is a famous park in our city.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but can be kept as is; no article change needed. However, if referring to a specific known park earlier, you could say 'There is a famous park in our city called Zhongxing Park.' This suggestion improves specificity. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 22)

× It's named Zhongxing Parts for their highways.

✓ It's called Zhongxing Park because of its historic role near the highway.

'Named Zhongxing Parts' is incorrect: 'parts' should be 'park' and 'named' is followed by the name; 'for their highways' is unclear and ungrammatical. Use 'called' and clarify the reason with a prepositional phrase. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 13)

× Big dragon in these parts.

✓ There is a big dragon in the park.

Original lacks a verb and has unclear noun phrases. Add 'There is' to form a complete sentence and specify the location 'in the park'. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 26)

× It's a symbol of our city.

✓ It is a symbol of our city.

Grammatically fine; contraction expanded for formality. No pronoun error, but keep as 'It is' for clarity. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 12)

× Uh, for sure when, uh, I, I'm now about 20 years old, but I still like to go to park to relax myself.

✓ I am now about 20 years old, but I still like to go to the park to relax.

The original has disfluent fillers and missing articles: 'go to park' should be 'go to the park'. 'Relax myself' is unnecessary; native usage is 'relax'. Remove filler words and contractions for clarity. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 26)

× Uh, when there is so many pressures and so many work to do, I would like to go to park to relax myself to get a better, uh, moods to.

✓ When there is so much pressure and so much work to do, I like to go to the park to relax and improve my mood.

'Many' is used with count nouns; 'pressure' and 'work' are uncountable so use 'much'. 'Go to park' needs the article 'the park'. 'Relax myself' is awkward; use 'relax'. 'Moods' should be singular 'mood'. Remove extraneous 'to'. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 14)

× Umm, yes, I want to see more parks in my city, uh, as though, as there is many parts around my neighborhood, but everybody want more parts, right?

✓ Yes, I want to see more parks in my city. There are many parks around my neighborhood, but everyone wants more parks, right?

Use plural 'parks' consistently. 'There is many' is incorrect; use 'there are many' for plural. 'Everybody want' should be 'everyone wants' for subject-verb agreement. Replace 'parts' with 'parks'. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 22)

× Uh, for uh, more beautiful sizes in our daily lives.

✓ They make our daily lives more beautiful.

Original fragment is awkward and lacks a clear subject and verb. Provide a complete sentence with subject 'They' (parks) and verb 'make' and correct word order. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 27)

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

✓ Are there any parks you would like to visit in the future?

Original is understandable but 'would like to visit' is a more natural, polite phrasing for future preferences. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 26)

× Yes, I do have one kind of party I want to go in the future.

✓ Yes, I do have one kind of park I want to go to in the future.

'Party' is a wrong word here; the student means 'park'. Also add the preposition 'to' after 'go'. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 12)

× I want to go water park, water part because in summer it's really hot in our city and I think what what park can help people relax themselves in such hot day and help.

✓ I want to go to a water park because it is really hot in our city in summer, and I think a water park can help people relax on such hot days.

Missing article before 'water park' — use 'a water park' and include the preposition 'to' after 'go'. Correct 'part' to 'park'. 'Relax themselves' is unnecessary; use 'relax'. Use 'days' plural and 'on such hot days' for correct preposition. Remove duplicated 'what'. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 22)