Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は直接的で好印象ですが、文法と流暢さに改善の余地があります。例えば、冠詞（a／the）の使い方、非流暢なフィラー（uh）の削減、文の連結を明確にすることが必要です。また、Supporting detail（いつ、なぜ好きだったか）を1〜2文で自然につなげると良いでしょう。発話は5文以内に収め、繋ぎの表現（when I was about 7, becauseなど）を使って自然に述べてください。

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I especially enjoyed the swings when I was about seven because they made me feel free and excited. I would spend hours pushing myself higher while my friends watched. Those memories still make me smile.

제안: 回答は簡潔で的を射ていますが、冠詞と語順、語彙選択の改善が必要です。また、”when”節と結果の関係を明確にするために接続詞を使い、フィラー（UH）を避けてください。より具体的な描写（犬が何をするか、あなたが何を感じるか）を付け加えると内容が豊かになります。

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, especially with my dog. When she runs and chases balls, she gets visibly excited, which makes me happy too. I often sit on a bench and watch her play for half an hour.

제안: 主張は明確ですが、文が途切れて不完全です。理由を完全な文で述べ、結果や感情を具体的に説明してください。冠詞の誤り（more parks / my city）を直し、理由→説明→感情の順で論理的に繋げる表現（because, so, thereforeなど）を使いましょう。

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are many tall buildings and few green spaces. More parks would improve air quality and give people a place to relax, which would reduce stress for residents.

제안: この回答は意味が不明瞭で文法的に多くの誤りがあります（pack→park、構文の混乱）。まず簡潔に「行きたい公園がない」か「推薦を聞きたい」と明確に答えてから、理由を付け加えてください。相手に推薦を求める場合は丁寧な表現（Could you recommend…?）を使い、1〜2文で完結させましょう。

예시: I don't have a specific park in mind at the moment, but I'd love some recommendations. Could you suggest a good park nearby and tell me what it's like, so I can decide where to visit?

× Yes, I liked going to park as a child especially I loved swings when I was uh, around 7 years. I always. Enjoyed the swings?

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park as a child. Especially, I loved the swings when I was around seven years old. I always enjoyed the swings.

The sentence omits the definite article 'the' before 'park' and 'swings' needs 'the' in context. Also sentence fragments and punctuation issues: 'I always. Enjoyed the swings?' should be combined into a single declarative sentence. Use 'seven years old' for age and remove filler 'uh'. Suggestions: add 'the' before singular places when specific (the park), use complete sentences and correct punctuation. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× Yes, I like going to park, especially with my dog.

✓ Yes, I like going to the park, especially with my dog.

The noun 'park' refers to a specific place type and requires the definite article 'the' in this context. Suggestion: use 'the park' when speaking about going to parks in general contexts like this. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× When my dog plays in the parks, she seems to be excited with UH.

✓ When my dog plays in the park, she seems to be excited.

Use singular 'the park' to match common usage; 'in the parks' is odd when referring to the usual place. 'Excited with' is unnatural; use 'excited' alone or 'excited about'. Remove filler 'UH'. Suggestion: 'plays in the park' and 'she seems excited' or 'she seems to be excited about it.' Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Yes, I would like to see more park in our in my city because. There are a lot of buildings around here.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are a lot of buildings around here.

Plural noun needed: 'more park' → 'more parks'. Also remove duplicate 'our in my' and join clauses: 'because there are...' instead of sentence fragment. Suggestion: use plural after 'more', and ensure pronoun consistency 'my city'. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× The green in the park makes me feel.

✓ The greenery in the park makes me feel relaxed.

Original sentence is incomplete ('makes me feel' needs a complement). 'The green' is unnatural; use 'the greenery' or 'the green space'. Provide an emotion or state after 'makes me feel'. Suggestion: complete the sentence with an appropriate adjective (e.g., relaxed, calm). Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Unfortunately I don't have the pack which I want to go, so I would like you to the recommendation and the give you some and give some reasons.

✓ Unfortunately, I don't have a specific park in mind that I want to go to, so I would like you to give me some recommendations and I will give some reasons.

Many pronoun and word choice errors: 'the pack' should be 'a specific park' or 'a park'; 'which I want to go' should be 'that I want to go to'; 'I would like you to the recommendation and the give you some and give some reasons' is confused. Correct structure: 'I would like you to give me some recommendations, and I will give some reasons.' Suggestions: use correct relative pronoun 'that' and ending preposition 'to', 'give me recommendations', and proper sentence order. Grammar problem type ID: 12